Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then add one specific reason or example. Avoid repeating synonyms (simple, cozy and comfortable are similar). Use one or two supporting details with a linking word to make it more informative.

例: I prefer simple, comfortable clothes. For example, I often wear cotton T-shirts and soft joggers because they are breathable and let me move freely when I study or go out.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and add a specific reason and a linking phrase. Replace vague phrase “around the day” with “during the day” and mention a clear context (work, home, travel) to enrich content.

例: I prefer comfortable casual clothes during the day, especially T-shirts and loose trousers, because they keep me cool and are practical when I commute or run errands.

提案: Avoid repeating 'because' at the start of sentences and correct small errors (e.g., 'around the day' → 'during the day', 'Snickers' → 'sneakers'). Use a linking word to combine ideas and give one concrete example of when you wear them.

例: Yes, I do like wearing T-shirts because I value comfort over formality; for instance, during very hot weather I usually wear a T-shirt with loose trousers and sneakers so I stay cool and comfortable.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then explain briefly why with a linking word. Correct awkward phrasing like 'on time on my basic needs' to something like 'quickly based on my basic needs'. Provide a short example of how you decide.

例: I used to spend a lot of time choosing clothes, but not anymore; now I pick outfits quickly based on my basic needs, such as choosing breathable fabrics for hot days or formal wear for meetings.

提案: Combine sentences to avoid repetition and correct vocabulary (use 'pants' not 'pent'). Provide one linking word and a brief reason for the difference (e.g., work vs. relaxation).

例: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekdays I usually wear formal outfits such as salwar kameez or pants and a shirt for work, but on weekends I prefer relaxed clothes like T-shirts and trousers to feel more comfortable.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and avoid repetitive phrasing. Use linking words to explain reasons or give an example of when you wear those colors. Correct grammar (e.g., 'basic colour scheme' and 'more often than bright colors').

例: I prefer a basic colour scheme, especially black, white and beige, because they are easy to match; for example, I often choose a white top and beige trousers for a tidy, understated look.

× I like to wear simple, cozy and comfortable clothes.

✓ I like to wear simple, cozy, and comfortable clothes.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but missing the Oxford comma for clarity in a list; add a comma before 'and' to separate items clearly. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I prefer comfortable clothes around the day like T-shirts and trousers and loose clothes.

✓ I prefer comfortable clothes during the day, such as T-shirts, trousers, and loose garments.

Use 'during the day' instead of 'around the day' for correct time expression; use 'such as' to introduce examples and add commas to separate list items. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, because I choose comfort over formality. Because these are very comfortable around the day.

✓ Yes, I choose comfort over formality because these clothes are very comfortable during the day.

Combine the two sentences to avoid starting a sentence with 'Because' as a fragment; change 'around the day' to 'during the day' and specify 'these clothes' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× In the scorching heat, I prefer to wear T-shirts and loose trousers with Snickers or slippers.

✓ In the scorching heat, I prefer to wear T-shirts and loose trousers with sneakers or slippers.

'Snickers' is a misspelling/confusion with the shoe brand; the correct word is 'sneakers'. Capitalization should be lowercase unless a proper noun. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I used to before, but not now.

✓ I used to, but not anymore.

'Used to' is correct for past habit; follow with 'anymore' rather than 'not now' for natural negation of past habit. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Now I can choose my clothes on time on my basic needs.

✓ Now I can choose my clothes on the spot based on my basic needs.

Original phrase 'on time on my basic needs' is unclear. Use 'on the spot' or 'quickly' and 'based on' to indicate criteria. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes I do. I do wear different styles of clothes on weekdays like formal salwar kameez and with pent and shirt.

✓ Yes, I do. I wear different styles on weekdays, such as formal salwar kameez and pants with shirts.

Add comma after 'Yes'; use 'such as' to introduce examples; 'pent' is a misspelling of 'pants'; 'with pants and shirt' reordered to 'pants with shirts' for natural collocation. Grammar problem type ID:11

× But on weekends I prefer comfortable clothing like T-shirts and trousers.

✓ But on weekends I prefer comfortable clothing, like T-shirts and trousers.

Add a comma before 'like' for clarity when giving examples; otherwise sentence is fine. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I like basic color theme like beige, white, black more often more than funky colors.

✓ I like a basic color theme, such as beige, white, and black, more often than bright or funky colors.

Use 'a basic color theme' and 'such as' to introduce examples; add commas in list and replace 'more than funky colors' with 'more often than bright or funky colors' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13

× But in my opinion I love black and white more than that.

✓ But in my opinion, I prefer black and white to those colors.

Use 'prefer... to...' for comparisons and replace vague 'that' with 'those colors'; add comma after introductory phrase. Grammar problem type ID:26