Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the types of clothes you prefer, then give one or two specific supporting details (occasions, fabrics, or items). Avoid unclear phrases and false starts. Use linking words like because or for example to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: I usually prefer traditional Indian clothes such as kurtas and salwar-kameez. For example, I wear kurtas made of cotton for festivals and family gatherings because they are comfortable and look smart. I sometimes choose simpler Western clothes for casual outings.

提案: Good direct answer and reason. Improve by tightening phrasing, avoiding repetition, and adding a short specific example or contrast. Use one linking word like because or so to connect reason and result.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because smart clothes feel restrictive and impractical for daily activities. For instance, I often choose jeans and a T-shirt for work commute rather than formal shirts because they’re easier to move in.

提案: Answer directly and combine short fragments into smooth sentences. Add one supporting detail about when or why you wear T-shirts (comfort, climate, style). Avoid sentence fragments.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially at home because they are comfortable. I usually pair them with pajama bottoms for relaxing on weekends.

提案: Clear answer and reason. Make it more concise and natural by using a topic sentence followed by one specific supporting detail. Remove fillers like 'umm' and repeat phrases.

例: No, I don’t spend much time choosing clothes because I have a limited wardrobe. With only a few options, I can decide quickly each morning.

提案: Clarify the contrast between weekdays and weekends. Start with a clear statement about both and give a specific reason for the change. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences; use linking words like whereas or however.

例: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekdays I usually wear more formal or professional clothes for placements and interviews, whereas at weekends I prefer T-shirts and jeans for comfort.

提案: Answer directly and combine ideas into one or two polished sentences. Give a brief reason or example why those colours appeal to you. Remove repetition and tense errors.

例: I like red and mustard colours, and I often wear a red T-shirt at home because it brightens my mood and suits my complexion.

× Usually I wear Indian clothes because I'm an Indian, so from my childhood we are being very alien. Swords and Indian kurtas and and.

✓ Usually I wear Indian clothes because I'm Indian; since my childhood we have been very traditional, wearing sarees and Indian kurtas.

Original uses incorrect continuous passive 'we are being' and wrong word 'alien' and 'Swords' likely typo for 'sarees'. This is a present-perfect continuous/state issue: use 'have been' to describe a state from the past to present. Also correct vocabulary and parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'have been' for a condition continuing from childhood and choose correct nouns (sarees).

× I prefer to wear comfortable clothes rather than smart clothes because in our day-to-day life it's very difficult to wear smart clothes and it's very difficult to carry them.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes rather than smart clothes because in our day-to-day life it's very difficult to wear smart clothes and to manage them.

Repetition 'it's very difficult' is stylistic; main issue is awkward 'carry them' — use 'manage' or 'move around in them'. Maintain present simple for habitual preference. Suggestion: simplify by keeping parallel infinitives ('to wear' and 'to manage').

× I like wearing T-shirts. At home. I usually wear T-shirts and pajamas.

✓ I like wearing T-shirts at home; I usually wear T-shirts and pajamas.

Sentence fragment 'At home.' should be attached to the main sentence. Combine into one coherent sentence using a semicolon or comma. Maintain present simple for habits.

× Actually, I don't have enough clothes, that's why I don't spend much time on choosing clothes. Umm, I have a small variety of clothes so it's easy for me to choose.

✓ Actually, I don't have many clothes, so I don't spend much time choosing them. I have a small variety of clothes, so it's easy for me to decide.

Singular/plural and quantifier issue: use 'many' for countable plural 'clothes' rather than 'enough clothes' is okay but 'don't have many clothes' is more natural. Also 'choosing clothes' better as 'choosing them' and 'decide' is more natural. Keep present simple for current facts.

× Actually on the weekend, uh, I wear T-shirts and jeans because I go to, I go for my placements and, uh, there we have to wear professionally, uh, so during.

✓ On weekends I wear T-shirts and jeans because I go for my placement activities and there we are required to dress professionally.

Original has fragmented and redundant phrases ('I go to, I go for my placements') and incorrect 'wear professionally'. Use 'dress professionally' and plural 'weekends' for habitual action. Remove trailing 'so during' fragment. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb structure and appropriate collocations ('go for placements', 'dress professionally').

× I like red and mustard color and I usually wear red T-shirt at home and it was it is my favorite T-shirt.

✓ I like red and mustard colors, and I usually wear a red T-shirt at home; it is my favorite T-shirt.

Errors: missing plural in 'colors', missing article 'a' before 'red T-shirt', and awkward tense 'it was it is'. Use present simple 'it is my favorite' for a current preference. Also combine into a single fluent sentence and maintain consistent tense.