Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

例: I usually wear a hijab and modest clothing because I am Muslim and this reflects my culture in Algeria. For example, I prefer loose dresses and long coats that make me feel comfortable and respectful. Because these clothes are practical in our hot climate, I often choose lightweight fabrics that keep me cool.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first (I prefer comfortable and casual clothes), then provide specific reasons and an example. Reduce hesitations and filler words; speak in complete sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example.'

例: I prefer comfortable and casual clothes because they help me feel relaxed and confident. For example, I often wear soft cotton dresses and sneakers when I go out, which allow me to move freely and stay comfortable all day.

提案: Answer directly with a clear statement (No, I don't usually wear T-shirts), then explain briefly why with specific details. Avoid unclear references (e.g. 'teachers') unless fully explained, and use correct grammar for negatives.

例: No, I don't usually wear T-shirts because I wear a hijab and prefer more modest clothing. For instance, I choose long-sleeved blouses and dresses that cover my arms and suit my cultural and school expectations.

提案: Start with a direct answer (Yes), then give concise reasons and one example. Avoid repeating phrases and fix word choice (e.g. 'comfortable' instead of 'relaxing'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

例: Yes, I spend a fair amount of time choosing clothes because I want to look fashionable while staying comfortable. For example, before going out I pick outfits that combine style and comfort, such as a modest dress with comfortable shoes so I can move confidently.

提案: Answer directly (No), then explain clearly with specific detail—mention routines or constraints. Reduce fillers and make the response coherent with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: No, I don't change my style much at the weekend because I am often busy and prefer simple outfits. For example, I usually wear similar modest dresses or long coats both during the week and at the weekend to save time.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence stating your preferred colours, then explain with a specific reason related to climate or effect. Avoid repetition and improve grammar (e.g. 'they make me feel relaxed').

例: I prefer white and light pink clothes because our weather in Algeria is very hot. Light colours reflect sunlight and keep me cooler, so wearing white or pink makes me feel more comfortable and confident outdoors.

× It's really relaxing for me and it's like a culture here in Algeria to be hijabi girl.

✓ It's really comfortable for me and it's part of the culture here in Algeria to be a hijabi girl.

Using 'relaxing' to describe clothing is awkward; 'comfortable' is the correct adjective. Also missing article 'a' before 'hijabi girl' and 'part of the culture' is more natural than 'like a culture'. Use 'part of the culture' and include the article.

× So I really enjoy when I wear my hijab.

✓ So I really enjoy wearing my hijab.

The verb pattern 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund (verb + -ing), not a clause starting with 'when' in this context. Use 'enjoy wearing' for correct structure.

× It's like really wonderful clothes and also I like to.

✓ They are really wonderful clothes and I like them too.

The sentence mixed singular 'It's' with plural 'clothes'. 'Clothes' is plural, so use 'They are'. Also 'I like to' is incomplete; use 'I like them too'.

× I believe that comfortable and casual, uh, clothes, clothes are, uh, really, really good, uh, are really better than, uh, any, any type of, uh, any other type of clothes.

✓ I believe that comfortable and casual clothes are much better than other types of clothing.

Remove fillers and redundancy. 'Clothes, clothes are' is repetitive. Use plural agreement 'clothes are' and 'other types of clothing' is more natural. 'Much better' is clearer than 'really, really better than any type'.

× So that's helped me to be relaxed and uh, even people can see me like, uh, like, umm.

✓ So that helps me relax and even people can see me as comfortable and confident.

Tense and pronoun usage: 'that's helped me' is awkward here; 'that helps me relax' (present simple) matches general preference. 'See me like' is incorrect; use 'see me as' + adjectives.

× And I don't like to wearing T-shirt because I told you that I'm hijabi girl.

✓ And I don't like wearing T-shirts because, as I told you, I'm a hijabi girl.

After 'don't like' use the gerund 'wearing', not 'to wearing'. Also plural 'T-shirts' is more natural, and include article 'a' before 'hijabi girl'.

× So teachers don't let me like relaxing and it's not really, really good for me.

✓ So teachers don't allow me to dress casually, and it's not really good for me.

'Let me like relaxing' is ungrammatical. Use 'allow me to dress casually' or 'let me dress casually'. 'Relaxing' is incorrect as object here.

× I so I prefer to wear like another.

✓ So I prefer to wear something else.

'I so I' is redundant and 'wear like another' is incomplete. Use 'something else' to indicate a different type of clothing.

× Absolutely I do because I like to be more fashion when I go out and in the same time in the same time I wear like clothes that make me relaxing and moving with the confident.

✓ Absolutely I do because I like to be more fashionable when I go out, and at the same time I wear clothes that make me feel relaxed and confident.

Use adjective 'fashionable' instead of 'more fashion'. Remove duplicate phrase 'in the same time'. Use 'feel relaxed and confident' rather than 'make me relaxing and moving with the confident'.

× And that's really, really helpful for me as I.

✓ And that's really helpful for me.

The fragment 'as I' is incomplete and unnecessary. Remove it to complete the sentence.

× No, I don't wear different style of clothes in weekends.

✓ No, I don't wear different styles of clothes on weekends.

Use plural 'styles' to agree with 'different' and use preposition 'on' for days or weekends: 'on weekends'.

× Uh, and uh, that's not really, really, uh, from my, uh, how do you say interest?

✓ And that's not really my preference.

The original is wordy and ungrammatical. 'Not really my preference' is a concise, correct way to express lack of interest.

× Because I don't, uh, have time to do that and I like just choose my clothes.

✓ Because I don't have time to do that and I just like to choose my clothes quickly.

'I like just choose' is incorrect order. Use 'I just like to choose' or 'I like to choose'. Adding 'quickly' clarifies reason.

× I, I like white clothes because here in Algeria there is a lot of how do we say the weather was really hot here.

✓ I like white clothes because here in Algeria the weather is very hot.

The original mixes tenses and filler phrases. Use present simple 'the weather is very hot' and remove 'there is a lot of how do we say'.

× And so I prefer to wear like pink color and white color.

✓ So I prefer to wear pink and white.

'Pink color' and 'white color' are redundant; simply use color adjectives 'pink and white'. No need for 'like'.

× It's make me relax and confident and that's really helpful for me.

✓ They make me feel relaxed and confident, and that's really helpful for me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'It' should be 'They' to refer to 'pink and white' (plural or 'clothes'). Use 'make me feel relaxed' rather than 'make me relax'.