Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and complete your final sentence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a brief reason. Use a linking word to connect the example. Avoid trailing off.

例: I prefer gothic-style clothes because they reflect my personality and emotions. For example, I usually wear dark coats and lace accessories when I go out because they help me feel confident and express myself.

提案: Good clear topic sentence and specific reason. To improve, add a linking word and one brief example of an item you wear to illustrate practicality. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable and practical clothes because I work long shifts as a photographer. For example, I often wear loose cargo pants and soft sneakers so I can move around and carry my equipment without feeling restricted.

提案: Clear comparison and balance between opinion and necessity. Improve coherence by using a linking word (however/although) and give one brief specific example of when you choose T-shirts.

例: Although I find T-shirts a bit plain and prefer more fashionable outfits, I wear them for work because they are practical. For instance, I often wear a plain T-shirt and jeans on busy shoot days for comfort and mobility.

提案: Strong structure and clear contrast. To improve further, add one linking word and a short specific example of an outfit you choose for a party to make the answer more vivid.

例: It depends on the occasion. For example, I spend a lot of time choosing a party outfit—usually a smart black dress or a tailored jacket—because I want to make a good impression. However, for grocery shopping I just wear something comfortable like jeans and a sweatshirt.

提案: Answer has a clear idea but is marred by grammar errors and an unfinished phrase. Use one topic sentence, then a linking word, then two brief specific examples (weekday outfit and weekend outfit). Correct vocabulary (swimsuit, beachwear) and grammar.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear smart-casual clothes such as a blouse and chinos for the office. On weekends I prefer relaxed beachwear, for example a swimsuit with a light cover-up when I go to the beach with my family.

提案: The content is good but the answer has disfluent fragments and small errors (capitalization, sentence fragments). Begin with a clear topic sentence, remove repeated phrases, and use linking words to contrast seasons. Provide one brief example outfit for each colour choice.

例: My preferred colours are generally darker tones like black, gray and deep red because they look smart and are easy to match. However, in summer I sometimes wear brighter colours such as pink or orange—for instance, a light pink shirt to feel more cheerful.

× ...it represents my emotions and it's more authentic to my personality. For example, when I go out, I often wear dark coats and lace accessories since they make me feel.

✓ ...it represents my emotions and it's more authentic to my personality. For example, when I go out, I often wear dark coats and lace accessories since they make me feel authentic.

The original sentence ends with 'they make me feel.' which is incomplete because 'feel' requires an adjective or complement (e.g. 'authentic'). Adding 'authentic' completes the verb phrase and clarifies the intended meaning.

× ...I prefer comfortable and practical clothes rather than smart or formal attires.

✓ ...I prefer comfortable and practical clothes rather than smart or formal attire.

'Attire' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'attires.' Using 'attire' or 'formal clothes' is correct. This fixes the quantifier/noun usage.

× Comfortable clothes let me move around easily and carry my equipment without feeling restricted.

✓ Comfortable clothes let me move around easily and carry my equipment without feeling restricted.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It uses plural 'clothes' with correct verb form 'let.' Included here to show it meets the list and requires no correction.

× To be honest, I find T-shirts a bit too plain and I usually prefer more fashionable and stylish outfits. But as my job requires, I often choose comfortable and practical clothes like T-shirts and jeans so I can move easily during the day.

✓ To be honest, I find T-shirts a bit too plain and usually prefer more fashionable and stylish outfits. But because my job requires it, I often choose comfortable and practical clothes like T-shirts and jeans so I can move easily during the day.

Reduced redundancy by removing repeated 'I' for smoother flow. Changed 'as my job requires' to 'because my job requires it' to make the clause explicit and grammatically complete.

× It really depends on the occasion. If I'm going to a party, I spend quite a lot of time choosing the most appropriate outfit because I want to make the best impression. But if I'm going grocery shopping I usually wear something comfortable and casual.

✓ It really depends on the occasion. If I'm going to a party, I spend quite a lot of time choosing the most appropriate outfit because I want to make the best impression. But if I'm going grocery shopping, I usually wear something comfortable and casual.

Added a comma after the introductory clause 'But if I'm going grocery shopping' to separate clauses and improve readability. The original lacked this comma, which can impede clarity.

× I work full time so on weekdays I usually wear smart and casual clothes for the office and on the weekends I look forward to going to the beach with my family. Thus I usually wear a swimwear and light beach where it's instead.

✓ I work full time, so on weekdays I usually wear smart-casual clothes for the office, and on weekends I look forward to going to the beach with my family. Thus I usually wear swimwear and light beachwear instead.

Multiple issues corrected: added commas for clause separation; changed 'smart and casual' to 'smart-casual' to express a combined style; 'on the weekends' simplified to 'on weekends'; 'a swimwear' is incorrect because 'swimwear' is uncountable, so drop the article; 'light beach' is incomplete — use 'light beachwear'; removed 'where it's' which was ungrammatical and unnecessary.

× As I meant. As I mentioned before, my taste in style has changed a lot. So far. I enjoy wearing darker clothes such as black, Gray and deep red because they look smart and are easy to match. But in summer, I sometimes choose brighter colors like pink or orange to feel more cheerful.

✓ As I mentioned before, my taste in style has changed a lot so far. I enjoy wearing darker clothes such as black, gray and deep red because they look smart and are easy to match. But in summer, I sometimes choose brighter colors like pink or orange to feel more cheerful.

Removed the fragmented 'As I meant.' and combined 'As I mentioned before' with 'so far' to form a coherent sentence. Corrected capitalization of 'Gray' to 'gray.' These changes fix sentence fragments and pronoun/reference clarity.