Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a specific example or brief reason using a linking word. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer casual, comfortable clothes because they let me move freely. For example, I often wear loose jeans and a soft hoodie when I go out, because they’re practical and comfortable.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: give one clear reason, use linking words (because/so), and avoid irrelevant details like sleeping unless relevant. Limit to 2–3 sentences and correct verb forms.

例: I prefer casual clothes because they allow me to move freely and feel relaxed. For instance, I usually wear T-shirts at work because they’re comfortable and reflect my style.

提案: This answer is fairly clear but check grammar and use linking words smoothly. Keep sentences concise and give a single clear example that supports your point.

例: Yes, I enjoy wearing T-shirts because they come in different designs that create different moods. For example, I bought a Sydney T-shirt on a trip, and wearing it reminds me of that visit.

提案: Make your point more precise and correct grammar. Use linking words (because/so) and give a specific detail about what you check (reviews, materials, sizes). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I spend extra time choosing clothes because I want good quality. So when I shop online I read reviews and check fabric and size charts to avoid wasting money.

提案: Finish your second sentence and be specific: contrast weekday and weekend styles with clear linking words. Correct word choice (tight → tailored) and complete the thought within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekdays I wear tailored, formal clothes for the office, but on weekends I prefer casual outfits like jeans and T-shirts to relax.

提案: Clarify vocabulary (use 'basic' or 'neutral' instead of 'simple') and avoid unclear phrases like 'velvet color' and the incomplete sentence. Give one clear reason and a brief example, using linking words.

例: I prefer neutral colours such as black and white because they’re easy to match with other clothes and look smart. For example, a white shirt pairs well with coloured skirts or jackets, so I don’t worry about clashing colours.

× I like the casual clothes because I want to move really.

✓ I like casual clothes because I want to move easily.

The original uses 'really' incorrectly to modify 'move'. 'Easily' (an adverb) correctly modifies the verb 'move'. Also 'the casual clothes' should be 'casual clothes' (no definite article) but that is handled under article/usage; primary issue is present tense/adverb usage and word choice.

× That's why I like casual and easy to wear clothes.

✓ That's why I like casual, easy-to-wear clothes.

Hyphenated adjective phrase 'easy-to-wear' is standard before a noun. A comma improves clarity when listing adjectives. The correction maintains present tense and correct adjectival form.

× I prefer casual and comfortable clothes because it's easier to move freely when I working, also when I sleeping especially and I like T-shirts or I can express my likes.

✓ I prefer casual and comfortable clothes because it's easier to move freely when I'm working and when I'm sleeping, and I like T-shirts because I can express my preferences.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for progressive 'working' and 'sleeping' causes tense errors; use 'I'm working' and 'I'm sleeping'. 'It's' contraction is fine. 'I can express my likes' is unnatural; 'express my preferences' is preferred. Also combine clauses with 'and' for clarity.

× Yes, I like wearing a T-shirts because each T-shirt has different motifs.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because each T-shirt has a different motif.

Mixing singular article 'a' with plural 'T-shirts' is incorrect. Use 'T-shirts' (plural) or 'a T-shirt' (singular). Also 'motifs' can be singular 'a different motif' per T-shirt; both plural and singular acceptable depending on meaning; here corrected to singular to match 'each T-shirt'.

× For example, when I visit Sydney, I brought Sydney T-shirts.

✓ For example, when I visited Sydney, I bought Sydney T-shirts.

Sequence of time requires past tense 'visited' and 'bought' (past of 'buy') rather than present 'visit' and incorrect 'brought' (past of 'bring'). Use simple past for completed actions.

× I feel Sydney vibes.

✓ I felt Sydney vibes.

If referring to the past visit, maintain past tense 'felt'. If speaking generally, present 'I feel' could be used; original sentence used past action of visiting, so past tense is consistent.

× Yes, but I spend a lot of time because I don't want to waste my money, especially for online shopping.

✓ Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I don't want to waste my money, especially when shopping online.

Add 'choosing clothes' to clarify what 'spend a lot of time' refers to. 'When shopping online' is a more natural prepositional phrase than 'for online shopping'. Also add auxiliary 'do' for emphasis; present simple preferred.

× I don't want to buy cheap and not looking 'cause that's why I want to buy good.

✓ I don't want to buy cheap-looking items, because I want to buy good-quality ones.

Original uses 'not looking' and 'buy good' which are ungrammatical. 'Cheap-looking' and 'good-quality ones' properly form adjective-noun phrases. Use 'because' instead of informal 'cause'.

× For example, on weekdays I always wear tight and formal clothes when I work at office, but on weekends I prefer.

✓ For example, on weekdays I always wear tight, formal clothes when I work at the office, but on weekends I prefer more casual styles.

Add 'the' before 'office'. The clause 'but on weekends I prefer' is incomplete; complete it with 'prefer more casual styles' to contrast with weekday clothing. Comma separates adjectives.

× I like the simple color like black or white because it's easy to match the velvet color like pink, blue or something like that.

✓ I like simple colours like black or white because they are easy to match with brighter colours like pink or blue.

Use plural 'colours' to match examples. 'Simple colour' with 'like' should be 'simple colours like'. 'It's' (singular) should agree with plural subject, so 'they are'. 'Velvet color' is unclear; 'brighter colours' or 'colours like pink or blue' is clearer.

× And also it's easy to wash because we don't have to care about the color.

✓ Also, they are easy to wash because we don't have to worry about the colour fading or staining.

Match plural subject 'they' (clothes) and provide more natural phrasing 'worry about the colour'. 'Care about the color' is unidiomatic; 'worry about colour fading or staining' is clearer.

× If I.

✓ If I did, I would... (complete the sentence with the intended idea, e.g., 'If I had to choose, I would pick black.')

'If I.' is a sentence fragment without a verb or completion. Conditional clauses must be completed with a main clause. Provide a complete conditional structure like 'If I had to choose, I would...'.