Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and clear: give a direct topic sentence, explain what you mean by “old money clothes” and why you prefer them. Avoid hesitations and unnecessary words. Use one or two supporting details with a linking word.

例: I prefer wearing “old money” clothes because they look classic and well-made. For example, I often choose tailored blazers and simple knitwear since they feel elegant and last longer.

提案: Answer directly and confidently. Use a clear topic sentence and a reason introduced by a linking word such as “because” or “so”. Reduce fillers and keep it to two sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they suit my daily routine. For instance, I usually wear soft shirts and jeans since they are practical and let me move freely.

提案: Be concise and correct pronouns. Give a direct yes/no and one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition and hesitations.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially in the summer because they are cool and easy to wash.

提案: Give a direct answer and a specific example of when you spend more time. Use linking words like “especially” and remove fillers.

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time selecting clothes, especially when I prepare outfits for work because I want to look professional.

提案: Structure your reply: state the difference clearly, then give specific examples for weekdays and weekends. Use linking words like “while” or “whereas”. Keep it to two sentences.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear classic, tailored clothes for work, whereas on weekends I usually wear T-shirts and shorts or casual trousers for comfort.

提案: Answer directly and add one specific reason or example. Remove hesitations and keep it to one or two sentences.

例: I prefer black clothes because they suit me and are easy to match with other items. For example, I often pair a black shirt with grey trousers for a simple, sharp look.

× I wear old money clothes because it's, uh, more practice for me.

✓ I wear old-money clothes because it's more practical for me.

The phrase 'more practice' is incorrect; 'practical' is the adjective meaning useful or convenient. Also 'old money' used as a compound adjective should be hyphenated before a noun: 'old-money clothes.' Remove filler words for clarity.

× I prepared to wear comfortable and casual clothes because uh, it's, I think it's umm, more suits me.

✓ I planned to wear comfortable, casual clothes because I think they suit me better.

'Prepared to wear' is unnatural here; 'planned to wear' or 'decided to wear' fits context. 'More suits me' is incorrect structure; use 'suit me better' and match plural pronoun 'they' with 'clothes.' Remove filler words and add comma between adjectives.

× Yes, I like her when, when I wear T-shirts. Uh, basically in, umm, it's summer.

✓ Yes, I like them when I wear T-shirts, especially in summer.

'Her' is the wrong pronoun for clothes; use 'them.' The clause ordering and filler words are awkward; 'especially in summer' is a concise expression.

× Yes, I need a lot of time, uh, especially uh, when I uh, will go in at umm at work.

✓ Yes, I need a lot of time, especially when I go to work.

Do not use 'will' in subordinate time clauses that refer to planned or habitual events. Use present simple 'go' for habitual actions. Remove unnecessary prepositions 'in at' and filler words.

× Yes, uh, when I go to work I always wearing classic umm and all the money clothes and umm where I have a break, uh, Sunday and Sunday, uh, in Sunday I wear a basically T-shirts and shorts or trousers.

✓ Yes. When I go to work I always wear classic, old-money clothes, and when I have a break on Sundays I basically wear T-shirts and shorts or trousers.

Use simple present 'wear' not 'wearing' after 'I always.' 'All the money clothes' likely intended 'old-money clothes.' Time expressions: 'on Sundays' is correct. Order and repetition fixed and fillers removed.

× Uh, I like, uh, when I wear uh, black clothes because, uh, I think, uh, it suits me.

✓ I like wearing black clothes because I think they suit me.

Use 'they' to refer to 'clothes' (plural). 'I like wearing' is a natural collocation. Remove filler words and the unnecessary 'when I wear.'