Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition (e.g., ’um’, ’you know’). Correct vocabulary (shalwar not shelwar) and tense (use present simple: 'I often wear').

例: I usually wear traditional Eastern clothes, especially shalwar kameez, because I live in Pakistan. These outfits are comfortable and simple, so I prefer them for daily wear.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, then support with two concise, specific reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'comfortable clothes make you feel at ease') and avoid vague or irrelevant statements about mood like 'aggressive and rude'. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore'.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart clothes because they help me feel relaxed and let me move freely. For example, I wear loose trousers and cotton shirts at home, so I can study or meet friends easily.

提案: Answer directly and give specific, relevant reasons. Avoid jokes that confuse meaning and correct grammar (’a T-shirt’, ’they help you feel comfortable’). Keep it brief and coherent, using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to sleep in. For example, I often choose soft cotton T-shirts with simple designs, and they are inexpensive so I can buy several.

提案: Start with a clear statement ('No, I don't') then give one or two specific reasons and an example. Correct vocabulary and plurals (clothes, shalwar) and remove hesitations. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I have a simple wardrobe with a few T-shirts, trousers and shalwar kameez. For special occasions I pick a nicer outfit quickly, but everyday choices are straightforward.

提案: Give a direct answer then clarify with a concise contrast: what you wear normally and what you wear for special occasions. Avoid filler words and be specific about examples. Use linking words like 'but' and 'when'.

例: Not really. On weekdays I usually wear a shirt and trousers at home, but when there is a special occasion or guests, I change into nicer clothes such as a dress or a more formal shalwar kameez.

提案: Answer clearly with a topic sentence, then give specific colour examples and a brief reason. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases ('in my water', 'ringish'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: I prefer light, pastel colours because they look fresh and suit my style. For example, I often wear pastel blue, pink and mint green, and I usually avoid dark or very bright shades.

× It's a country with a traditional dress.

✓ It is a country with a traditional dress.

Use of contraction 'It's' is acceptable in speech, but for clarity and formality, expand to 'It is'. No grammatical error in structure; this suggestion is optional to match formal test tone.

× So I often used to wear shelwar and kameez, which is very common in our and popular in our country.

✓ I often wear shalwar and kameez, which are very common and popular in our country.

'Used to' implies a past habit; if the student still wears them, present simple 'often wear' is correct. 'Shalwar and kameez' is a plural compound, so use plural verb 'are' and remove the redundant phrase 'in our'. Also correct spelling 'shalwar' and remove repetition.

× So yes, I prefer clothing which should be, umm, minimal and which would be comfortable as well.

✓ So yes, I prefer clothing that is minimal and comfortable.

Avoid unnecessary modal 'should' and 'would' which are incorrect here. Use 'that is' to describe preferred qualities. 'Minimal and comfortable' are adjectives modifying 'clothing'.

× I mostly prefer to wear comfortable clothes than smart clothes because comfortable clothes makes you feel comfort ease and you can easily be in your mood like it does not make you so much aggressive and rude.

✓ I mostly prefer to wear comfortable clothes rather than smart clothes because comfortable clothes make you feel at ease and can help you stay calm and not aggressive or rude.

'Prefer to ... than' should be 'prefer ... rather than'. 'Clothes' is plural so verb must be 'make' not 'makes'. 'Feel comfort ease' is incorrect; use 'feel at ease'. Simplify phrasing and correct adjective order.

× And you can, you know, you can communicate with each other like you're feeling comfort.

✓ And you can communicate with others when you feel comfortable.

'Each other' often implies mutual action; 'others' is more natural here. 'Feeling comfort' should be 'feel comfortable'. Remove redundant 'you can' repetition.

× So it can make your life more easy as well.

✓ So it can make your life easier as well.

Use comparative adjective 'easier' rather than adverb 'more easy'. 'Easier' correctly modifies 'life'.

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirt when I go to sleep because AT shirt makes you very comfortable.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts when I go to sleep because a T-shirt makes you very comfortable.

Use plural 'T-shirts' when speaking generally. Use article 'a' before singular 'T-shirt'. Correct capitalization and spacing. 'Makes' is fine with singular 'a T-shirt'.

× It makes your body like slimming smart and I'm joking but yeah, I think so that T-shirts helps you to get comfortable and I mostly wear them when I go to sleep and I like different designs of it And T-shirts are also cheap that try wear it.

✓ It can make you look slimmer, and I'm joking, but yes, T-shirts help you get comfortable. I mostly wear them to sleep and I like different designs. T-shirts are also cheap, so I try to wear them.

'Makes your body like slimming smart' is ungrammatical; use 'make you look slimmer'. 'T-shirts help' (plural) not 'helps'. Use 'to sleep' for purpose. Fix sentence run-on by splitting and correct 'that try wear it' to 'so I try to wear them'.

× Not probably. I don't spend a lot of time choosing class because there are very limited amount of lots.

✓ Not really. I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because there is a limited amount of them.

'Not probably' is incorrect; 'Not really' is natural. 'Choosing class' should be 'choosing clothes'. Use 'a limited amount of them' or 'a limited number of clothes'. Match singular/plural and article usage.

× There are some T-shirts, some trousers, some commies and shelbars.

✓ There are some T-shirts, some trousers, some kameezes and shalwars.

Correct spellings: 'kameezes' plural of 'kameez' and 'shalwars'. Use consistent plural forms for clothing items.

× So it doesn't take much longer time to choose what to wear.

✓ So it doesn't take much time to choose what to wear.

Use 'much time' not 'much longer time' unless comparing. 'Longer' is comparative and unnecessary here.

× So there are umm according to umm occasion. I choose my dress, I chose my shirt and trouser, choose my outfit.

✓ So, according to the occasion, I choose my dress, shirt and trousers; I choose my outfit.

Use present simple 'choose' consistently for habitual action; 'chose' is past. Ensure plural 'trousers' and proper sentence structure with commas.

× Not probably. I don't uh, wear different type of flaws.

✓ Not really. I don't wear different types of clothes.

'Not probably' should be 'Not really'. 'Type of flaws' is incorrect; 'types of clothes' is correct. Fix pluralization.

× I just, my outfit is like shirt and trouser which I used to wear in my home.

✓ My outfit is usually a shirt and trousers that I wear at home.

If habit continues, use present simple 'wear' not 'used to wear'. Use 'trousers' plural and 'at home' preposition.

× When I have to go somewhere, like, uh, some special occasion, any event, any guest, uh, for example, some guest arrived.

✓ When I have to go somewhere for a special occasion, an event, or if a guest arrives,

Streamline and correct article use: 'a guest arrives' not 'some guest arrived'. Use present simple for habitual/future events and proper conjunctions.

× So I changed my clothes to, you know, Western, eastern type and umm, yeah, shirts and trousers are minimal, but I changed my clothes whenever it's time.

✓ So I change my clothes to Western or Eastern styles. Shirts and trousers are my minimal outfit, but I change when necessary.

Use present simple 'change' for habitual action. 'Western, eastern type' -> 'Western or Eastern styles'. Avoid tense inconsistency 'changed' and 'whenever it's time' -> 'when necessary'.

× I uh, usually like light colour clothes because like uh, light sky blue colour, uh, light pink colour like, you know, I love pastel colours.

✓ I usually like light-coloured clothes, for example light sky blue or light pink; I love pastel colours.

Use 'light-coloured' as adjective and remove repetition 'colour'. Provide examples cleanly. Hyphenation optional in speech but improves clarity.

× So yeah, I will move towards pastel and there are so many dresses in my water which are just pastel colours.

✓ So yeah, I tend to choose pastels, and I have many clothes in my wardrobe that are pastel colours.

'Will move towards' is awkward; 'tend to choose' or 'prefer' is better. 'Water' is wrong word; correct is 'wardrobe'. Use 'clothes' or 'wardrobe' and correct pronoun/reference.

× So I love to wear pastel and I don't like dark or ringish bluish shade, no.

✓ So I love wearing pastels and I don't like dark or reddish-blue shades.

Use gerund 'wearing pastels'. 'Ringish bluish' is unclear; probably 'reddish-blue' or simply 'dark bluish shades'. Clarify color terms and use plural 'shades'.