Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases (e.g. 'party view'), and give one or two specific examples to support your point. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'however' or 'also'.

例: I prefer simple, casual clothes rather than fashionable outfits. However, for special occasions I buy smarter clothes like a collared shirt or a blazer. Also, because I’m into sports, I often wear athletic gear such as running shorts and a breathable T‑shirt.

提案: Open with a direct answer, then briefly explain with a specific reason and use linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so'). Avoid repeating phrases and redundant words.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I train every day. For example, I usually run five to ten kilometres, so I choose lightweight, moisture‑wicking tops and running shorts to stay comfortable.

提案: Be careful with word choice and avoid irrelevant or incorrect words ('desserts'). Keep it clear and provide one or two specific details about why you like T‑shirts, using linking words like 'also' or 'because'.

例: Yes, I love wearing T‑shirts because they are comfortable and versatile. I often buy branded ones such as Nike and Adidas, and I prefer stretchable, breathable materials for exercise.

提案: Answer directly and naturally: say how much time you spend, give a short reason, and use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore'. Reduce hesitations and awkward phrasing.

例: No, I don’t spend much time choosing clothes because I have a busy schedule. Therefore, I usually buy what I need on weekends and pick practical, comfortable items.

提案: Start with a clear statement, then contrast weekdays and weekends using linking words like 'whereas' or 'while'. Give one specific example for each situation.

例: Yes, I dress differently: on weekdays I often wear smart‑casual clothes for classes, such as jeans and a neat shirt, whereas on weekends I wear sportswear for weight training and yoga, like leggings and a fitted top.

提案: Give a direct answer then add a brief reason or example to make it more engaging. Use smoother phrasing and avoid repetition.

例: My favourite colour is green because it feels fresh and suits me well. For example, I often buy green T‑shirts and a pair of dark green jeans that I can wear casually or for outings.

× To be honest, I am not a fashionable person.

✓ To be honest, I am not a fashionable person.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. Keep as is.

× I like to wear some simple clothes.

✓ I like to wear simple clothes.

Use of 'some' is unnecessary with a general statement about preferences. Removing 'some' makes the sentence more natural in English.

× Apart from it, whenever I have to attend any special occasion or special meeting, I usually buy a party view.

✓ Also, whenever I have to attend a special occasion or an important meeting, I usually buy a party outfit.

Original uses 'apart from it' awkwardly and 'party view' is incorrect word choice. Replace with 'also' and 'party outfit'. Add article 'a' before 'special meeting' and use 'important' to clarify.

× And I am a sports person, I like to wear some sports clothes.

✓ I am a sports person, so I like to wear sports clothes.

Use a coordinating conjunction 'so' to join clauses and remove 'some' which is unnecessary. 'Sports clothes' is acceptable though 'sportswear' is more natural.

× I prefer to wear some simple clothes as well as some comfortable clothes for my body.

✓ I prefer to wear simple, comfortable clothes.

Combine adjectives and remove redundant 'some' and 'for my body'. Use concise adjective order 'simple, comfortable'.

× Because I train on daily basis I do running of 10 kilometer or 5 kilometer.

✓ Because I train on a daily basis, I run 10 or 5 kilometers.

Use present simple 'run' for habitual actions. Add article 'a' before 'daily basis' and pluralize 'kilometers'. Remove 'do running of' which is awkward.

× So that's why it is very necessary for me to wear some simple and comfortable clothes.

✓ So it is necessary for me to wear simple, comfortable clothes.

Remove redundancy ('So that's why' is repetitive). 'Necessary for me to' is fine; remove 'some' and simplify phrasing.

× Yes, I am a huge fan of wearing T-shirts.

✓ Yes, I am a huge fan of T-shirts.

'Fan of wearing T-shirts' is awkward; 'fan of T-shirts' is more natural.

× I usually buy some branded T-shirts like Nike, Puma and Adidas.

✓ I usually buy branded T-shirts like Nike, Puma, and Adidas.

Remove 'some' and add comma before 'and' for list clarity. Sentence otherwise correct.

× Apart from it, I do like some simple deserts which are very comfortable for my body and apart from it, I like to wear some stretchable tee shirts which are very convenient to use.

✓ Also, I like simple T-shirts that are comfortable, and I prefer stretchable T-shirts because they are convenient.

'Deserts' is incorrect (should be 'T-shirts' or 'shirts'); 'apart from it' repeated awkwardly. Simplify and use correct vocabulary 'T-shirts' and 'stretchable' combined with reason.

× Very happy schedule in my life and I do not have enough time to uh, spend my time on buying clothes and uh, other stuff.

✓ I have a busy schedule and I do not have enough time to spend on buying clothes and other things.

Original sentence lacks a proper subject and uses awkward 'very happy schedule'. Replace with 'busy schedule' and remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'my time'.

× So whenever I have to get time on my weekend, I too buy some clothes which are very comfortable and convenient to use.

✓ So whenever I have time on the weekend, I also buy clothes that are comfortable and convenient.

Use 'have time' not 'get time', 'on the weekend' is natural, 'also' instead of 'too', remove 'to use' which is unnecessary.

× Yes, because I am a student and whenever I have to attend my classes, sometimes I prefer to choose some fashionable clothes.

✓ Yes. Because I am a student and attend classes, I sometimes prefer to wear fashionable clothes.

Split into clearer sentences, remove redundant 'have to', use 'wear' instead of 'choose' for clothes, and remove 'some'.

× Furthermore, on weekends I do my weight training and yoga classes.

✓ On weekends I do weight training and attend yoga classes.

Use 'do weight training' but 'attend yoga classes' is more natural. Remove 'do my' which is awkward.

× On that time I do wear some simple and comfortable clothes.

✓ At that time I wear simple, comfortable clothes.

Use 'at that time' not 'on that time' and present simple 'wear' for habitual action. Remove 'do' and 'some'.

× Well there are many different colors to choose but if I have to choose specific one I do like green color.

✓ Well, there are many different colors to choose from, but if I had to choose a specific one, I would pick green.

Add 'from' after 'choose', use conditional 'if I had to choose' and 'would pick' to sound natural. Remove redundant 'color' after 'green'.

× This is my favorite color and whenever I have to buy any clothes especially like T-shirt and jeans, I usually buy green color.

✓ That is my favorite color, and whenever I buy clothes, especially T-shirts and jeans, I usually choose green.

Replace 'This' with 'That' (contextual), remove 'any' and awkward 'buy green color'; use 'choose green' and plural 'T-shirts'.