Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. I like wearing upcycled and sustainable clothes), then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words and repetition.

例: I prefer upcycled and sustainable clothes because they are environmentally friendly and often have unique, stylish designs. For example, I recently bought a jacket made from recycled denim that stands out and reflects my personal taste.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with a linking word. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid repeating words.

例: I definitely prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they allow me to move freely and are better for my skin. For instance, I usually choose breathable cotton when I expect to be active during the day.

提案: Answer directly then explain with a clear example. Use more natural phrases (e.g. “It depends on the design/pattern”) and avoid awkward literal translations.

例: It depends on the design — I like T-shirts with interesting prints or high-quality fabrics. For example, I often buy T-shirts with minimalist graphics or artistic prints because they match my style.

提案: Provide a concise main sentence and support with one specific detail. Improve grammar (tense and article use) and remove hesitations.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I have a specific taste and know what suits me. For example, when I enter a shop I quickly head to the section I like and pick a few items I know will work.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give one clear reason and an example. Correct verb forms and avoid repetition (e.g. "I always wear").

例: Yes, I do. Weekdays are more casual or work-appropriate, while weekends are when I experiment with bolder styles. For example, I might dress smartly for work but try vintage or avant-garde outfits when I go out with friends.

提案: Give a clear, direct response and one specific example explaining why you choose certain colors. Use natural phrasing and avoid repetition and hesitations.

例: I don't have one favorite color; it depends on the look I want. For instance, I sometimes wear all black when I want a bold, cohesive outfit, but other times I choose bright colors to make my clothes more dynamic.

× I like to wear something like this constructing clothes, for example, like upcycling clothes.

✓ I like to wear clothes like these that are upcycled.

The original uses awkward word order and incorrect forms (constructing clothes). 'Constructing' is not appropriate; 'upcycled' is the correct adjective. Also 'this' should agree in number with 'clothes' -> 'these'. Rephrase for natural English.

× They can like environmental kind, friendly and even also like very stylish.

✓ They can be environmentally friendly and even very stylish.

Incorrect adjective forms and redundant fillers ('like', 'kind', 'also'). Use the adverbial form 'environmentally' to modify 'friendly' and the verb 'be' to link to adjectives. Remove extra 'like' and 'also' for clarity.

× And I'm usually like like deep diving about myself so I can discover what it suits for me.

✓ And I usually do a lot of self-reflection so I can discover what suits me.

'Deep diving about myself' is an incorrect verb+ing noun phrase. Use 'do a lot of self-reflection' or 'reflect deeply' and correct 'what it suits for me' to 'what suits me'. Remove filler 'like' and fix preposition usage.

× I definitely prefer comfortable clothes because I think the clothes is very important to our skins and also our like convenience about like some some kind of activity.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable clothes because I think clothes are very important for our skin and for our comfort during activities.

Subject-verb agreement: 'clothes' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. 'Our skins' is unnatural; use singular 'our skin'. 'Convenience about some kind of activity' should be 'comfort during activities'. Remove fillers and redundancies.

× So like the comfortable, comfortable clothes is more like suit for me.

✓ So comfortable clothes suit me better.

Redundant repetition 'comfortable, comfortable' and wrong verb form 'is more like suit'. Use 'suit me better' for natural comparative meaning.

× It depends on its patterns.

✓ It depends on the pattern.

Use 'depend on' with 'the pattern' (singular) rather than 'its patterns', which is awkward. 'It' referring to 'wearing T-shirts' is acceptable but cleaner as 'It depends on the pattern'.

× Some kinds of T-shirts just don't have the really nice pattern.

✓ Some T-shirts simply don't have a nice pattern.

Use 'some T-shirts' instead of 'some kinds of T-shirts', and 'simply' or 'just' (one only) with 'a nice pattern'. Article 'a' is needed before singular count noun 'pattern'.

× So because I'm very clear about the stylish, so the pattern is putting put in to me.

✓ Because I care a lot about style, the pattern matters to me.

Awkward phrasing: 'clear about the stylish' is incorrect. Use 'care about style' or 'am particular about style'. 'The pattern is putting put in to me' is ungrammatical; use 'the pattern matters to me'.

× Actually, I don't spend lots of time choosing my clothes because I I have the really specific taste of my clothes.

✓ Actually, I don't spend much time choosing my clothes because I have a very specific taste in clothes.

Use 'much time' rather than 'lots of time' with negative. 'Specific taste of my clothes' should be 'specific taste in clothes'. Remove duplicate 'I'.

× So I can choose very quickly. Like for example, when I go into the shop, I can like, I, I know what I want and so I can bought it very fast.

✓ So I can choose very quickly. For example, when I go into the shop, I know what I want and I can buy it very quickly.

Mix of tenses and wrong past participle 'bought' used with 'can'. After 'can' use base form 'buy'. Remove fillers and duplicate words.

× Of course, because I think the clothes it shows off the like personality of the individuals.

✓ Of course, because I think clothes show off an individual's personality.

Unnecessary 'the' and 'it'. 'Clothes' is plural and should take plural verb 'show'. 'The like' and 'individuals' awkward — use 'an individual's personality' or 'people's personalities'.

× So I always wearing different styles of clothes.

✓ So I always wear different styles of clothes.

Incorrect verb form: use base verb 'wear' with subject 'I', not present participle 'wearing' without auxiliary.

× I love to like take a risk to try any kind of fashion.

✓ I love to take risks and try different fashions.

Remove filler 'like'. Use plural 'risks' or 'take a risk' and 'try different fashions' is more natural than 'any kind of fashion'.

× I don't have specific color that I like.

✓ I don't have a specific color that I like.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'specific color'.

× It depends on how can I like umm, how can I wearing my clothes dynamic more dynamic.

✓ It depends on how I can make my outfit more dynamic.

Word order in questions ('how can I') is incorrect inside a statement. Use statement order 'how I can'. 'Wearing my clothes dynamic' is ungrammatical; use 'make my outfit more dynamic'.

× So if the for example like black, maybe I will like wearing the whole body black that it's more dynamic.

✓ For example, if I wear black, I might wear all black because it looks more dynamic.

'The whole body black' is unnatural; use 'wear all black' or 'an all-black outfit'. Fix modal 'maybe I will' to 'I might' for tentativeness and remove extra 'like' and 'that it's'.