Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise: state the main idea first, avoid filler words (umm, uh), correct any incorrect phrases, and give one specific reason or brief example. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: I usually wear long traditional Pakistani dresses called shalwar kameez because they are breathable and comfortable in warm weather.

提案: Be direct and specific: start with a clear topic sentence, remove vague phrases like “uh, stuff,” and explain one concrete reason with linking word (because/so). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I value quality and ease of movement; for example, I choose soft fabrics that last longer and feel good for daily wear.

提案: Use correct tense and avoid repetition: answer directly (Yes/No), give a clear reason, and provide a short contrast or preference. Use linking words like because or however.

例: No, I don’t like wearing T-shirts because they don’t feel comfortable on me; instead, I prefer long dresses that suit my style and culture.

提案: Be concise and use present tense for habits. Explain the process briefly with clear sequence words (first/then) and avoid filler words.

例: No, I don’t spend much time choosing clothes. I usually browse online to shortlist items and then visit a store to try them on before buying.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific examples using linking words (for example/if). Avoid repetition and keep sentences coherent.

例: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekdays I dress more modestly for work or classes, but at weekends I choose casual or festive outfits depending on the event.

提案: Be more precise: state the colour preference clearly and give a specific reason or example. Avoid vague words like “stuff” and use linking words (because/so).

例: I prefer pastel colours because they feel soft and cool in hot weather, for example light blue or mint green give a fresh, relaxed look.

× I usually like to wear umm, long dresses shall warrant camis, which is the traditional dress of Pakistan and it is uh, breathable, uh, stuff.

✓ I usually like to wear long dresses called shalwar kameez, which is the traditional dress of Pakistan and is made of breathable fabric.

The original sentence misused 'shall warrant camis' and 'stuff'; 'called shalwar kameez' correctly names the garment. 'Breathable, uh, stuff' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'breathable fabric'. Also remove unnecessary filler words. This preserves present-tense general preference.

× I would prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because I would go for quality over quantity and uh, stuff.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because I go for quality over quantity.

Use simple present 'prefer' and 'go' to state habitual preference rather than conditional 'would prefer/would go'. Remove informal 'stuff'. This matches the general, habitual context of the question.

× If it is beautiful, it would be good for me.

✓ If it is beautiful, it is good for me.

When stating a general truth or habitual result, use present simple in the result clause: 'If it is..., it is...' Using 'would' creates an unnecessary conditional. Keep present tense to match habitual preference.

× No, I didn't like wearing T-shirts.

✓ No, I don't like wearing T-shirts.

The question asks about a general preference; use present simple 'don't like' rather than past 'didn't like', which implies a past temporary dislike. Present tense correctly expresses current habitual preference.

× I didn't like this stuff and and moreover, I didn't feel comfortable.

✓ I don't like them, and moreover, I don't feel comfortable in T-shirts.

Use plural pronoun 'them' or repeat 'T-shirts' instead of vague 'this stuff'. Use present simple 'don't like/don't feel' for habitual preferences. Also add 'in' before 'T-shirts' to indicate what is uncomfortable.

× I would like to wear long dresses.

✓ I prefer to wear long dresses.

After saying 'I don't like T-shirts', a stronger habitual preference is better expressed with present simple 'prefer' rather than conditional 'would like'. 'Would like' suggests a polite desire rather than regular habit.

× No, I didn't spend a lot of time in choosing clothes.

✓ No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

The question asks about current habit; use present simple 'don't spend' and omit unnecessary preposition 'in' before 'choosing'. Use gerund 'choosing' without 'in'.

× I usually go to the website and, uh, choose my preferences and then I go to the outlet and buy the clothes.

✓ I usually go to a website, choose my preferences, and then go to the outlet to buy the clothes.

Use 'a website' for nonspecific reference, remove filler 'uh', and use 'to buy' as an infinitive of purpose. Also streamline coordination with commas for clarity.

× Yes, I do wear different style of cloth on weekdays.

✓ Yes, I do wear different styles of clothing on weekdays.

Use plural 'styles' and uncountable 'clothing' or plural 'clothes'. 'Different style of cloth' is incorrect collocation; correct to 'different styles of clothing'.

× It depends upon how, how, which type of gathering I'm going to attend and where I'm going.

✓ It depends on which type of gathering I am going to attend and where I am going.

Use 'depend on' rather than 'depend upon' (both are possible but 'depend on' is more natural here), remove repetition and filler, and use full forms 'I am' for clarity. Keep present continuous 'I am going to attend' for planned events.

× I like pastel colours because I feel like it is more comfortable and breathable stuff.

✓ I like pastel colours because I find them more comfortable and breathable.

Refer to 'pastel colours' with plural pronoun 'them' rather than 'it'. Replace informal 'stuff' with 'fabric' or omit it. Use 'find' for opinion and keep comparative 'more comfortable' referring to the colours' fabrics or appearance.