Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid filler words (uh) and minor grammar errors (say "cold weather" not "a cold weather"). Use linking words like "however" to contrast seasons.

例: I choose clothes according to the weather. In cold months I usually wear woollen sweaters and a warm coat to protect against the wind; however, in summer I prefer crop tops paired with shorts or skirts for comfort and breathability.

提案: Good structure but reduce hesitation and streamline phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two contrasting examples with linking words (e.g. "if" / "however"). Replace "in order to put a good impression" with "to make a good impression."

例: It depends on the occasion. If I'm attending a professional event I wear smart clothes to make a good impression; however, when I'm going out with friends I choose casual outfits because they are more comfortable.

提案: Clarify and avoid repetition. Begin with a direct yes/no plus reason, then give one or two specific preferences. Remove redundant sentences and correct phrasing ("They are a good form of clothing" is awkward).

例: Yes, I do. I prefer unique T-shirts—for example, asymmetrical or one-shoulder styles—rather than plain or printed ones because they look more stylish and interesting.

提案: Avoid repetition and be specific about how much time and why. Use one clear reason and give a short example. Correct plural errors ("clothing" not "clothings").

例: Yes, I often spend quite a while deciding what to wear because I have many options and want to look appropriate; for example, I might spend 10–15 minutes choosing an outfit even for quick errands.

提案: Answer directly and fix small errors ("different kinds" plural, "weekends" grammar). Use linking words and give a concise example of typical work vs weekend clothes.

例: Yes, I do. On weekdays I wear professional attire for work, whereas on weekends I usually switch to casual clothes such as jumpers and hoodies.

提案: Be concise and avoid hesitation. Start with a clear statement of preference, correct grammar ("most of my clothes are black or white"), and give a reason briefly. Avoid redundant fragments.

例: I prefer neutral colours—most of my clothes are black or white—because black is flattering and easy to match with other items.

× If it's a cold weather, I prefer wearing some woolen clothes or something heavy so that I can have some protection against the, uh, cold winds.

✓ If it's cold weather, I prefer wearing woolen clothes or something heavy so that I can have some protection against the cold winds.

Using 'a' with 'cold weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable here. Remove the article 'a' and the extra comma before 'cold winds' for natural phrasing. Also 'some' before 'woolen clothes' is optional; removing it makes the sentence cleaner.

× But if it's a summer, I like wearing uh, short tops like crop tops along with shorts and skirts.

✓ But if it's summer, I like wearing short tops like crop tops along with shorts and skirts.

The noun 'summer' is used without an article when referring to the season in general. 'It's a summer' is incorrect; use 'it's summer' or 'in summer'. Remove filler words for clarity.

× I prefer wearing smart clothes in order to put a good impression.

✓ I prefer to wear smart clothes in order to make a good impression.

The verb 'put' is not the correct collocation here; English uses 'make an impression' or 'give a good impression'. Also, after 'prefer' both 'to + verb' and 'verb-ing' are possible; 'to wear' is more natural here. Use 'a' before 'good impression'.

× I believe this depends upon the situation or the occasion I am, uh, wearing clothes for.

✓ I believe this depends on the situation or the occasion I am wearing clothes for.

Use 'depends on' rather than 'depends upon' for more natural modern usage (both are possible but 'depends on' is preferred). Ensure the preposition placement 'for' is acceptable at the end; sentence is reordered slightly for clarity.

× Yes, they are good form of clothing if I like T-shirts that are quite asymmetrical or they are off shoulder.

✓ Yes, T-shirts are a good form of clothing if I like ones that are asymmetrical or off the shoulder.

Pronoun 'they' is confusingly used. Replace with 'T-shirts' then use 'ones' to refer back. Add article 'a' before 'good form' because 'form' is singular countable. Use 'off the shoulder' as the correct phrase.

× I am not very fond of plain T-shirts or T-shirts that are printed, so I wouldn't go for T-shirts that are commonly available.

✓ I am not very fond of plain or printed T-shirts, so I wouldn't choose the commonly available ones.

Repetition of 'T-shirts' is unnecessary; combine adjectives with the noun. Use 'choose' or 'go for' consistently; 'choose the commonly available ones' is clearer. 'Ones' replaces repeated noun.

× I always search for T-shirts that are asymmetrical or have one shoulder off.

✓ I always look for T-shirts that are asymmetrical or have one shoulder exposed.

'Search for' is acceptable but 'look for' is more natural in this context. 'One shoulder off' is not idiomatic; use 'one shoulder exposed' or 'one-shoulder styles'.

× Even if I have to go out for a grocery shopping, I tend to take a lot of time choosing my clothings and clothing.

✓ Even if I have to go out grocery shopping, I tend to take a lot of time choosing my clothes.

'Grocery shopping' does not need 'a'. 'Clothing' is uncountable; 'clothings' is incorrect. Use 'clothes' for plural countable items. Remove redundancy.

× I believe clothing is a very important thing to keep in mind.

✓ I believe clothing is very important to keep in mind.

'A very important thing' is wordy; 'clothing is very important' is more natural. Removing 'a' and 'thing' simplifies the sentence.

× Yes, I wear different kind of clothes on weekdays and weekends as on weekdays I have to go to work where professional attire is required but on week weekends I tend to have more casual outfits, for example jumpers and a hoodie.

✓ Yes, I wear different kinds of clothes on weekdays and weekends, because on weekdays I have to go to work where professional attire is required, but on weekends I tend to wear more casual outfits, for example jumpers and hoodies.

Use plural 'kinds' to agree with 'different'. Remove repetition 'week weekends' and correct to 'weekends'. Use 'wear' instead of 'have' for outfits. Make 'hoodies' plural to match 'jumpers'. Add commas to improve sentence flow.

× My wardrobe is full of uh, different colours, but I have most of the attire I have are of black or white colour.

✓ My wardrobe is full of different colours, but most of my clothes are black or white.

Avoid redundant phrasing. 'Most of the attire I have are of black or white colour' is ungrammatical: 'attire' is uncountable and cannot take 'are'; use 'most of my clothes are black or white'. Also 'colour' at end is unnecessary.

× I tend to have a soft spot for black coloured outfit and they make me they, they make my body look quite good.

✓ I have a soft spot for black outfits; they make my body look quite good.

Simplify 'black coloured outfit' to 'black outfits'. Remove repeated filler 'they, they'. Use plural agreement 'they make my body look' is fine after correction. Use semicolon or separate sentence for clarity.