Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar (use plural/singular correctly). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy like “it's easy to wear” and “it's more comfortable” back-to-back.

例: I usually wear casual clothes, such as jogging pants and a T-shirt. Because I walk a lot and have busy days, I choose these for comfort and ease of movement.

提案: Fix repetition and grammar (remove duplicate phrases, use correct article and singular/plural). Give a clear reason introduced by a linking word like “because.” Limit to two sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart outfits. Because I’m outgoing and walk a lot, comfort is my priority.

提案: Eliminate repetition and clarify the point about bands/logos. Use one linking word to add a specific reason. Keep answer within three sentences and correct phrasing (e.g., “decide which band’s logo to wear”).

例: Yes, I do. T-shirts are comfortable and easy to put on, and I often choose ones with band logos because they show my music tastes.

提案: Correct grammar (say “a few” or “few” appropriately and use singular/plural). Provide a brief extra detail using a linking word such as “so” or “therefore.”

例: No, not really. I only have a few items in my wardrobe, so I usually decide quickly what to wear.

提案: Organize into two clear sentences: one about weekdays and one about weekends. Correct grammar (e.g., “I work at a hospital five days a week,” “scrubs,” “sometimes I explore different styles”). Use linking words like “however” to contrast.

例: Not really. I work at a hospital five days a week and usually wear scrubs, but at weekends I relax in pajamas and sometimes try different casual styles.

提案: Improve grammar and vocabulary: say “neutral colors” or “neutral-coloured clothes.” Give a specific example and reason using a linking word like “for example” or “because.”

例: I prefer neutral-coloured clothes because they’re easy on the eyes; for example, I often wear beige, grey, or navy since they match well with other items.

× It's easy to wear and it's more comfortable, especially when I have lots to do or more walking.

✓ It's easy to wear and it's more comfortable, especially when I have a lot to do or when I have to walk more.

Original uses 'lots to do' informally and 'more walking' is a noun phrase that doesn't fit parallel structure. Use 'a lot to do' and 'have to walk more' to make meaning clear and keep parallel verb phrases.

× I prefer to I prefer to wear a comfortable clothes especially, especially that I am an outgoing person and and I like to walk a lot.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes, especially because I am an outgoing person and I like to walk a lot.

'A comfortable clothes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove repeated phrases and use 'because' for reason. Also remove duplicated words 'I prefer to' and 'especially' and extra 'and'.

× It's easy to put on, it's easy to to think about which which bands to have it on, and it's comfortable.

✓ They're easy to put on, it's easy to decide which band or design to have on them, and they're comfortable.

T-shirts (plural) require plural pronouns 'they're'. 'Think about which bands to have it on' is unclear; use 'decide which band or design to have on them'. Remove duplicated words.

× No, not really because I only have few wardrobe in my closet.

✓ No, not really, because I only have a few items of clothing in my closet.

'Few wardrobe' is incorrect; 'wardrobe' as a countable noun needs article or use 'a few items of clothing'. Add commas for clarity.

× I don't wear different style of clothes especially that I'm working on the hospital 5 * a week I use most of the time of my scrubs and when I go home I just wear pajamas and but sometimes I I explore different.

✓ I don't wear different styles of clothes, especially because I work at the hospital five days a week. I usually wear scrubs most of the time, and when I go home I just wear pajamas, but sometimes I try different styles.

Several issues: 'different style' should be plural 'styles'; use 'because' not 'especially that'; 'working on the hospital' should be 'work at the hospital'; write 'five days a week' in words; clarify 'use most of the time of my scrubs' to 'usually wear scrubs'; fix conjunctions and remove duplicated 'I'. Replace 'explore different' with 'try different styles'.

× I like neutral colors clothes because it's just light to the eye.

✓ I like neutral-colored clothes because they're easy on the eyes.

Use 'neutral-colored clothes' or 'neutral colors' with hyphenated adjective; 'it's just light to the eye' is unnatural—use 'easy on the eyes' and match plural pronoun 'they're' with 'clothes'.