Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and one brief example. Avoid vague phrases like “of course” and redundant clauses.

例: I prefer breathable, comfortable clothes because they keep me cool and allow me to move freely. For example, I often wear cotton T-shirts and loose trousers when I go out because they’re light and easy to wear.

提案: Give a clear direct answer then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrasing (“more spaces to breathe”) and repetition.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they’re practical for commuting and long days. For instance, I usually wear a breathable shirt and sneakers when I travel to work because they’re comfortable and convenient.

提案: Answer directly and then explain briefly with a specific reason. You can rephrase sensitive points more naturally (e.g., ‘prefer to cover my arms’). Keep it to two sentences.

例: Yes, I wear T-shirts often because they’re comfortable and casual. I also tend to choose styles that cover my arms a bit because I feel more confident that way.

提案: Be specific about how and why you spend time choosing clothes. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., ‘coordinate outfits’, ‘match colors’) and give one concrete example.

例: Yes, I spend time coordinating my outfits because I like colors and styles to match. For example, I usually decide on a shirt first and then pick pants and shoes that match its color and style.

提案: Start with a concise direct answer, then add a clear condition using a linking word like ‘except’ or ‘unless’. Keep it short and specific.

例: No, I usually wear the same style on weekdays and weekends, unless I have a special event or a trip, in which case I dress differently.

提案: State your preference clearly, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘colors that are earthy’). Avoid odd phrases like ‘color of the year’ unless explained.

例: I prefer earthy and dark tones because they complement my skin tone. For example, I often choose olive, brown or deep navy for jackets and shirts.

× I like to wear breathable clothes where I am comfortable, and of course I'm happy to wear it outside.

✓ I like to wear breathable clothes where I am comfortable, and of course I'm happy to wear them outside.

The pronoun 'it' is used to refer to plural noun 'clothes'. Use the plural pronoun 'them' to match number. Also keep sentence structure unchanged to fit the context. Suggestion: Replace singular pronouns with plural ones when referring to plural nouns.

× I prefer to wear comfortable clothes as wearing it gives me more spaces to breathe, like when I am going to commute.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because wearing them gives me more room to breathe, like when I am commuting.

'It' refers to plural 'clothes' so use 'them'. 'Spaces to breathe' is unnatural; use 'room to breathe'. 'When I am going to commute' is awkward; use the gerund 'commuting' for habitual actions. Suggestion: Match pronoun number and use natural collocations and gerunds for activities.

× Since I need it, I often really want to use those kinds of clothes.

✓ Since I need them, I often really want to wear those kinds of clothes.

Again 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'clothes'. Also 'use clothes' is not natural; use 'wear clothes'. Suggestion: Use 'wear' with clothing and match pronoun number.

× Yes, most of the time I wear T-shirts because I am insecure with my arms and I feel more comfortable wearing it.

✓ Yes, most of the time I wear T-shirts because I am insecure about my arms and I feel more comfortable wearing them.

Use 'insecure about' (correct preposition). 'It' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'T-shirts'. Suggestion: Learn common adjective+preposition patterns (insecure about) and ensure pronoun agreement.

× Yes, definitely, because I want to pair them with the nice clothes for me.

✓ Yes, definitely, because I want to pair them with other nice clothes I own.

'For me' is unnecessary and unnatural here; 'other' clarifies pairing and 'I own' makes meaning clear. Also keep 'them' agreeing with previously mentioned items. Suggestion: Use concise and natural phrases to express possession.

× Like for example I will choose a ride or my preferable clothes color and pants or shirt and so on.

✓ For example, I choose a pair of shoes, my preferred clothing color, and matching pants or a shirt.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear ('choose a ride' likely wrong). 'Preferable clothes color' should be 'preferred clothing color'. Use parallel structure when listing items. Suggestion: Use clear vocabulary and parallel lists (item, item, and item). Replace unclear words like 'ride' with intended item ('pair of shoes' assumed). If 'ride' was intended differently, clarify.

× No, I don't wear different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends unless I have a special occasion or I have a trip to come that I need to wear different styles of clothes.

✓ No, I don't wear different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends unless I have a special occasion or a trip that requires different clothes.

Sentence is wordy and has awkward phrasing 'a trip to come that I need to wear'. Use 'a trip that requires different clothes' for clarity and concision. Suggestion: Combine clauses and use simpler verb phrases ('requires different clothes').

× I like colors of clothes that is earthy tones or dark because that complements my skin color and that's my color of the year.

✓ I like clothes in earthy or dark tones because they complement my skin color, and those are my colors of the year.

'Colors of clothes that is' uses singular 'is' with plural 'colors' — subject-verb agreement and pronoun issues. Better to say 'clothes in earthy or dark tones'. 'That complements' should be 'they complement' to agree with plural 'tones'. 'That's my color of the year' conflicts with plural — use 'those are my colors of the year' if keeping plural. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and match pronouns to plural nouns; use natural adjective+noun order ('earthy tones').