Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce fillers (e.g., "umm"), correct small grammar and make the sentence more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes like T-shirts and jeans. They are easy to wear and don’t need much attention to stay neat, so I can dress quickly and feel relaxed.

提案: Avoid fillers and slightly improve grammar (agree subject with pronouns). Provide one clear linking word and a concise supporting detail. Mention a specific situation as an example to strengthen the answer.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they save time and are practical. For example, if I finish class early I can go for a run without changing clothes.

提案: Combine short repetitive sentences and fix grammar (subject–verb, article use). Use one linking word to add a detail about patterns. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and give a concise example.

例: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts because they are very comfortable. Also, if I am in a hurry in the morning I can simply grab one and go, which saves time. Besides, I have T-shirts in many patterns for different moods.

提案: Fix grammar and restructure: give a clear topic sentence then a specific reason with a linking word. Avoid asking a question back to the examiner; instead give an example of an occasion that makes you take more time.

例: Sometimes, yes, because I own many different items and it takes time to choose the most suitable outfit. For instance, I spend longer deciding what to wear for academic events or formal presentations.

提案: Improve grammar (plural/singular agreement) and use a linking word to contrast weekday and weekend habits. Add a brief specific example of a weekday outfit and a weekend outfit to make it more vivid.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear smarter clothes, such as a shirt and chinos for attending class, whereas at the weekend I choose very comfortable clothes like a hoodie and jeans.

提案: Use correct nouns (e.g., "clothes" or "a purple shirt") and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear statement about general preference, then give one focused reason and a concise example of the item you own.

例: I like all colours, but my favourite is purple because it looks lively and energetic. For example, I have a purple shirt that I wear when I want to feel more confident.

× I like to wear some more comfortable and casual clothes such as T-shirt and jeans because it's umm, easy to wear and you don't need to pay more attention to keep your clothes neat.

✓ I like to wear more comfortable and casual clothes such as T-shirts and jeans because they are easy to wear and you don't need to pay much attention to keeping your clothes neat.

Problems: 'some more comfortable' is unnatural; 'T-shirt' should be plural when speaking generally; 'it's' refers to clothes (plural), so use 'they are'; 'pay more attention to keep' is incorrect collocation and form. Suggestions: use 'more comfortable' without 'some', pluralize countable nouns when general ('T-shirts'), match plural subject with plural verb ('they are'), use 'pay much attention to keeping' or 'pay much attention to' + gerund.

× I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because I don't need to spend a lot of time on wearing it and uh, it's convenient for me to do some sports if I want.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because I don't need to spend a lot of time putting them on and it's convenient for me to do some sports if I want.

Problems: 'spend a lot of time on wearing it' is unidiomatic and uses singular 'it' for plural 'clothes'; use phrasal verb 'put on' for dressing and plural pronoun 'them'. Suggestions: replace 'spend a lot of time on wearing it' with 'spend a lot of time putting them on' and keep consistent plural pronouns.

× Yes, definitely. I really love wearing T-shirts. It's just comfortable to wear and on in the morning if I hurry to go out, I just grab a T-shirt and wear it. It's really saves my time and I have all kinds of patterns of T-shirt.

✓ Yes, definitely. I really love wearing T-shirts. They're just comfortable, and in the morning if I hurry to go out, I just grab a T-shirt and put it on. It really saves me time, and I have all kinds of T-shirt patterns.

Problems: 'It's just comfortable' should match plural subject 'T-shirts' -> 'They're'; extra 'on' in 'and on in the morning' is wrong; 'grab a T-shirt and wear it' is better as 'put it on'; 'It's really saves my time' mixes forms: use 'It really saves me time'; 'patterns of T-shirt' word order awkward. Suggestions: agree subjects and verbs, remove unnecessary words, use 'put on' for dressing, and use natural word order 'T-shirt patterns'.

× Sometimes I would say yes because I have a variety of clothes so it cost me some time to decide this. Which clothes is the most suitable to wear in some specific occasions like academic formal occasions?

✓ Sometimes I would say yes because I have a variety of clothes so it costs me some time to decide. Which clothes are most suitable to wear on specific occasions like formal academic events?

Problems: 'it cost me' wrong tense/subject-verb agreement -> should be 'it costs me'; 'decide this' unnatural; 'Which clothes is' subject-verb agreement error ('clothes' plural -> 'are'); 'in some specific occasions like academic formal occasions' is redundant and awkward. Suggestions: use 'it costs me some time to decide', ask 'Which clothes are most suitable', and prefer 'on specific occasions' and 'formal academic events' for clarity.

× I would say yes. On weekdays I prefer to wear more formal clothes which is more suitable for attending the class, while in the weekends I just wear the most comfortable clothes.

✓ I would say yes. On weekdays I prefer to wear more formal clothes which are more suitable for attending class, while on weekends I just wear the most comfortable clothes.

Problems: 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'clothes'; 'attending the class' is unnatural in this context -> 'attending class'; 'in the weekends' should be 'on weekends' (preposition). Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, use 'on weekends' and 'attending class'.

× Actually I like all kinds of colors, but the most favorite one I would say is purple because it's very lively and full of energy. I have one purple cloth that I really like it.

✓ Actually I like all kinds of colors, but my favorite one is purple because it's very lively and full of energy. I have one purple piece of clothing that I really like.

Problems: 'the most favorite one' is redundant and incorrect; use 'my favorite'; 'cloth' is the wrong noun for an item of clothing; final clause 'that I really like it' repeats object pronoun — redundancy. Suggestions: use 'my favorite', use 'piece of clothing' or 'shirt/dress' for clarity, and avoid redundant pronouns: 'that I really like' or 'which I really like', not both.