Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid repetitions and filler words. Use linking words if adding a reason or example.

例: I usually wear simple clothes. For example, I often choose a plain white T-shirt with black trousers because they are easy to match and low-maintenance.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with a concise reason. Correct grammar (e.g., "outfit" not "OTD", subject-verb agreement). Use one linking word to connect reason.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart outfits because comfort is my main priority when getting dressed.

提案: Avoid fragmented sentences and correct pronoun/verb forms. Provide one or two specific contexts and use a linking word to explain the effect on you.

例: Yes, I do. T-shirts are casual and comfortable, so they make me feel relaxed when I go to school or the library.

提案: Be direct and avoid fillers. Use a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with correct plural/singular forms and smoother linking.

例: No, I don't. My wardrobe mainly contains white T-shirts and black or grey trousers, so choosing an outfit usually takes me less than a minute.

提案: Make the response grammatically correct and complete the sentence. Use a linking word to refer back to your earlier point and give one specific reason.

例: No, I don't. As I said, my wardrobe mostly consists of simple clothes, so I tend to wear the same style on both weekdays and weekends.

提案: Answer directly, reduce hesitation, and correct grammar (e.g., "I don't even have any blue clothes", "it gives me"). Provide a concise reason and avoid overlong hesitation sounds.

例: I like blue. Although I don't own many blue clothes, I find the colour relaxing because it reminds me of the sky and the sea.

× Well I actually I don't care much about what kind of clothes I wear.

✓ Well, actually I don't care much about what kind of clothes I wear.

The original has a redundant 'I' after 'actually' causing awkward repetition. Remove the extra 'I' and add a comma after 'Well' for natural speech rhythm.

× So if I must say I would say some simple clothes and like white T-shirt and black black pants.

✓ So if I had to say, I would say simple clothes, like a white T-shirt and black pants.

Use 'if I had to say' (fixed conditional phrase) rather than 'if I must say'. Use 'a' before 'white T-shirt' (countable singular). Remove duplicate 'black' and add commas for clarity.

× Definitely comfortable and casual 'cause I as I said I didn't and I don't care much about OTD, so whether the clothes is comfortable is the main reason why I choose the clothes.

✓ Definitely comfortable and casual, because as I said I didn't and I don't care much about outfit details, so whether the clothes are comfortable is the main reason I choose them.

Replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because' for clarity; remove repeated 'I'; expand 'OTD' to 'outfit details' or similar for clarity. Use plural verb 'are' to agree with plural 'clothes' and replace 'choose the clothes' with 'choose them' to avoid repetition.

× Because T-shirt is really like casual and comfortable and they this feels, this makes me feel relaxed when I wear T-shirt to go to school or or go to the library.

✓ Because T-shirts are really casual and comfortable, and they make me feel relaxed when I wear one to go to school or the library.

Use plural 'T-shirts' with 'are' or use singular 'a T-shirt' consistently. Remove redundant words 'this feels' and duplicate 'or'. Use 'make' to agree with plural subject 'they' and 'one' to refer to a single T-shirt.

× No, not at all 'cause umm, in my closet there are only white T-shirt and the black pants or grey trousers and just some simple kinds of clothes or trousers.

✓ No, not at all, because in my closet there are only white T-shirts, black pants, grey trousers, and a few simple items of clothing.

Use plural 'T-shirts' to match 'are only', remove unnecessary 'the' before 'black pants', replace 'kinds of clothes or trousers' with 'items of clothing' for natural phrasing and correct article/number usage.

× So I don't I, I don't need too much time to choose it.

✓ So I don't need much time to choose what to wear.

Remove redundant repeated 'I'. Use 'much time' rather than 'too much time' if meaning is minimal time; 'choose it' is unclear—use 'choose what to wear'.

× No, there is not much difference can be found when what I wear in weekend or weekday 'cause like I said, my wardrobe consists of only simple clothes, so I can only choose from the.

✓ No, there isn't much difference between what I wear on weekends and weekdays, because as I said, my wardrobe consists only of simple clothes, so I have limited choices.

Use 'isn't' and 'between' for comparisons, 'on weekends and weekdays' for correct prepositions, remove fragment 'so I can only choose from the.' and replace with complete phrase 'so I have limited choices'.

× MMM actually I never thought about this question but if I must say I would say umm blue though I didn't.

✓ Hmm, actually I never thought about this question, but if I had to say, I would say blue, although I don't.

Replace 'must' with 'had to' for conditional; 'though I didn't' is unclear—use 'although I don't' to mean 'I don't have any blue clothes.' Add commas for clarity and use 'Hmm' for hesitation.

× I don't even have a blue clothes but it's give me a sense of relaxation because blue is a symbol of sky and sea.

✓ I don't even have any blue clothes, but it gives me a sense of relaxation because blue is a symbol of the sky and the sea.

Use 'any' with plural 'clothes'. Use singular verb 'gives' to agree with subject 'it' (the color blue). Add definite articles 'the' before 'sky' and 'sea' for standard collocation.