Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and precise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and incorrect numbers, and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar (e.g., "can reach 28–30°C"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer wearing casual, lightweight clothes. In Malaysia the weather is often hot and humid, with temperatures reaching around 28–30°C, so breathable fabrics keep me comfortable. For example, I often choose cotton T-shirts and loose shorts when I go out.

提案: Open with a direct topic sentence, then give one clear supporting reason. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors (e.g., "I prefer casual clothes because they are cooler and more comfortable"). Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") to connect ideas.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart outfits. This is because casual clothes are cooler in hot weather and let me move freely, so I feel less sweaty and more relaxed.

提案: Be specific and use correct vocabulary. Start with a clear answer, then give precise reasons and an example. Avoid unclear phrases like "too hobbies" or "mild". Limit to 2–3 supporting sentences.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are versatile and easy to match with other clothing. For instance, I can pair a plain T-shirt with jeans for a casual outing or add a blazer to make it slightly smarter for a semi-formal event.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer phrasing and linking words. Replace informal or vague expressions (e.g., "chasing my clothes") with precise ones (e.g., "choosing an outfit"). Provide a specific time estimate for formal occasions.

例: It depends on the occasion. For everyday activities I usually choose clothes quickly, but for formal events I spend more time choosing an appropriate outfit—typically around twenty to thirty minutes to make sure everything matches.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and correct grammar. Remove hesitations and unclear phrasing. Explain briefly how styles differ and give one specific example of weekend clothing.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear my school uniform, so I have little choice, but on weekends I choose casual clothes like jeans and a T-shirt or comfortable shorts depending on the activity.

提案: Start with a clear statement of preference and explain reasons concisely. Use correct vocabulary and avoid contradictory ideas (e.g., "not very casual or not very professional" is confusing). Give one or two clear reasons such as versatility and simplicity.

例: I prefer black and white because they are easy to match and look neat. For example, a white shirt or a black top can be dressed up with accessories for a smarter look or worn simply for a casual day out.

× It can comes up to 2830°.

✓ It can come up to 28–30°C.

The modal 'can' must be followed by the base form of the verb. 'Comes' is third person singular present; after 'can' use 'come'. Also '2830°' is unclear; use a range '28–30°C' for clarity.

× So I personally like to wear leisure clothes outside.

✓ So I personally like to wear leisure clothes when I go outside.

The original lacks a prepositional phrase that clearly links wearing clothes to being outdoors. This is not strictly an article error but aligns with sentence structure correction to make meaning clear; added 'when I go' to clarify context.

× Personally, I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes a lot more than smart clothes because it makes me more comfortable and especially in a very hot weather, I don't sweat that much when I'm in a casual clothes rather than suits or tie that's very fit to my body.

✓ Personally, I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes much more than smart clothes because they make me more comfortable. Especially in very hot weather, I don't sweat as much when I'm in casual clothes rather than in a suit or tie that is very tight on my body.

Multiple problems: inconsistent article and plural use. 'Clothes' is plural so use plural verb 'they make'. Remove unnecessary 'a' before 'very hot weather' and use 'in very hot weather'. Use 'casual clothes' (no article) and 'a suit or tie' (singular with article) and change 'that's very fit to my body' to 'that is very tight on my body' for correct adjective and preposition.

× Yes, I do enjoy T-shirts a lot. This is because it's easy to match and it will not be too hobbies or even like too casual when I'm attending any events.

✓ Yes, I enjoy T-shirts a lot. They are easy to match and are not too informal when I'm attending certain events.

Use 'enjoy' without auxiliary 'do' for simple present emphasis (optional), replace 'it's' with 'they' to agree with plural 'T-shirts'. 'Too hobbies' is incorrect; likely intended 'too informal' or 'too casual'. 'Any events' -> 'certain events' for natural phrasing.

× It is just mild and it's enough.

✓ They are just simple and sufficient.

Refers to T-shirts (plural) so use 'they are' and choose clearer adjectives: 'simple and sufficient' to describe style and appropriateness.

× It really depends on what occasion I'm attending on.

✓ It really depends on which occasion I'm attending.

Do not end the clause with the extra preposition 'on' when 'depends on' has already been used. Use 'which' for clarity: 'depends on which occasion I'm attending.'

× If it's just daily routine or daily activities, I don't spend that much time.

✓ If it's just my daily routine or daily activities, I don't spend much time choosing clothes.

Add 'my' for naturalness and specify 'choosing clothes' to complete the thought. 'That' before 'much time' is unnecessary here.

× I just pick up what is in front of me and I'm just wearing that.

✓ I just pick up whatever is in front of me and wear it.

Use 'whatever' and streamlining: 'wear it' is more natural than 'I'm just wearing that'. Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× But if I'm attending a very formal event, I would spend like quite half an hour chasing my clothes.

✓ But if I'm attending a very formal event, I would spend about half an hour choosing my clothes.

Use 'would' to indicate hypothetical/future-in-past preference is acceptable but 'spend about half an hour choosing my clothes' is correct phrasing. 'Chasing my clothes' is incorrect word choice; use 'choosing'.

× On weekdays as I'm a student, I was, I told her to wear my school outfit.

✓ On weekdays, as I'm a student, I have to wear my school uniform.

Original is confusing and contains tense/pronoun errors. Use present simple 'have to wear' (habitual requirement) and 'school uniform' is the correct collocation, not 'school outfit'. Remove unclear 'I was, I told her' fragments.

× So I don't have much choice actually. But during weekends I get to choose what I want to wear for that day. So yeah, my clothings are actually changed.

✓ So I don't have much choice actually. But during weekends I get to choose what I want to wear for the day. So yeah, my clothes are different.

Use 'clothes' (uncountable plural) not 'clothings'. 'Are different' is more natural than 'are actually changed' for describing variation between days.

× I personally prefer black and white alone, this is because they are very easy to match on into style compared to other clothes like pink or Blues with very sharp colours and I like to wear it because it can show it's not very casual or not very professional for that.

✓ I personally prefer black and white because they are very easy to match with other items compared to bright colours like pink or blue, and I like to wear them because they look neither too casual nor too unprofessional.

Several issues: 'alone' is unnecessary. 'Match on into style' is incorrect; use 'match with other items'. 'Blues' should be lowercase 'blue' and 'very sharp colours' -> 'bright colours'. Use plural agreement 'they' and 'them' for 'black and white'. Use correlative 'neither...nor' for the contrast 'not too casual or not very professional' to express intended meaning.