Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and complete your sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid trailing fragments like “It's.” Use linking words if you add details.

例: I prefer cozy clothes, especially cardigans. For example, I wear cardigans at work because they look neat and keep me warm during long office hours.

提案: Reduce repetition and correct small grammar issues. Give one clear reason and a brief example, using a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., because, so).

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they are more practical for my daily routine. For instance, wearing sneakers and loose trousers makes it easier to commute and run errands.

提案: Avoid hesitations and repetition (“I I”, “Umm”). Make one clear point and support it with a specific example. Fix word order and phrasing (e.g., “helps me relax” not “helps me more relax”).

例: Yes, I often wear T-shirts at home because they are comfortable. For example, I pair a T-shirt with casual shorts when I study online since it lets me move freely and focus.

提案: Remove filler words and be more specific about the decision process. Mention how you decide (colors, fit, occasion) to give concrete detail and use a linking word like “because” or “so”.

例: Yes, I often spend time choosing clothes because I want them to be comfortable and match. For instance, I check the color and fit to make sure a top goes well with the cardigan I plan to wear.

提案: Make the contrast clearer and correct small grammar issues. Use a linking phrase like “whereas” or “while” to show difference, and give one specific example for each case.

例: Yes, I dress differently on weekdays and weekends: on weekdays I wear professional outfits like blouses and tailored trousers for work, whereas on weekends I prefer casual clothes such as T-shirts and joggers.

提案: Use clearer phrasing and avoid awkward constructions. State your preference, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Replace vague phrases like “more for me pleasing”.

例: I prefer neutral colors such as beige, gray, and navy because they are easy to match with bags and shoes, and I find them more visually pleasing than bright colors.

× The kind of clothes I like to wear are those that are cozy.

✓ The kind of clothes I like to wear is cozy.

Subject 'The kind' is singular, so the verb should be singular (is) and the complement should be an adjective phrase 'cozy' rather than plural 'those that are cozy'. Revise to match subject-verb agreement and simplify the structure.

× I usually prefer wearing cardigans most of the time because of my work as well.

✓ I usually prefer to wear cardigans most of the time because of my work.

After 'prefer', the infinitive or gerund can be used, but 'prefer to wear' is more natural here. Also 'most of the time' already expresses frequency, so 'usually' or 'most of the time' together is redundant. Remove 'as well' which is unnecessary.

× It's.

✓ (Remove)

'It's.' is a sentence fragment with no clear referent or predicate. Delete it or complete it (for example 'It's comfortable.'). Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× they are more practical especially in everyday life at work or a random errands, so it's much more easier to move around wearing comfortable and casual clothes.

✓ They are more practical, especially in everyday life at work or during random errands, so it's much easier to move around wearing comfortable, casual clothes.

Use 'during' for 'errands' and remove the unnecessary article 'a' before 'random errands'. Also 'much more easier' is incorrect; use 'much easier' or 'more easy' but preferably 'much easier'. Add comma and hyphenation/commas for adjective list.

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially when I I am at home.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially when I am at home.

Duplicate 'I' is a typographical/repetitive error. Remove the extra 'I' to correct the pronoun repetition.

× It's more convenient and comfortable as well to wear T-shirts paired with pajamas.

✓ It's more convenient and comfortable to wear T-shirts paired with pajamas.

'As well' is unnecessary and awkward in this position. Removing it produces a more natural adjective phrase. Ensure adjectives modify the noun appropriately.

× Umm. It helps me more relax and I also get to move around easier and do my course.

✓ It helps me relax more, and I can move around more easily to do my coursework.

'Helps me more relax' is incorrect word order; use 'helps me relax more'. 'Move around easier' should use adverb 'easily'. 'Do my course' is unnatural; use 'do my coursework' or 'do my course work'. Combine into one coherent sentence with conjunction.

× Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes, especially when I am looking for something that is comfortable to wear.

✓ Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes, especially when I am looking for something comfortable to wear.

'Something that is comfortable to wear' is grammatical but can be reduced to 'something comfortable to wear' for conciseness. No tense change needed.

× So I take umm, time looking for a certain top that will pair with the cardigan that I am wearing.

✓ So I take time looking for a certain top to pair with the cardigan I am wearing.

'Take time looking for' is acceptable but 'time' should not be separated by filler commas; remove 'umm'. Use the infinitive 'to pair with' for clarity and streamline the relative clause 'that I am wearing' to 'I am wearing'.

× Yes I do wear different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends because on weekdays I have work so my clothes it's more on the professional side and on weekends it's more on the comfortable side just like a pair of T-shirt and pajamas.

✓ Yes, I do wear different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends because on weekdays I have work, so my clothes are more on the professional side, and on weekends they are more on the comfortable side, like a T-shirt and pajamas.

'My clothes it's' is incorrect pronoun and verb agreement; use 'my clothes are'. Also use 'they are' for weekends. Use 'a T-shirt' (singular) or 'T-shirts' (plural) consistently; 'a pair of T-shirt' is incorrect. Add commas to separate clauses.

× I am more on the neutral side because it's easier to pair it with wearing like bags or the shoes that you're wearing.

✓ I prefer neutral colors because they are easier to pair with bags or the shoes you are wearing.

'On the neutral side' is colloquial; 'prefer neutral colors' is clearer. 'Pair it with wearing like bags' is ungrammatical; use 'pair with bags or shoes'. Replace 'it's' and 'it' with plural 'they' to agree with 'colors'. Simplify phrasing.

× It's also more for me pleasing to see instead of wearing bright colors.

✓ They are also more pleasing for me to look at than bright colors.

Word order 'more for me pleasing to see' is incorrect; use 'more pleasing for me to look at'. Use comparison 'than bright colors' rather than 'instead of'. Ensure adjective 'pleasing' modifies correctly and maintain parallel comparison.