Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (when/where, materials, or favorite outfits). Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer casual clothes because they are comfortable. For example, on holidays I usually wear cotton shorts, T‑shirts and a sun hat, which help me stay cool and relaxed when I’m outdoors.

提案: Correct grammar and remove filler words. Give a direct topic sentence then briefly explain why with a specific reason. Use a linking word like 'because' to connect cause and effect.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart outfits because I value ease of movement and practicality in my daily life.

提案: Reduce hesitations and finish sentences. Give one clear reason and one specific example. Avoid repeating phrases and keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I like wearing T‑shirts, especially in summer, because they are lightweight and easy to wash. For instance, I have several cotton T‑shirts in different colors that I wear for sport and casual outings.

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Use a topic sentence then contrast with a linking word such as 'but' or 'however'. Provide a brief reason for both parts (why you research before buying and why you don't after buying).

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes before I buy them because I want to make sure they fit well and suit my style. However, after I purchase them I rarely spend time deciding what to wear because I already know which outfits I like.

提案: Avoid repetition and hesitations. State the contrast clearly and give specific examples of weekday versus weekend outfits. Use a linking word like 'whereas' or 'while' to show contrast.

例: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekdays I usually wear simple, practical clothes like plain shirts and trousers because I’m busy, whereas on weekends I wear more relaxed items such as jeans and casual shirts.

提案: Improve word choice and grammar. Use plural/singular appropriately and a linking phrase to explain reason. Give one specific example of a favorite color combination.

例: I prefer light colours such as white, light blue or pale yellow because they make me look fresher and more youthful. For example, I often pair a white shirt with light blue jeans for a neat, smart look.

× I like to wear casual clothes which makes me feel comfortable and cozy.

✓ I like to wear casual clothes which make me feel comfortable and cozy.

The relative clause 'which make' refers to the plural noun 'clothes', so the verb must be plural 'make' not 'makes'. Use subject-verb agreement: plural subject -> plural verb.

× On holidays I prefer to wear shorts and T-shirts with a lovely hat.

✓ On holidays I prefer to wear shorts and T-shirts with a lovely hat.

This sentence is acceptable; 'shorts' and 'T-shirts' are correctly plural. No change needed.

× Uh, I'm not the kind of person who who prefer to wear a smart clothes.

✓ Uh, I'm not the kind of person who prefers to wear smart clothes.

Errors: double 'who', incorrect verb form 'prefer' after singular 'person' and unnecessary article 'a' before plural 'clothes'. The relative clause modifies 'person' (singular), so use third person singular 'prefers'. Use plural 'clothes' without 'a'. Suggestions: remove duplicate 'who', use 'prefers', and drop 'a' before 'clothes'.

× I am the person who pursue a comfortable life and a cozy life, so I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes.

✓ I am the person who pursues a comfortable and cozy life, so I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes.

After singular 'person' the verb should be 'pursues' (third person singular). 'A comfortable life and a cozy life' is repetitive; combine to 'a comfortable and cozy life'. List adjectives should be separated by a comma. Suggestions: use 'pursues' and simplify the phrase.

× T-shirts are my common outfit, umm, during summer days and umm, it's very easy to put on and, and it's very easy to, to wash, uh, T-shirts, umm, I have so many kinds of T-shirts, which are.

✓ T-shirts are my usual outfit during the summer, and they are very easy to put on and wash. I have many different kinds of T-shirts.

Problems: 'common outfit' is awkward; 'usual outfit' or 'common outfit' is better as 'usual outfit'. Missing article 'the' before 'summer' needed for 'the summer' as a season reference. Pronoun agreement: use 'they are' for plural 'T-shirts' rather than 'it's'. Repetition and filler words removed. The trailing 'which are' is incomplete; rewrite to a complete sentence 'I have many different kinds of T-shirts.' Suggestions: use plural pronouns and complete sentences, remove fillers.

× Uh, before buying them, I spend a lot of time, yes, selecting and choosing what to buy and, uh, which one is suitable for me, But uh, once I purchase them, I, I, uh, I don't spend much time to select them.

✓ Before buying them, I spend a lot of time selecting and choosing what to buy and which items are suitable for me, but once I purchase them I don't spend much time selecting them.

Problems: capitalized 'But' mid-sentence, redundant 'to select them' after 'don't spend much time' which should be followed by a gerund 'selecting'. Use 'which items are suitable' rather than 'which one is suitable' for clarity. Remove filler words and adjust punctuation. Suggestions: use gerunds after 'spend time' and keep conjunctions lowercase within sentences.

× On weekday, on weekdays, umm uh, I am quite busy, so I, I prefer to, to to to to wear some simple clothes.

✓ On weekdays I am quite busy, so I prefer to wear simple clothes.

Use 'on weekdays' (plural) to refer to regular weekdays. Remove repeated fillers and excessive repetition 'to'. 'Some simple clothes' is acceptable but 'simple clothes' is more natural. Suggestions: use plural 'weekdays' and avoid filler repetition.

× And on the weekends it is casual time, so I choose casual clothes.

✓ On weekends it's casual time, so I choose casual clothes.

Sentence is mostly correct; tightened phrasing by removing leading conjunction 'And' and using contraction 'it's' is optional. Tense matches habitual present. Suggestion: avoid starting sentences with 'And' in formal speech.

× I prefer to choose clothes with a light color such as white and a light yellow or the light blue and I think this color make me look young and smart.

✓ I prefer to choose clothes in light colors such as white, light yellow, and light blue, and I think these colors make me look young and smart.

Errors: 'a light color' should be plural 'light colors' when listing several examples. Article 'a' before 'light yellow' and 'the' before 'light blue' are incorrect. Subject-verb agreement: 'these colors make' (plural) not 'this color make'. Suggestions: use plural when referring to multiple colors, remove incorrect articles, and ensure subject-verb agreement.