Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and finish your thoughts. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), and add one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer casual clothes because I often meet friends and go out. For example, I usually wear jeans and a T‑shirt because they are comfortable and easy to move in. Because of that, I feel relaxed when I’m with friends.

提案: Answer directly (I prefer comfortable clothes), remove repetition, and explain one clear reason with a specific example. Use a linking word like because or so to connect reason and example.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they make me feel relaxed. For instance, I often wear a soft T‑shirt and a light jacket when I go out so I can move easily and stay comfortable all day.

提案: Be clearer and avoid hesitation. Give a short topic sentence, then one specific reason and an example. Keep sentences smooth and grammatical, and avoid repeating words.

例: Yes, I like wearing T‑shirts because they are comfortable. For example, on hot sunny days I wear a cotton T‑shirt because it keeps me cool and relaxed when I’m outside.

提案: Make your point directly (I don’t spend much time choosing clothes), correct vocabulary (clothes), and give a clear reason with one detail. Avoid contradictory phrases and hesitations.

例: No, I don’t spend much time choosing clothes because I don’t have many outfits. For example, I usually pick a T‑shirt and jeans quickly since I own only a few options.

提案: Answer directly (Yes or No) and explain briefly why with a clear contrast if needed. Correct vocabulary and avoid repeating. Use one linking word (because or so) to connect your reason.

例: No, I usually wear the same style on weekdays and weekends because I prefer simple, casual clothes rather than brand‑name outfits. So I tend to stick to T‑shirts and jeans every day.

提案: Start with a clear statement of your preferred color, avoid mispronounced words (e.g., 'black'), and give a concise reason or example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and reduce repetition.

例: I prefer black clothes because they make me look smart and cool. For example, I often choose a black T‑shirt or jacket when I want a simple but sharp look.

× I like to wear casual clothes because, uh, always, I always meet my friends and I always go to outside, uh, and I like to wear the.

✓ I like to wear casual clothes because I often meet my friends and I often go outside, and I like to wear them.

Use of adverbs and verb forms: 'always' is awkwardly repeated and misplaced; use 'often' for frequency and place it before the main verb. 'go to outside' is incorrect preposition usage — correct is 'go outside'. 'I like to wear the.' is incomplete; replace with 'I like to wear them' to refer to clothes using the pronoun 'them'. Improve fluency by removing filler words like 'uh'.

× In my opinion, I think I like to wear a comfortable coat because I like to wear the the T-shirt and the pen or something that make me feel good, make me comfortable, yeah.

✓ In my opinion, I like to wear a comfortable coat because I like to wear a T-shirt or something that makes me feel good and comfortable.

'the the T-shirt' has a duplicated article and unnecessary definite article; use 'a T-shirt'. 'the pen' is likely a wrong word; replace with 'or something'. Subject-verb agreement: 'make me' should be 'makes me' because 'something' is singular. Remove fillers and redundant phrases ('I think I') for clarity.

× Yes, I like to wear AT shirt because, uh it make me comfortable.

✓ Yes, I like to wear a T-shirt because it makes me comfortable.

Article and capitalization: 'AT shirt' should be 'a T-shirt'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it make' should be 'it makes' because third-person singular requires '-s'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× For example, when I go outside and uh this, the sun is really, really hard, really hot. Uh, I'm going to wear T-shirts it because it's, it's so relaxed and uh, and.

✓ For example, when I go outside and the sun is very hot, I wear T-shirts because they are comfortable and relaxed.

Tense and phrasing: Use simple present 'I go' and 'I wear' for habitual actions. 'The sun is really, really hard' is incorrect adjective choice; use 'very hot'. 'I'm going to wear' implies future intention; use 'I wear' for habitual behavior. 'T-shirts it' should be 'they' to match plural. 'so relaxed' should be 'comfortable and relaxed'. Remove fillers and finish the sentence.

× Alright, I think I, uh, I think I will text a less of time to choose the causes because, uh, I don't have many. I have so many calls in my room.

✓ Alright, I think I will take less time to choose clothes because I don't have many; I have so many clothes in my room.

Wrong word choice and sentence structure: 'text a less of time' is incorrect — use 'take less time'. 'choose the causes' should be 'choose clothes'. 'I don't have many' conflicts with 'I have so many calls' — likely intended 'I don't have many' should be 'I don't spend much time' or keep 'I have so many clothes'. Corrected to coherent meaning: fewer words and correct vocabulary ('clothes' not 'calls').

× I think I usually wear the same style of code on board of the board of Vick because I don't have I don't like I don't like to wear the the brand name code.

✓ I think I usually wear the same style of clothes on weekdays because I don't like to wear brand-name clothes.

Multiple errors: 'code' should be 'clothes'. 'on board of the board of Vick' is unintelligible; likely 'on weekdays'. Remove repeated negatives and duplicated 'the the'. Use 'brand-name clothes' for correct adjective-noun collocation. Simplify sentence for clarity.

× Adding the color of course I like is a pen of code. For example, I like to wear a back shirt back T-shirt because it's make me feel smart and cool on the on the same time. OK.

✓ Of course, the color I like is a pen of cloth. For example, I like to wear a black T-shirt because it makes me feel smart and cool at the same time.

Many errors: sentence start and word order — begin with 'Of course'. 'a pen of code' is nonsensical; likely intended 'a pair of clothes' or 'a black color' — corrected to plausible meaning 'the color I like is black'. 'back shirt back T-shirt' should be 'black T-shirt'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it's make' -> 'it makes'. 'on the on the same time' -> 'at the same time'. Note: If intended meaning differs, student should clarify 'pen of code' phrase. Suggest practicing vocabulary for colors and clothing words.