Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence stating the types you prefer, then give one or two specific reasons with precise vocabulary. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid contradictory phrases (e.g., ‘baggy’ usually looks less formal). Keep it under 3–4 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

例: I prefer wearing simple, monochrome clothes, especially black or white. I like looser, slightly baggy styles because they are comfortable and easy to move in. For formal occasions I choose a well-fitting shirt to look neat, but for everyday wear I usually pick relaxed trousers and plain tops.

提案: Answer directly (choose one: comfortable casual or smart), then explain with clear reasons and one example. Avoid contradictions: don’t say casual makes you look formal. Use correct verb forms and articles, and limit to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘however’.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they suit my daily activities and help me feel relaxed. However, when I meet customers at work I wear smart clothes to appear professional and respectful.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and a concise reason with correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘T-shirts’ not ‘tea shirt’). Mention one specific context (summer, work, exercise) and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I often wear T-shirts because summers are very hot in my town. T-shirts keep me cool and comfortable during the day, especially when I walk or work outside.

提案: Begin with a clear yes/no and provide a specific reason and example. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use correct sentence structure and linking words like ‘because’ and ‘so’. Limit to 2–3 sentences and explain what factors you consider (fit, comfort, occasion).

例: Yes, I usually spend some time choosing clothes because I want to feel comfortable and look smart. I check the fit and colour before buying, and I avoid items that make me look too thin or ill-fitting.

提案: Answer clearly and provide contrast using linking words like ‘but’ or ‘however’. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘weekdays’, ‘weekends’, ‘uniform’, ‘casual clothes’). Give one concrete example of what you wear for work and at weekends. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear smart, neat clothes or a uniform for my job at a café because I need to look professional. On weekends I choose casual, comfortable clothes like jeans and a T-shirt to relax.

提案: State your favourite colours clearly, then explain why and give one specific situation. Use correct tenses and avoid unclear phrases like ‘black rotates’. Keep it to 2 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

例: I prefer black and white clothes because they look clean and professional. For example, I wear black at work since it hides stains, while I choose white or light colours for formal events.

× I like the reasonable qualities and some things like baggy especially on the black or white colors.

✓ I like reasonable styles and things that are baggy, especially in black or white.

The original uses incorrect nouns and adjective forms ('reasonable qualities', 'the black or white colors'). Replace with 'reasonable styles' and 'baggy' as an adjective modifying 'things' or 'clothes'. Use 'in black or white' to describe color. Also remove unnecessary articles for natural phrasing.

× Uh, it makes me looks more formal and looks fat than the skinny ones clothes.

✓ They make me look more formal and make me look bigger than skinny clothes do.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'it makes me looks' is wrong. Use plural subject 'they' or refer to 'they make' and base verb 'look'. 'Looks fat' should be 'look bigger' and compare to 'skinny clothes' using 'than... do' to avoid awkward 'ones clothes'.

× Yes, I prefer to wear a comfortable and casual creative.

✓ Yes, I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes.

'Creative' is the wrong word here; use noun 'clothes'. Also articles: 'a comfortable and casual creative' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'clothes' without 'a'.

× This make me looks formal and attractive to the many peoples.

✓ This makes me look formal and attractive to many people.

Use third-person singular verb 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'This'. Use base verb 'look' after 'make(s)'. 'The many peoples' is incorrect: use 'many people' (uncountable plural) and drop 'the'.

× This is the old classic uh, dressing sense with peoples, uh, shows them good behavior to us and that's why I prefer the uh, formal qualities.

✓ This is the old classic dressing sense of people; it shows good manners to others, and that's why I prefer formal styles.

Replace 'peoples' with 'people' and rephrase for clarity. 'Shows them good behavior to us' is awkward—use 'shows good manners to others'. 'Formal qualities' should be 'formal styles' or 'formal clothing'.

× Yes, I like wearing tea shirt because in my towns there is like a summer or more hot temperature during the day.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because in my town it is often hot during the day.

Use 'T-shirts' (plural) and correct 'tea shirt' typo. 'My towns' should be 'my town' unless multiple towns are meant. 'There is like a summer or more hot temperature' is ungrammatical—use 'it is often hot' or 'there is a hot summer'.

× When I wear the T-shirt I feel comfortable and relaxed and temperature is become certain and do not feel the warmth.

✓ When I wear a T-shirt I feel comfortable and relaxed, and the temperature feels milder so I do not feel too warm.

Use 'a T-shirt' or 'T-shirts'. 'Temperature is become certain' is incorrect—say 'the temperature feels milder' or 'I feel less warm'. Fix subject-verb and idiomatic expressions.

× I take amount of time while choosing the clothes because and you feel comfortable and looks smart and formal while wearing the clothes because some clothes shows me skinny and more.

✓ I take some time choosing clothes because I want to feel comfortable and look smart and formal; some clothes make me look skinny or have other effects.

Original has fragmented clauses and incorrect pronouns. Use 'I take some time' and 'I want to feel' and 'look smart'. 'Some clothes shows me skinny' should be 'some clothes make me look skinny'. Maintain parallel structure.

× Yes, in weekdays I usually wear formal dresses because I am under duty and I work in a cafe where I have to appreciate or makes good or and smart in front of the people.

✓ Yes, on weekdays I usually wear formal clothes because I am on duty; I work in a cafe where I have to look neat and smart in front of customers.

Use 'on weekdays' not 'in weekdays'. 'Under duty' should be 'on duty'. 'Appreciate or makes good' is wrong—use 'look neat and smart' or 'appear professional'. 'The people' -> 'customers' or 'people'.

× But in the weekends I want to feel comfortable and relax on my dress so I wear different quality.

✓ But on weekends I want to feel comfortable and relaxed, so I wear different clothes.

'On weekends' is correct preposition. 'Relax on my dress' should be 'relaxed' and 'different quality' should be 'different clothes' or 'clothes of different quality'. Keep parallel structure.

× I feel for black and white clothes when I were when I went to work some in dirty areas or in the field of comfort.

✓ I prefer black and white clothes when I go to work in dirty areas or when I need practical clothing.

Use 'prefer' not 'feel for'. Verb tense: 'when I were when I went' is mixed—use present 'when I go' or past consistently. 'Field of comfort' unclear—replace with 'need practical clothing'.

× I prefer umm black rotates but in in some formal.

✓ I prefer black, but for some formal occasions I choose other colors.

'Black rotates' is unclear; likely 'black clothes' or 'black outfits'. Remove filler 'umm'. Clarify meaning and use 'formal occasions'.