Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct phrasing; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g., “long skids”).

例: I like wearing crop tops with jeans or shorts. I prefer this style because it’s trendy among my peers and it feels comfortable for everyday activities; for example, I can easily hang out with friends or go shopping without feeling overdressed.

提案: Clarify and correct grammatical mistakes; use linking words (because, so, therefore) and give a specific example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words.

例: I prefer casual clothes because most of my social activities are relaxed. For example, when I meet friends for dinner or coffee, casual outfits like jeans and a simple top are comfortable and appropriate, so I rarely need to dress formally.

提案: Use correct grammar and reduce hesitation. Begin with a clear statement, then give a concise reason and one specific example. Avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Not really — I rarely wear T-shirts now. I mostly wore them at school for sports or events, but these days I prefer other tops because they suit my style better and look more fashionable.

提案: Remove fillers and repeat words; use linking words to organize explanation (for example, because, so). Give a specific detail about what makes choosing hard (fit, colour, price).

例: Yes, I spend a long time choosing clothes because I want outfits that fit well and match my style. For example, I often try on many items to find the right size and colour, so shopping can take most of a day.

提案: Be direct and avoid circular statements. State your main point, then give a brief, specific explanation or example. Avoid trailing off and repetition.

例: Not really — I wear similar casual clothes both on weekdays and weekends. For instance, I usually stick to jeans and simple tops all week because my daily routine doesn’t require formal dressing.

提案: Avoid repeating the same reason twice; be specific about shades or combinations and link ideas coherently. Correct the claim that colour affects comfort—focus on mood and style. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer bright colours, especially pink. I often choose pastel or bubblegum pink because it lifts my mood and suits my style; for example, wearing a pink blouse makes me feel more cheerful on dull days.

× I love to wear crop tops and jeans or maybe shorts. This is because I'm currently this is the most trending fashion that's available and for my generation I feel like it's the fashion that's more preferable than wearing long skids or maybe decent clothes which is something that I don't want.

✓ I love to wear crop tops and jeans or maybe shorts. This is because currently this is the most trending fashion available, and for my generation I feel it is more preferable than wearing long skirts or more conservative clothes, which I don't want to wear.

The original contains repetition and awkward phrasing ('I'm currently this is'), mixed clauses and incorrect word choice ('skids' instead of 'skirts'). Suggestion: remove redundant words, join clauses with proper conjunctions, and use the correct noun 'skirts' and 'conservative clothes' for clarity.

× I prefer to wear casual clothes. This is because mainly when ionem going out with my friends, we just go out for like functions that do not need me to wear any smart clothes or any comfortable clothes.

✓ I prefer to wear casual clothes. This is mainly because when I am going out with my friends, we usually go to events that do not require me to wear smart clothes.

Problems: misspelling 'ionem', incorrect verb form and unnecessary repetition 'go out for like functions'. Use 'I am going' or contracted 'I'm going' and 'events that do not require' for correct verb form and register; remove redundant 'any comfortable clothes' because it conflicts with preference.

× We just go out at any random restaurant just to eat and chill.

✓ We just go to a random restaurant to eat and relax.

'Go out at any random restaurant' is awkward and contains repetition of 'just'. Use 'go to a random restaurant' and prefer 'relax' over colloquial 'chill' for clearer speech.

× So I'd prefer wearing casual clothes than smart clothes 'cause it's more comfortable to wear.

✓ So I'd prefer wearing casual clothes to smart clothes because they are more comfortable.

Use 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'prefer X than Y'. Avoid slang 'cause'; use 'because'. Match plural pronoun 'they' to 'clothes' for agreement.

× I think I not really fond of wearing T-shirts.

✓ I think I am not really fond of wearing T-shirts.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for the adjective 'fond'. Add 'am' to form correct present tense 'I am not really fond'.

× I only used to wear T-shirts mainly when I was at school for like sports and other school events that needed me to wear T-shirts.

✓ I only used to wear T-shirts mainly when I was at school for sports and other school events that required me to wear T-shirts.

'Needed me to wear' is unnatural; use 'required me to wear' for correct past meaning. Remove filler 'like'.

× But as of now, I don't think it's really necessary for me to wear any T-shirts.

✓ But for now, I don't think it's necessary for me to wear T-shirts.

'As of now' is acceptable but wordy; 'any' is unnecessary. Simplify to 'for now' and remove extra words for natural present-tense statement.

× Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes 'cause, umm, when I go for shopping mainly, I usually take the whole day just to shop for clothes that I want to wear 'cause I find it very difficult.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because when I go shopping, I often spend the whole day looking for clothes I want to wear because I find it difficult to decide.

Avoid fillers 'umm' and repeated 'cause'. Use 'go shopping' rather than 'go for shopping', 'spend the whole day looking for' is clearer, and 'decide' better expresses difficulty choosing.

× I find it very hard for me to pick out the exact outfits that's very suitable and the one that I I really want.

✓ I find it very hard to pick out the exact outfits that are most suitable and the ones that I really want.

Remove redundant 'for me'. Subject-verb agreement: 'outfits that are' (plural). Remove duplicate 'I'. Use 'ones' to match plural 'outfits'.

× Not really. Usually I just wear the same thing throughout. When I'm wearing casual I can literally spend the whole week just wearing casual.

✓ Not really. Usually I wear the same style throughout. If I'm dressed casually, I can literally spend the whole week wearing casual clothes.

'When I'm wearing casual' is incomplete; use 'dressed casually' or 'wearing casual clothes'. Clarify 'same thing' to 'same style' for natural phrasing.

× I don't have outfits for weekdays and for weekends. So because of that, during the weekdays I can be any type of clothing. During the weekends I can wear any type of clothing. I don't have a specific type that I.

✓ I don't have separate outfits for weekdays and weekends. Because of that, I can wear any type of clothing during weekdays or weekends; I don't have a specific type.

Avoid repetition and incomplete sentence 'that I.' Combine ideas into coherent sentences: 'separate outfits' and 'any type of clothing' placed correctly.

× I love bright colours, but mainly pink. Pink is my favorite colour and because of that I usually wear pink clothes.

✓ I love bright colours, especially pink. Pink is my favorite colour, so I usually wear pink clothes.

'Mainly' is acceptable but 'especially' sounds more natural. Use 'so' to express cause-effect concisely.

× I like wearing pink clothes because I feel like they're more comfortable and the colour just brightens my mood.

✓ I like wearing pink clothes because I feel they are more comfortable and the colour brightens my mood.

Avoid contraction 'they're' if preferring formal clarity; remove 'just' as filler. Use 'I feel they are' for correct pronoun reference.

× If I'm feeling gloomy or sad, I feel like pink just brightens up my mood because it's cute and.

✓ If I'm feeling gloomy or sad, pink brightens my mood because it's cute and cheerful.

Original ends abruptly 'and.' Replace with a completing adjective 'cheerful' and remove repetitive 'I feel like' for conciseness.