Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples with linking words. Reduce hesitations and repetition.

例: It depends on the situation. For example, on holidays or when I go shopping or to a café with friends, I usually wear casual clothes like jeans and a T-shirt, or a sporty outfit when I plan to be active.

提案: Give a direct answer then explain briefly with a reason. Use linking words (because/so) and avoid repeating words. Correct grammar: 'comfortable and casual' not 'cultural'.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes for everyday wear because they let me move freely. For instance, I often wear sweatshirts and trainers when I'm running errands or meeting friends.

提案: Answer directly and then add a short specific reason. Avoid awkward phrasing—use 'an essential part of my wardrobe' instead of 'a piece who necessary'. Keep it to two sentences max.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. They are an essential part of my wardrobe because they are comfortable and easy to style with different outfits.

提案: Give a clear statement and one specific supporting detail. Use correct word order and tense. Avoid repetition and hesitations.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because my mother often picks items for me. I also don't enjoy shopping, so I usually buy only what I need.

提案: Start with a clear yes/no answer, then add a specific contrast if needed. Mention one example of when you might change style. Eliminate filler words.

例: No, I usually wear casual clothes both on weekdays and weekends because I prefer comfort. Occasionally, I wear sports clothes if I plan to exercise or play sports on the weekend.

提案: Be specific about why you like those colours and give one concrete example. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid vague phrases like 'something like this'.

例: I prefer white, yellow and green because white looks clean, yellow feels cheerful and green reminds me of nature. For example, I often wear a white T-shirt with a green jacket when I want a fresh, energetic look.

× Honestly it's depend depend the situation.

✓ Honestly it depends on the situation.

The verb 'depend' needs third person singular present agreement with subject 'it', so add -s: 'depends'; also the correct pattern is 'depend on the situation'. Remove repetition 'depend depend'. Suggestion: Use 'it depends on' for general statements about situations.

× When I'm uh, in holidays or uh uh go to coffee or shopping with my friends, I wear my uh, casual uh uh clothes or I wear uh, sports outfit.

✓ When I'm on holiday or when I go for coffee or shopping with my friends, I wear casual clothes or a sports outfit.

Use 'on holiday' (not 'in holidays') and parallel clauses require 'when I go'; 'go to coffee' should be 'go for coffee'. 'Casual clothes' is plural and 'a sports outfit' needs an article. Remove filler words. Suggestion: Keep parallel structure and correct prepositions.

× I would wear a comfortable and cultural clothes for my daily day.

✓ I would wear comfortable and casual clothes for my daily life.

Mismatch: 'clothes' is plural so do not use 'a'. 'Cultural' is incorrect word choice; likely 'casual'. 'Daily day' is redundant; use 'daily life' or 'everyday'. Suggestion: Use plural agreement and correct adjective choice.

× I like I prefer it 'cause I think it. Comfortable. Feel daily, active.

✓ I prefer it because I think it's comfortable and suits my daily active life.

Fragmented sentences and missing auxiliary 'it's' for 'it is'. 'Because' instead of ''cause' in formal speech. Combine ideas into one coherent sentence. Suggestion: Use complete sentences and link clauses properly.

× Of course I wear T-shirt.

✓ Of course I wear a T-shirt.

Article missing before singular countable noun 'T-shirt'. Use 'a'. Suggestion: Use articles with singular countable nouns.

× It's, uh, a piece who necessary in my, uh, outfit, uh, eventually, uh, in uh.

✓ It's a necessary piece in my outfit.

Use 'necessary' as adjective modifying 'piece'. 'Who' is for people, not objects. Remove filler words and unnecessary fragments. Suggestion: Use 'which' or better rephrase to 'a necessary piece'.

× I don't spend a lot of time, uh, to choosing my, uh, outfit, uh, personality, personality.

✓ I don't spend a lot of time choosing my outfits; my mother chooses clothes for me.

After 'spend time' use verb+ing (choosing) — that part existed but pairing with 'to' is wrong. 'Outfit' plural fits general meaning. Also original repeats and fragments. Suggestion: Use 'spend time choosing' and clean repetition.

× My mother who, uh, chose, uh, clothes for me.

✓ My mother chooses clothes for me.

Tense and relative clause errors: use simple present 'chooses' for habitual action. 'Who' is unnecessary here. Suggestion: Use concise present tense for habits.

× I don't prefer, uh, shopping, uh, much to be honestly.

✓ I don't really prefer shopping, to be honest.

Awkward phrasing 'to be honestly' incorrect; correct idiom is 'to be honest'. Move adverb 'really' before verb. Suggestion: Use set phrase 'to be honest' and place adverbs properly.

× No, I don't uh, every day I uh, I wear uh, my, uh, casual, uh, outfit.

✓ No, every day I wear my casual outfit.

Unnecessary 'I' repetition and fillers. Use simple present for habitual action. Suggestion: Keep concise: 'Every day I wear my casual outfit.'

× Uh, so I don't have a special day, uh, wearing uh, wear special outfit.

✓ So I don't have a special day for wearing a special outfit.

Awkward word order and missing preposition 'for'. Use 'a special outfit' with article. Suggestion: Use 'day for wearing' or 'a special day to wear'.

× Maybe in we can't, uh, I wear sport outfit.

✓ Maybe I can't, but sometimes I wear a sports outfit.

Original is unintelligible; fix modality and word order. Use 'sometimes' to indicate occasional action and 'a sports outfit' with article. Suggestion: Use clear connectors and correct article.

× I prefer uh, white and uh, yellow and green in my outfit.

✓ I prefer white, yellow, and green in my outfits.

Preposition 'in' is acceptable but plural 'outfits' sounds more natural for general preference. Also punctuation and listing. Suggestion: Use commas for lists and pluralize when generalizing.

× I like, uh, these colors very much. I feel they may give me, uh, energy and something like this.

✓ I like these colors very much because I feel they give me energy.

Avoid filler 'uh' and vague phrase 'something like this'. 'May' is unnecessary if stating a feeling. Combine into one clear sentence. Suggestion: Use 'because' to connect reason and be specific.