Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to add one specific detail (e.g., material and occasion).

例: I prefer comfortable clothes, especially loose cotton garments that don’t restrict movement. For example, I wear breathable cotton shirts and relaxed-fit trousers when I go out, and shorts and T-shirts at home for maximum comfort.

提案: Give a direct answer, avoid hesitations and repetition, and correct grammar (e.g., 'for most people' not 'every people'). Provide one brief reason with a linking phrase like 'because' and a short example or contrast.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes rather than smart outfits because they allow me to move freely and feel relaxed. For instance, I would choose a soft polo and chinos for long days instead of a tight suit.

提案: Clarify vocabulary and avoid filler words. Give a clear topic sentence then one short specific reason or example. Replace unclear words ('dessert desserts', 'kulthas') with correct terms ('loose T-shirts', 'traditional clothes').

例: Yes, I enjoy wearing loose T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to pair with jeans or shorts. For example, I often wear a plain loose tee with denim when I go out with friends.

提案: Start with a concise direct answer, then give a short reason and one specific detail (e.g., preference for certain fits or colors). Avoid exaggerated expressions without explanation.

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I'm very particular about fit and color. For example, I try on several shirts to find the right sleeve length and shade before I buy.

提案: Correct grammar (e.g., 'I wear' not 'I were'), keep answer clear and add a linking word to compare styles. Give one specific example of weekday and weekend outfits.

例: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekends I wear comfortable shorts and loose T-shirts to relax, whereas on weekdays I wear formal shirts and trousers for work.

提案: Complete the answer and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples of preferred shades and explain why you prefer them. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I like many colours but prefer particular shades because they suit me better. For instance, I choose olive green over bright green and navy blue instead of light blue because these tones look more flattering and versatile.

× I prefer really comfortable clothes like cotton clothes which is not tight and which gives me comfort when I'm walking or when I'm outside the home.

✓ I prefer really comfortable clothes like cotton clothes which are not tight and which give me comfort when I'm walking or when I'm outside the home.

The relative clause refers to 'clothes' (plural), so plural verbs and pronouns must be used. 'Which is' and 'which gives' are singular. Change to 'which are' and 'which give' to match the plural noun 'clothes'. Suggestion: identify the noun the relative clause modifies and ensure verb number agrees with that noun.

× And inside home I just wear shorts and T-shirt.

✓ And inside the home I just wear shorts and a T-shirt.

English requires the definite article 'the' before 'home' in this context and the indefinite article 'a' before the singular count noun 'T-shirt'. Omit or misuse of articles causes unnatural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'the home' for a specific place (one's home) and 'a T-shirt' for a single item.

× I prefer wearing comfortable clothes over casual clothes or smart clothes because uh, I think comfort is the first priority of every people and I don't like being being uncomfortable.

✓ I prefer wearing comfortable clothes rather than casual or smart clothes because I think comfort is the first priority for everyone and I don't like being uncomfortable.

'Every people' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'everyone' or 'every person'. Also use 'rather than' for comparing preferences and avoid repeating words ('being being'). Suggestion: use 'everyone' for general statements about people and 'rather than' to contrast alternatives.

× Umm for smart clothes?

✓ What about smart clothes?

As a standalone question, 'Umm for smart clothes?' is fragmentary. Rephrase into a full question 'What about smart clothes?' to be clear and grammatical. Suggestion: convert fragments into complete questions with subject and verb when possible.

× Yes, I like loose dessert desserts umm over any other clothes like suits, kulthas.

✓ Yes, I like loose shirts over any other clothes like suits or kulthas.

'Dessert desserts' is nonsensical here, likely a mispronunciation. Also use 'shirts' or 'T-shirts' instead. Use 'or' to list alternatives, not 'like' twice. Suggestion: choose the correct clothing word and use 'or' when giving examples.

× I think I am the most picky person I've ever known.

✓ I think I am the pickiest person I have ever known.

'Most picky' is less natural than the superlative 'pickiest'. The present perfect 'I've ever known' is acceptable, but 'I am the pickiest person I have ever known' is the natural phrasing. Suggestion: use standard superlative forms (pickiest) for one-word adjectives.

× So yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes and even when I'm shopping I barely like any clothes so it's really hard for me to choose one.

✓ So yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes and even when I'm shopping I rarely like any clothes, so it's really hard for me to choose one.

'Barely like any clothes' is incorrect in this context; 'rarely' better expresses low frequency. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' joining clauses. Suggestion: use 'rarely' for frequency and punctuate compound sentences correctly.

× Yes, during weekends I were comfortable shorts and loose T-shirt because I don't have to go anywhere but my home.

✓ Yes, during weekends I wear comfortable shorts and a loose T-shirt because I don't have to go anywhere but my home.

'Were' is the past tense of 'wear' and is incorrect here; present habitual 'wear' is required. Also add 'a' before 'loose T-shirt'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and check subject-verb agreement.

× But during weekdays I have to go to work so I have to wear formal clothes.

✓ But during weekdays I have to go to work, so I have to wear formal clothes.

The sentence is mostly correct grammatically; the issue is missing comma before coordinating conjunction. No preposition change needed; comma improves sentence clarity. Suggestion: use a comma before 'so' when it connects two independent clauses.

× I like almost every colors of clothes but only certain shade of every color.

✓ I like almost every color of clothing but only certain shades of each color.

'Every colors' mixes singular and plural; use 'every color' or 'almost every color'. 'Shade' should be plural 'shades' to match 'certain'. 'Of every color' is better as 'of each color'. Suggestion: match singular/plural correctly and use 'color of clothing' or 'color of clothes'.

× So umm like if I have to wear green I would choose olive green, not the umm usual green we know.

✓ So, if I have to wear green I would choose olive green, not the usual green.

Remove filler words and the redundant phrase 'we know'. 'The usual green' is sufficient. Also add a comma after 'So'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary fillers and redundancy for clarity.

× And if I have to wear.

✓ And if I have to wear another color, I would choose a muted shade.

The original fragment lacks a verb and a completion. Supply a predicate to complete the conditional thought. Suggestion: always finish clauses; 'if' clauses must be followed by a main clause to be complete.