Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Fix grammar and make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one specific reason, and an example. Use correct tense and articles, and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes because I have two young children. For example, I wear a lot of T-shirts and stretchy trousers so I can move easily and clean up spills quickly.

提案: Answer directly (prefer comfortable clothes), correct unclear phrases, and give a concise reason with one clear example. Avoid muddled words and filler.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I need to move around a lot with my two children. For instance, I often wear leggings and loose tops that let me pick them up or run after them quickly.

提案: This is a good short answer. To improve, add a specific detail or brief example using a linking word to expand naturally (one or two sentences maximum).

例: Yes, definitely. I like wearing T-shirts because they are convenient and comfortable; for example, I often choose a cotton T-shirt when I'm taking my children to the park because it keeps me cool and is easy to wash.

提案: Good structure: direct answer plus reason and example. Improve grammar (plural/singular, tense) and tighten phrasing. Use one linking phrase to make it smoother.

例: No, I don't. My mornings are very busy, so I usually pick my outfit the night before, which saves time and helps me leave the house quickly.

提案: Make the contrast clear with correct linking words (on weekdays vs on weekends). Correct vocabulary mistakes and reduce hesitations. Give one concrete example for each case.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear practical clothes like jeans and trainers because I need to move around, while on weekends I often choose dressier outfits, such as a skirt or a nicer blouse, for going out.

提案: Correct word choice and grammar, state the main idea first, then explain clearly with one specific effect. Replace vague phrases with precise ones.

例: I like pink because it lifts my mood and brightens my appearance; when I'm stressed I often wear a pink top because it makes me feel calmer and more cheerful.

× I prefer to comfortable clothes because I have to children.

✓ I prefer comfortable clothes because I have two children.

The adjective 'comfortable' should directly modify 'clothes' without 'to'. Also 'to children' is incorrect; the student meant 'two children' (number) so use the plural noun with the numeral. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary 'to' and use 'two' for the number.

× So parenting needs to wear comfortable clothes.

✓ As a parent, I need to wear comfortable clothes.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and word choice. 'Parenting needs' is incorrect; use the noun phrase 'As a parent' or 'Because I'm a parent' and change 'needs to wear' to 'I need to wear' to form a correct subject-verb phrase.

× For example, I have a lot of T-shirts.

✓ For example, I have a lot of T-shirts.

This sentence is grammatically correct but included here for clarity: it properly uses quantifier 'a lot of' with plural noun 'T-shirts'. No change needed.

× It's really.

✓ They really are.

'It's really' is incomplete and unclear. The student likely refers to the T-shirts being really comfortable/handy. Replace with 'They really are' or complete the idea: 'They are really comfortable.' Ensure subject matches plural 'T-shirts'.

× Yes, I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because I have to kiss and I need to move around easily with my two children.

✓ Yes, I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because I have to look after and move around easily with my two children.

'Have to kiss' is incorrect and makes no sense in context; likely the student meant 'have to look after' or 'have to care for'. 'Prefer to wear' is acceptable. Replace unclear verb with appropriate phrasal verb. Ensure meaning fits context.

× So I have many comfortable teachers and this they really have for for me when I'm.

✓ So I have many comfortable T-shirts, and they are really useful for me when I'm busy.

Multiple errors: 'teachers' is a mispronunciation/misspelling of 'T-shirts'. The clause 'this they really have for for me when I'm' is ungrammatical and incomplete. Correct noun, remove duplicate 'for', add appropriate adjective 'useful', and complete the clause with 'when I'm busy' to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, definitely. I like wearing T-shirts because it's very convenient and comfortable for me.

✓ Yes, definitely. I like wearing T-shirts because they are very convenient and comfortable for me.

T-shirts is plural, so refer to them with the plural pronoun 'they' and the plural verb 'are'. Using 'it's' (it is) is singular and mismatches the plural noun.

× No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because my morning are really busy, so I choose my outfit in advance last night which helps me save time and get out of the door quickly.

✓ No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because my mornings are really busy, so I chose my outfit in advance last night, which helped me save time and get out the door quickly.

Multiple tense and number issues: 'morning' should be plural 'mornings'. Because the student says they chose the outfit 'last night', the verbs should be past tense ('chose', 'helped') to maintain consistent time reference. Also 'get out of the door' should be 'get out the door' or 'get out of the house'; the idiomatic phrase is 'get out the door'. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes, sometimes all weekdays. I usually I wear practical clothes because I have to check around and I need to move around easily.

✓ Yes, on weekdays I usually wear practical clothes because I have to be on the move and I need to move around easily.

'Sometimes all weekdays' is ungrammatical; use 'on weekdays' or 'during weekdays'. Remove duplicate 'I'. 'Have to check around' is unclear; replace with 'have to be on the move' or 'have to move around' to express frequent activity. Maintain present tense for habitual actions.

× Uh, on the on hand, on week ends I wear more prettier and dressier outfits.

✓ On the other hand, on weekends I wear prettier and dressier outfits.

Use the idiom 'on the other hand' not 'on the on hand'. 'Week ends' should be one word 'weekends'. 'More prettier' is a double comparative; use either 'prettier' or 'more pretty' (prefer 'prettier'). Keep parallel adjectives 'prettier and dressier'.

× I like color pink because it makes me feel higher and brighten me so when I under stress I try to wear pink clothes it makes me feel better.

✓ I like the color pink because it lifts my mood and brightens me, so when I'm under stress I try to wear pink clothes; they make me feel better.

Several errors: 'color pink' needs an article and correct order: 'the color pink'. 'Feel higher' is unnatural; use 'lifts my mood' or 'makes me feel happier'. 'Brighten me' should be 'brightens me' or better 'brightens my mood'. 'When I under stress' needs auxiliary: 'when I'm under stress'. Also split into two clauses and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'they make me feel better'. Use punctuation to separate ideas.