Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation and correct grammar (e.g. verb forms), give a clear topic sentence then one concise supporting detail. Use linking words if adding details. Aim for 2–4 sentences and avoid filler sounds like 'uh' and 'umm'.

例: I prefer casual, comfortable clothes. For example, I usually wear T‑shirts, pants or shorts because they are practical and allow me to move easily.

提案: Start with a direct statement answering the question, then add one clear reason and a brief exception. Fix subject–verb agreement and plural forms, and remove hesitations. Use a linking phrase like 'however' for the contrast.

例: I usually prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they let me move freely for daily activities. However, I wear smart clothes for professional settings like interviews or formal meetings.

提案: Give a concise affirmative response and one clear reason, then a short exception. Remove filler words and reorganize the exception to be grammatically correct. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I like wearing T‑shirts because they are comfortable and practical for everyday activities. I avoid them only for important meetings or formal occasions.

提案: Answer directly, correct vocabulary (wardrobe), and make sentences concise and grammatical. Give one specific detail about your routine. Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: Not really. I usually grab whatever is at the front of my wardrobe because those items are the most comfortable and I wear them every day.

提案: Give a clear main sentence explaining why, then one supporting detail. Remove hesitations and repetitive phrases. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'since' correctly and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I wear similar clothes on weekdays and weekends because I work from home and rarely attend meetings. Therefore I usually choose casual outfits like shirts and shorts.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then one precise reason. Fix grammar (e.g. 'I'm particularly into' and 'those colors bring'). Avoid repetition of 'cheerful' and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I'm particularly into bright colours such as pink, purple and yellow because they make me feel cheerful and give me positive energy during the day.

× Uh, I'm mostly, uh, be into clothes that are casual and comfortable.

✓ Uh, I'm mostly into clothes that are casual and comfortable.

The original uses 'be into' after 'I'm mostly,' resulting in an unnecessary extra verb 'be'. Use the adjective phrase 'into clothes' after 'I'm' to express preference. Suggestion: remove the extra 'be' to form 'I'm mostly into...'.

× I often uh, choose shirts, uh, pants and shorts.

✓ I often choose shirts, pants and shorts.

The sentence is acceptable but contains filler 'uh' and redundant commas. Clean present simple tense is 'I often choose...'. Suggestion: remove fillers for clarity and keep present simple for habitual actions.

× Things like that are most practical and convenient.

✓ Things like that are the most practical and convenient.

Comparative structure needs an article 'the' when indicating a definite degree ('the most practical'). Add 'the' to properly mark the superlative sense. Suggestion: use 'the most' when comparing or emphasizing degree.

× Umm, there are uh, allows me to move physically easily.

✓ Umm, they allow me to move physically easily.

'There are' is used for existence, but the sentence intends to refer to 'clothes' (they). Using 'they allow' agrees in number and uses correct subject. Also 'move physically easily' is awkward; consider 'move easily' or 'move physically with ease'. Suggestion: replace 'there are' with 'they' and use 'allow' to match plural subject.

× Uh, what? Let's say most of the time, I often go with casual clothes like shirts, umm, shorts and pants, things like that.

✓ Let's say most of the time I go with casual clothes like shirts, shorts and pants.

Redundant adverbs 'most of the time' and 'often' together create repetition. Keep one present simple indicator (e.g., 'most of the time' or 'often'). Remove filler words and commas for smoother present habitual expression.

× Umm, most practical and they allows me to move easily and do any activities that I want to.

✓ Umm, they're the most practical and they allow me to move easily and do any activities I want to.

Subject 'they' requires verb 'allow' not 'allows'. Also add 'the' for 'most practical' as a superlative and remove unnecessary 'that'. Suggestion: ensure plural subject pairs with plural verb and streamline clauses.

× But from time to time I do go with a smart clothes, especially when I need to go to a professional settings.

✓ But from time to time I do wear smart clothes, especially when I need to go to professional settings.

'A smart clothes' is incorrect because 'clothes' is plural and cannot take 'a'. Use 'wear' rather than 'go with' for natural collocation. 'A professional settings' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use plural 'professional settings' or singular 'a professional setting'. Suggestion: match articles to countability and choose appropriate verbs for collocations.

× Uh, they're really practical and can, helps me move easily in the physical term.

✓ They're really practical and help me move easily physically.

Combining modal 'can' with an extra verb form 'helps' is incorrect. Either 'can help me' or 'help me' should be used. 'In the physical term' is awkward; use 'physically' or 'in physical situations'. Suggestion: use one verb structure ('help' or 'can help') and prefer 'physically'.

× So, uh, only when I have to go to important meetings or meet uh, important people when I don't wear T-shirts.

✓ So I only don't wear T-shirts when I have to go to important meetings or meet important people.

The original has redundant 'when' and awkward word order. Move 'only' to modify the negative appropriately and avoid double 'when'. Suggestion: place 'only' before the negative verb phrase and remove duplicate conjunctions.

× Not really. I tend to pick whatever I see when I open my word drop.

✓ Not really. I tend to pick whatever I see when I open my wardrobe.

'Word drop' is a misheard or incorrect phrase; the intended noun is 'wardrobe'. Correcting this noun fixes meaning. Suggestion: use accurate vocabulary for objects.

× Umm, I often because most of the clothes that I often wear are like right in front of the wardrobe and so they are kind of comfortable and I wear them like mostly on a daily basis.

✓ I often choose those clothes because the ones I wear most are right in front of the wardrobe, so they are comfortable and I wear them almost every day.

Sentence has redundancy ('often' and 'often', 'like' fillers) and awkward ordering. Use clear present simple habitual phrasing: 'I often choose... because the ones I wear most are...' Replace fillers and tighten adverbs ('almost every day'). Suggestion: remove repeated adverbs and filler words, reorder for clarity.

× Not really, because my, uh, working schedules aren't uh, different between weekdays and weekends.

✓ Not really, because my work schedules aren't different between weekdays and weekends.

'Working schedules' is understandable but 'work schedules' is more natural. Remove fillers and comma placements. Subject-verb is fine. Suggestion: use concise noun phrase 'work schedules'.

× I mostly work at home and umm, I don't have to really get to meetings or meet too many people, so I often go with uh, casual clothes, uh, like shirts and uh, shorts and pants.

✓ I mostly work at home and I don't really have to attend meetings or meet many people, so I usually wear casual clothes like shirts, shorts and pants.

Improve verb collocations: 'attend meetings' rather than 'get to meetings'; 'wear' instead of 'go with' for clothes. Move adverbs ('really', 'usually') to natural positions. Remove fillers for fluid present habitual description.

× I particularly into bright colors like pink, purple, yellow because of those kind of colors can bring a kind of positive energy and and they are cheerful.

✓ I'm particularly into bright colors like pink, purple and yellow because those kinds of colors can bring positive energy and are cheerful.

Missing 'I'm' before 'particularly' causes a fragment. Use 'those kinds of colors' (plural) to match 'colors'. Remove repetitive 'a kind of' and duplicate 'and'. Use 'bring positive energy' without article. Suggestion: include subject, match plural forms, and avoid unnecessary articles.

× They have cheerful vibes which makes my day.

✓ They have cheerful vibes which make my day.

Relative clause 'which makes' refers to plural noun 'vibes', so verb should be plural 'make'. Ensure subject-verb agreement in relative clauses.