Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “according to the weather and the season” is repetitive) and correct collocations like “lightweight” and “warm clothes.”

例: I usually dress for the season. In summer I prefer lightweight shorts and T‑shirts because they’re breathable, while in winter I wear sweaters and a warm coat to stay comfortable.

提案: Answer directly to the preference question (comfortable vs smart) with a topic sentence. Avoid repeating previous content and finish your sentence. Reduce fillers like “uh” and include a linking word to explain why you prefer that style.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart outfits. For example, in summer I like oversized T‑shirts and shorts because they’re breathable and let me move freely.

提案: Keep it natural and concise; correct grammar (e.g., “a bit” → “very” or “quite,” “an headache” not “a headache when I wear”). Use one linking reason to support your preference and avoid repeating ideas. Remove fillers.

例: Yes, I love wearing T‑shirts, especially oversized ones because they’re comfortable and breathable. I avoid tight T‑shirts since they make me feel uncomfortable and sometimes give me a headache.

提案: Provide a clear direct answer then give a specific example or frequency. Avoid vague phrases like “like 5 times” — be precise (e.g., “I change outfits several times”). Correct grammar and use linking words to explain reasons.

例: Yes, I spend quite a lot of time choosing clothes. For instance, I often change outfits two or three times before leaving because I’m unsure which color or style suits the occasion.

提案: Answer directly (yes/no/it depends) and structure the response: current situation then past contrast. Remove fillers, use correct tense and more precise wording (e.g., “home clothes” → “casual home clothes”).

例: It depends on my mood. When I was working I chose different outfits for weekdays, but now that I’m studying for the IELTS I usually wear casual home clothes most days.

提案: Give a complete, concise answer and avoid unfinished sentences. Use correct grammar (“bachelor’s,” “for one year”), and explain the reason briefly. Add what colours you prefer now to complete the response.

例: I used to wear a lot of black when I was at university, but after marriage I avoided black for one year because of a family ritual. Now I prefer lighter colours like blue and beige.

× In summers I prefer wearing shorts and T-shirts because they're lightweights and breathable, while in winter I tend to wear sweaters and a warm clothes to stay comfortable.

✓ In summer I prefer wearing shorts and T-shirts because they're lightweight and breathable, while in winter I tend to wear sweaters and warm clothes to stay comfortable.

'Summers' should be 'summer' for general habitual reference; 'lightweights' is incorrect plural noun form — use adjective 'lightweight'; 'a warm clothes' mixes singular article with plural noun — remove 'a' and use plural 'warm clothes'. Also keep parallel structure and correct adjective use.

× Usually I choose clothes according to the weather and season, so during summers I really enjoy wearing shorts and T-shirt, especially oversized because it's quite breathable and uh, I.

✓ Usually I choose clothes according to the weather and the season, so during summer I really enjoy wearing shorts and T-shirts, especially oversized ones because they're quite breathable.

Use 'the season' for clarity; 'summers' should be 'summer' for habitual statements; 'T-shirt' should be plural 'T-shirts' to match 'shorts'; 'oversized' needs noun 'ones' after it; 'it's' refers to singular but should be 'they're' to agree with plural 'T-shirts'. Remove trailing unfinished phrase.

× Yes, I do love wearing T-shirts, especially oversized ones because it's a bit comfortable and breathable.

✓ Yes, I do love wearing T-shirts, especially oversized ones because they're a bit more comfortable and breathable.

'It's' is singular and does not agree with plural 'ones'; use 'they're'. Add 'more' to compare comfort relative to other shirts and improve natural phrasing.

× I don't really like wearing tight clothes as it makes me feel suffocated and uh, I started to have an headache when I wear tight T-shirts so.

✓ I don't really like wearing tight clothes because they make me feel suffocated, and I started to have a headache when I wear tight T-shirts.

'It makes' should be 'they make' to agree with plural 'clothes'; 'an headache' requires article 'a' before 'headache' and 'an' is incorrect before 'headache' which begins with consonant sound 'h'; keep consistent tense and remove trailing 'so'.

× Sometimes it happens like 5 times.

✓ Sometimes it happens about five times.

Use 'about' instead of 'like' for approximate frequency, and write numbers as words in formal speech; 'five' is preferred in this context and 'like' is informal and ungrammatical here.

× I usually change my clothes because I am confused of what to wear and what color should I wear that's why.

✓ I usually change my clothes because I am confused about what to wear and what color I should wear; that's why.

Use preposition 'about' with 'confused'; correct question-word order in reported clause to 'what color I should wear'; separate clauses with a semicolon or conjunction for clarity.

× It depends on my mood usually because, uh, when I used to work, then I used to wear different styles of clothes every day.

✓ It usually depends on my mood because when I used to work, I used to wear different styles of clothes every day.

Place adverb 'usually' in natural position; remove redundant 'then' and keep 'used to' for past habitual actions; maintain clear clause order.

× But uh, recently I've left my job for my IELTS study, so I usually dress up the same, like in home clothes, you know, comfortable.

✓ But recently I left my job to study for the IELTS, so I usually dress the same, like in home clothes, you know, comfortable.

Use simple past 'left' with 'recently' is acceptable; 'for my IELTS study' is awkward — 'to study for the IELTS' is natural; 'dress up the same' should be 'dress the same'; 'in home clothes' is better as 'in my home clothes' or 'at home in comfortable clothes'.

× When I was at my bachelors, I used to love wearing black.

✓ When I was studying for my bachelor's degree, I used to love wearing black.

'At my bachelors' is incorrect; use 'studying for my bachelor's degree' or 'when I was a bachelor' depending on meaning. 'Bachelor's' needs apostrophe s and 'degree' clarifies meaning.

× People used to see me wearing black only.

✓ People used to see me wearing only black.

Word order: place 'only' before the noun it modifies for clarity. No third-person singular verb error here but correction improves grammar and emphasis.

× But now after marriage, I've stopped wearing black for one years as our ritual says that you can't wear black for, uh, a year.

✓ But after marriage, I stopped wearing black for one year because our ritual says that you can't wear black for a year.

Use simple past 'stopped' for completed action; 'one years' should be singular 'one year'; 'because' is more formal than 'as' for explanation; avoid filler 'uh'.