Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason or example. Avoid repetitions and filler words.

例: I prefer dresses and skirts because they make me feel feminine and comfortable. For example, I often wear a floral dress to family gatherings because it’s both pretty and easy to move in.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and a specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'an outgoing person').

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I’m an outgoing person who walks and travels a lot. For instance, I usually choose sneakers and breathable tops when I explore the city.

提案: Make the sentence structure smoother and avoid redundancy. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas and give a specific example about temperature or activity.

例: Yes, I wear T-shirts a lot because the Philippines is humid. For example, I usually wear a light cotton T-shirt when I go to the market or travel to keep cool.

提案: Answer directly and concisely. Use a clear reason and a short example. Avoid repeated phrases and informal contractions in IELTS context.

例: Not really. I only own a few outfits, so I usually spend just a few minutes picking clothes. For example, I often grab the same jeans and a blouse when I go out.

提案: Provide a focused contrast with linking words (e.g., 'on weekdays... whereas on weekends...') and avoid filler sounds. Include a specific example of each style.

例: Sometimes. On weekdays I wear my work uniform, whereas on weekends I tend to stay home in casual clothes like sweatpants and a T-shirt.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and give one clear reason with correct grammar and a brief example. Avoid repeating the same idea words.

例: I prefer white because it looks fresh and clean and, to me, suggests purity. For example, I often choose a white shirt for interviews because it appears neat and professional.

× I like to wear As for me as as a woman, I like dress and skirts.

✓ As a woman, I like dresses and skirts.

The original has redundant conjunctions 'As for me as as' and wrong noun form 'dress'. Remove redundancy and use plural 'dresses' to match general preference. Suggestion: start with 'As a woman' then use plural nouns for general statements.

× I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because I'm always outgoing a person.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes because I'm an outgoing person.

Word order and pronoun/article use are incorrect: 'outgoing a person' should be 'an outgoing person'. Also combine adjectives with a comma. Suggestion: use the article 'an' before a noun starting with a vowel sound and place adjectives before the noun.

× I like to walk, travel.

✓ I like to walk and travel.

Comma alone is not appropriate to connect verbs in a list; use 'and' to join activities. Suggestion: use conjunctions to list verbs: 'walk and travel' or 'walk, travel, and explore'.

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially in my country in the Philippines is the weather is humid and we basically always wear comfortable shirts or T-shirts every time we go out or we do something.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially in the Philippines because the weather is humid, and we usually wear comfortable shirts whenever we go out or do activities.

Original repeats 'is' and misuses 'in my country in the Philippines is the weather is humid'. Use 'because' to give reason and correct verb forms: 'the weather is humid' as a clause; use 'usually' instead of 'basically always' and 'whenever' fits context. Suggestion: break long sentences into clauses connected by 'because' and use correct adverbs.

× For me, not really 'cause I have a few sets of clothes and I'm not really in particular choosing in hard choosing or hard times in choosing my clothes every time I go out.

✓ For me, not really, because I have only a few sets of clothes and I don't find it hard to choose what to wear when I go out.

Incorrect preposition 'in particular choosing in hard choosing' and awkward repetition. Use 'hard to choose' and 'what to wear' to express difficulty. Suggestion: simplify and use 'hard to choose' or 'difficulty choosing'.

× Sometimes, but usually in weekdays I usually wear working clothes, uh, working uniform clothes.

✓ Sometimes, but usually on weekdays I wear work clothes or a uniform.

Use preposition 'on' with 'weekdays' not 'in'. 'Working clothes' is better as 'work clothes'; avoid repeating 'usually'. Suggestion: use 'on weekdays' and concise noun phrases.

× And sometimes in weekends I don't go out, so I'd rather stay and rest in my home.

✓ And sometimes on weekends I don't go out, so I'd rather stay home and rest.

Use 'on weekends' not 'in weekends'. Also English prefers 'stay home' rather than 'stay in my home' in this context. Suggestion: use 'on weekends' and concise expression 'stay home'.

× I like the color of white because whites is looks like fresh and clean and for me white is means purity.

✓ I like the color white because white looks fresh and clean, and to me white means purity.

Errors: 'color of white' is unnatural—use 'color white' or 'the color white'; 'whites is looks' has plural and verb agreement errors; 'is means' is wrong. Use singular 'white' with correct verb forms 'looks' and 'means'. Suggestion: use 'white looks' and 'to me white means'.