Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "usually" or "generally").

例: I usually wear casual clothes. For example, I often wear jeans and a plain white T-shirt because they are comfortable and easy to match.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then contrast the two situations with a linking word like "but" or "however." Correct basic grammar (subject–verb agreement) and avoid extra words. Add a brief reason for each preference.

例: It depends on the occasion. In everyday life I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they suit my routine, but for special occasions I wear smart outfits to look more professional.

提案: Be specific and fluent: give one clear reason and an example. Remove hesitation and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'band merch' or 'band T-shirts' instead of 'band marriage').

例: Yes, I wear T-shirts almost every day because they are comfortable. I especially like unique printed T-shirts, such as band merch or movie-poster designs, which show my interests.

提案: Answer directly and provide two concise reasons. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use linking words like 'so' or 'because' correctly. Finish the sentence with a clear concluding detail.

例: Not really. I'm quite busy, so I don't spend much time choosing clothes; I usually pick items based on material and quality because they last longer.

提案: Give a direct contrast and specific examples. Improve grammar (e.g., 'casual office clothes' and 'dress up in stylish clothes'). Use linking words like 'whereas' or 'but' to connect the contrast.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear casual office clothes like chinos and a shirt for work, whereas on weekends I prefer to dress up in more stylish outfits for meeting friends.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and two concise reasons. Fix grammar (singular/plural, word order) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' to connect reasons.

例: I prefer black clothing because it is a classic color that suits most items, and it is easy to style with different accessories.

× I feel most comfortable in casual clothes, uh, in my daily life I often wear jeans and just uh, umm, casual white T-shirt.

✓ I feel most comfortable in casual clothes. In my daily life I often wear jeans and a casual white T-shirt.

Use singular/plural correctly: 'T-shirt' needs an article 'a' because it is singular; 'clothes' and 'jeans' are plural or uncountable and used correctly. Also splitting into two sentences improves clarity.

× Yeah. That's the, uh, the whole, the main look of me and that, uh.

✓ Yes. That's basically my main style.

Original is disfluent and ungrammatical. 'The main look of me' is incorrect; use 'my main style' for natural English and correct possessive structure.

× Maybe it's depends on the situation.

✓ Maybe it depends on the situation.

Incorrect auxiliary: 'depends' does not require 'it's'. Use 'it depends' (subject 'it' + verb 'depends'). Removing 'it's' fixes the modal/auxiliary misuse and yields correct present tense.

× If I in my daily life I would definitely use a very comfortable and casual clothes that suits my daily lifestyle.

✓ In my daily life I would definitely wear very comfortable, casual clothes that suit my lifestyle.

Multiple errors: 'use' is wrong verb for clothing (use 'wear'), 'a clothes' is wrong (clothes is plural, no 'a'), subject-verb agreement 'clothes that suit' (plural 'suit' not 'suits'), and unnecessary repetition 'daily'/'daily lifestyle'. Reorder and choose correct verbs/articles.

× For also for special occasions I would wear smart.

✓ For special occasions I would wear smart clothes.

Incomplete sentence: 'wear smart' needs an object ('clothes') and remove extra 'for'. Make full noun phrase 'smart clothes' to be grammatical.

× Yes, I like, uh, wearing T-shirt and I, I almost wear uh, T-shirt on my daily life and especially I like uh, unique printed T-shirts like about the band marriage or the movie posters.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts and I almost wear T-shirts in my daily life. I especially like unique printed T-shirts, such as those about bands or movie posters.

Article and number errors: use plural 'T-shirts' for general statements; use preposition 'in my daily life' not 'on'. 'Band marriage' is unclear; corrected to 'bands'. Added 'such as' to introduce examples and pluralized nouns for consistency.

× Not, not really. I'm the kind of person, I'm busy person, so I don't have enough time to take a lot of time to choose clothes.

✓ Not really. I'm the kind of person who is busy, so I don't have a lot of time to choose clothes.

Redundant phrases 'not, not really' and 'have enough time to take a lot of time' are incorrect. Need relative clause 'who is busy' and simplify to 'don't have a lot of time to choose clothes' for clarity and correct structure.

× So I will I just choose, uh, clothes by their, umm, material and quality and.

✓ So I just choose clothes based on their material and quality.

Unnecessary future 'will' and fragmented ending. Use 'choose' present simple for habitual action and 'based on' as correct prepositional phrase. Remove trailing 'and'.

× Yes, absolutely. On weekdays I uh often wear the casual and office clothes for my job and on the weekends I prefer uh wear dressing up a stylish clothes.

✓ Yes, absolutely. On weekdays I often wear casual office clothes for my job, and on weekends I prefer dressing up in stylish clothes.

Errors: 'the casual and office clothes' awkward—use 'casual office clothes'; 'prefer uh wear dressing up' mixes verbs incorrectly. Use 'prefer dressing up in' or 'prefer to dress up in'. Also 'a stylish clothes' wrong article; use plural 'stylish clothes'.

× I I enjoy wearing a black clothes because the black color color black is a classic color, so it's fits the most of the cloth.

✓ I enjoy wearing black clothes because black is a classic color, so it fits most clothes.

Incorrect article 'a black clothes' — 'clothes' is plural so no 'a'. Redundant phrase 'the black color color black' fixed to 'black'. 'It's fits' wrong subject-verb; use 'it fits'. 'Most of the cloth' should be 'most clothes' or 'most outfits'.

× Other clothes, yeah. And it's black clothes are easy to style.

✓ Also, black clothes are easy to style.

'It's black clothes' is ungrammatical: 'it's' should not be used before plural 'black clothes'. Simplify to 'black clothes are easy to style' and remove fragment 'Other clothes, yeah.'