Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason or example. Avoid repeating ideas and use linking words.

例: I prefer comfortable yet stylish clothes. For example, I often choose soft chinos and a neat shirt because they feel good all day while still looking presentable for work or social events.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, avoid repetition, and support it with a specific reason and linking word. Use correct tense and singular/plural agreement.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes for everyday wear because I have to move around and work. For instance, wearing soft trousers and a breathable shirt helps me stay focused and productive throughout the day.

提案: Answer directly then give one clear specific detail. Avoid hesitations, fillers and unclear comparisons. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. breathable, lightweight) and correct phrasing.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts in summer because they are lightweight and breathable. For example, a cotton T-shirt keeps me cool and comfortable when I walk or exercise in hot weather.

提案: Give a direct answer and explain with specific examples instead of vague phrases. Avoid hesitations and unfinished thoughts. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to structure the response.

例: Yes, I often spend a lot of time choosing clothes because there are many options and sizes vary between brands. For example, I sometimes try several shops and ask staff for sizes when an item I like is out of stock.

提案: Clearly state the contrast and give a specific example of each style using linking words like 'whereas' or 'however'. Correct small phrasing errors and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I dress more smartly on weekdays to look professional, for example a shirt and blazer for work. Whereas on weekends I prefer casual clothes like jeans and a hoodie so I can relax comfortably.

提案: Answer with clear vocabulary for clothing and colors, avoid repetition, and give a specific reason or example. Use correct word choice (e.g. 'pullover' or 'sweater') and concise phrasing.

例: I like blue and white clothing, and I often wear a beige pullover with blue jeans. For instance, blue tones suit my skin and make me look fresh and tidy.

× I like to wear comfortable clothes but also beautiful clothes because I want to appear as well dressed person and well maintained person.

✓ I like to wear comfortable but also attractive clothes because I want to appear as a well-dressed and well-maintained person.

The sentence uses noun phrases awkwardly and misses hyphenation for compound adjectives. 'Well dressed person' and 'well maintained person' should be 'well-dressed and well-maintained person' to use adjectives correctly before a noun and to join words with hyphens. Also 'beautiful clothes' is better as 'attractive clothes' for natural collocation.

× Oh, I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because I feel like the clothes you wear daily is something important because you have to do some task, you have to work, you have to work.

✓ Oh, I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because I feel like the clothes you wear daily are important since you have tasks to do and you have to work.

The subject 'the clothes you wear daily' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Redundant phrases were condensed for clarity and repetition removed. Use 'tasks' plural and 'since' for cause.

× And I think if you wear something not comfortable, it's not very good and efficient for you.

✓ And I think if you wear something uncomfortable, it is not very good or efficient for you.

Use the adjective 'uncomfortable' rather than the phrase 'not comfortable'. Also use 'or' to connect negative qualities and avoid contraction issues in formal speech. 'Efficient for you' is acceptable but 'effective' could be clearer depending on meaning.

× I think it depends on the season, but in summer I like wearing T-shirt.

✓ I think it depends on the season, but in summer I like wearing T-shirts.

Use the plural 'T-shirts' for general statements. Also 'wearing T-shirts' is the natural collocation in present habitual context.

× I think it's a great way to still have some air going through the the the shirt and it is also very convenient.

✓ I think it's a great way to let air pass through the shirt, and it is also very convenient.

Avoid repetition and use the verb phrase 'let air pass through' for natural expression. 'Going through' is colloquial but 'pass through' is clearer. Removed repeated 'the'.

× You don't sweat on it and you have more strength with it compared to, for example, the top without the top that teenage.

✓ You don't sweat as much in it, and you feel more comfortable and energetic compared to wearing a sleeveless top or other less practical tops.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear ('strength with it' and 'the top without the top that teenage'). Clarified meaning: less sweating, more comfort/energy, and compared to other types like sleeveless tops.

× I think I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes because there are so many choices. We don't know, we don't know where to watch.

✓ I think I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes because there are so many choices. We don't know where to look.

Use 'look' not 'watch' when talking about searching for items. 'Where to look' is the correct prepositional/verb collocation for searching.

× And also there's there are different size and sometimes you can't find your size and then you have to ask the Hostess if they have it, but they don't and then.

✓ Also, there are different sizes and sometimes you can't find your size, so you have to ask the shop assistant if they have it, but often they do not.

Use plural 'sizes'. 'Hostess' is the wrong word for a salesperson; use 'shop assistant' or 'salesperson'. Avoid trailing conjunctions and incomplete clauses; complete the idea.

× I think I do because on the weekdays I like to show myself as a person who cares about their appearance and I want to show people that I maintain myself in a great way.

✓ I think so, because on weekdays I like to present myself as a person who cares about his or her appearance, and I want to show people that I take good care of myself.

Use 'weekdays' without 'the'. 'Show myself as' is better as 'present myself as'. Avoid singular 'their' in formal correction; use 'his or her' or rephrase to plural. 'Maintain myself' is unnatural; 'take care of myself' is idiomatic.

× Whereas on the week, on the weekends, I like to just enjoy myself and choose the comfortable style instead of instead of beautiful things.

✓ Whereas on weekends I like to just enjoy myself and choose a comfortable style instead of more fashionable clothes.

Use 'on weekends' not 'on the week, on the weekends'. Remove repeated phrase 'instead of'. 'Beautiful things' is vague; 'more fashionable clothes' is clearer.

× I personally like blue jeans and beige plover.

✓ I personally like blue jeans and beige pullovers.

'Plover' is incorrect; likely meant 'pullover' or 'sweater'. Use 'pullovers' plural to match 'jeans'. 'Beige pullover' -> 'beige pullovers'.

× I also kind of like the blue and white things.

✓ I also like blue and white items.

'Kind of' is informal filler; remove for clarity. 'Things' is vague; 'items' or 'clothes' is clearer.

× Blue and white are I think my favorite colors in terms of clothes that I like to wear.

✓ Blue and white are, I think, my favorite colors for the clothes I like to wear.

Reorder clause for natural English: place 'I think' parenthetically and use 'for the clothes I like to wear' for clarity.

× I think it fits my my facial colors.

✓ I think they suit my complexion.

'Facial colors' is unnatural; use 'complexion' or 'skin tone'. Also correct plural agreement: 'they' (colors) suit my complexion. Removed repeated 'my'.