Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the styles and brands you like, avoid hesitations and unclear phrases (e.g. “dining tears by the German” is not understandable). Provide one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep answers concise (max 4 sentences).

例: I like wearing modern sportswear from brands like Nike because their designs are comfortable and trendy. For example, their breathable training tops and slim joggers suit my active lifestyle, so I often choose them for both exercise and casual outings.

提案: Give a clear direct preference first, then explain briefly with specific reasons. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (e.g. “D disclose”). Use linking words like because or so. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they suit my daily activities. For instance, loose T-shirts and joggers are practical for going to the gym and let me move freely.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer and add a specific reason with linking words. Mention alternatives you prefer to show range. Avoid repeating the same idea twice.

例: Not really — I avoid T-shirts in hot weather because thin cotton can stick to my skin and make me feel overheated. Instead, I prefer lightweight linen shirts or moisture-wicking sports tops when I exercise.

提案: Answer directly and give precise reasons and examples. Use linking words (because, so, therefore). Correct grammar (e.g. “display my personality” not “display my characteristic”). Keep to 2–3 clear sentences.

例: Yes, I do, because as an extrovert I use clothes to express my personality. For example, I often choose bold colours or patterned shirts to stand out at social events.

提案: Give a direct answer then support with clear, specific details. Correct unclear words (e.g. “pen” likely meant “jeans” or “pants”) and avoid repetition. Use a linking word like because to connect idea and reason.

例: Not really — I usually wear the same smart-casual style all week because I feel comfortable in a shirt and jeans. On weekends I might add a jacket or sneakers, but the basic look stays the same.

提案: State the favourite colour clearly and give specific reasons and one concrete example. Fix grammar and awkward phrasing (e.g. “have my office stand out” unclear). Explain what you mean by “reflects my personality.” Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer white because it matches almost anything and looks clean. For example, I often wear a white T-shirt with red chinos to create a neat but eye-catching outfit that reflects my minimalist style.

× I prefer wearing some clothes with the new brand such as Nike or dining tears by the German.

✓ I prefer wearing clothes from new brands such as Nike or designer brands from Germany.

The original sentence uses incorrect adjectives and nouns ('some clothes with the new brand', 'dining tears by the German') and word order is awkward. Use 'clothes from new brands' to show origin and 'designer brands from Germany' for clarity. Avoid unnecessary words like 'some' and ensure correct noun forms ('designer brands').

× I really love this clothes because umm, I think it is uh, new and suitable for new generation.

✓ I really love these clothes because I think they are new and suitable for the new generation.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'this clothes' should be 'these clothes' (plural) and 'it is' should be 'they are' to agree with plural noun. Also include 'the' before 'new generation' to specify the group.

× I think uh wearing comfortable and casual clothes make me feel like I'm a gentleman and D disclose can bring a lot of advantages for me for when I'm going to gym or do workout.

✓ I think wearing comfortable, casual clothes makes me feel like a gentleman, and being comfortable can bring many advantages when I go to the gym or work out.

Use gerund phrasing correctly and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'wearing... clothes makes' (singular verb). 'D disclose' is unclear; replace with 'being comfortable'. Use 'when I go to the gym or work out' for correct verb forms and prepositions.

× I don't really like to wear T-shirt because in the summer, wearing T-shirt can bring a lot of heat for my body.

✓ I don't really like wearing T-shirts because in the summer they can make my body feel very hot.

Use correct verb form and modal-like expressions: 'like wearing' is more natural than 'like to wear' here. 'T-shirt' should be plural 'T-shirts' when speaking generally. 'Can bring a lot of heat for my body' is unnatural; use 'make my body feel very hot'.

× As a result, it makes me feel uncomfortable and inconvenient to do something and work out.

✓ As a result, I feel uncomfortable and find it inconvenient to do activities or work out.

Original sentence has poor structure and incorrect use of 'inconvenient' as a predicate without a subject. Replace 'it makes me feel uncomfortable and inconvenient' with 'I feel uncomfortable and find it inconvenient' and use 'activities' instead of vague 'something'.

× Absolutely yes, because I'm an extrovert and so I pay more attention to my clothes because it display my characteristic and my style and the comfortable of shirt on pants can make me feel.

✓ Absolutely. Because I'm an extrovert, I pay more attention to my clothes since they display my personality and style, and the comfort of a shirt and pants affects how I feel.

Quantifier and agreement issues: 'it display' should be 'they display' to agree with plural 'clothes'. 'Characteristic' is better as 'personality'. 'The comfortable of shirt on pants' is incorrect; use 'the comfort of a shirt and pants'. Also split into clearer clauses.

× Not really, I always choose the same style in the her week because I always wear a pen and a shirt in whole year.

✓ Not really. I usually choose the same style during the week because I always wear pants and a shirt all year round.

'the her week' is incorrect; use 'during the week' or 'in the week'. 'a pen' is a misspelling of 'pants'. Use plural 'pants'. 'in whole year' should be 'all year round' for idiomatic expression.

× Yeah because it make me feel comfortable and convenient and it show my character.

✓ Yes, because it makes me feel comfortable and relaxed, and it shows my character.

Subject-verb agreement errors: 'it make' -> 'it makes'; 'it show' -> 'it shows'. 'Convenient' is not used to describe a person's feeling; use 'relaxed' or 'comfortable'.

× I like wearing white clothes because they go well with almost all the clothes.

✓ I like wearing white clothes because they go well with almost everything.

'Go well with almost all the clothes' is awkward; 'go well with almost everything' or 'go well with almost all other clothes' is clearer. Use correct prepositional phrase for compatibility.

× For example, a white T-shirt with a fresh red pants have my office stand out and I like to.

✓ For example, a white T-shirt with bright red pants helps me stand out at the office, and I like that.

Grammar errors: 'a fresh red pants' has article-number mismatch; use 'bright red pants'. 'have my office stand out' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'helps me stand out at the office'. Complete the sentence 'I like that' rather than dangling 'I like to'.

× I like the white color because it reflects my characteristic and my.

✓ I like the color white because it reflects my personality and style.

Incomplete sentence and pronoun use: 'my characteristic and my' is unfinished. Use 'personality and style' to express intended meaning and complete the thought.