Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and one brief reason. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'huge fan' twice) and correct small errors (make → makes). Use a linking phrase when adding the reason.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes. For example, I often wear sweatpants and T-shirts because they let me move freely and stay cool during the day.

提案: Avoid sounding uncertain or dismissive. Start with a direct statement answering the question, then explain briefly with one clear reason using linking words (because / since). Correct grammar (what smart clothes are).

例: I prefer comfortable clothes rather than formal ones because comfort helps me concentrate; for example, I choose breathable fabrics when I work or study.

提案: Clarify your stance (the answer is contradictory). Use one clear topic sentence (Yes or No), then give specific details and avoid unclear phrases ('God knows how'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a reason and an example.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are lightweight and practical in hot weather. For instance, when I go out in Jagdal I usually wear cotton T-shirts to stay cool.

提案: Give a direct answer and clean up grammar and vocabulary. Replace hesitations with brief linking words and correct phrases ('choose clothes', 'T-shirt'). Provide one specific example of what you wear usually and mention an exception for special occasions.

例: Not usually. I only spend time choosing clothes for special occasions; otherwise I typically wear jeans and a T-shirt or sweatpants because they are comfortable and quick to put on.

提案: Answer directly and provide a clear comparison between weekdays and weekends using linking words (however, while). Avoid repetition and correct tense/word order.

例: Sometimes. While I tend to dress slightly more formally on weekdays for work, on weekends I usually switch to more casual, comfortable clothes like sweatpants or T-shirts.

提案: Remove filler words and unclear fragments. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preferred colours, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because / since). Finish the sentence and avoid trailing off.

例: I prefer dark colours, especially black, because they are easy to match and don't attract too much attention. For example, a black shirt pairs well with almost any trousers so I don't need to worry about coordination.

× I like to wear anything that make me comfortable.

✓ I like to wear anything that makes me comfortable.

The verb 'make' must agree with the singular relative pronoun 'anything'. Use the third person singular form 'makes'. To improve, remember after 'anything/anything that' use singular verb: 'anything that makes'.

× I'm a huge fan of comfy clothes, huge fan of sweatpants, T-shirts, anything like that.

✓ I'm a huge fan of comfy clothes: sweatpants, T-shirts and things like that.

Repetition and list punctuation are awkward. Use parallel nouns and connectives for clarity. Replace the repeated phrase with a clear list: 'sweatpants, T-shirts and things like that'.

× I don't know what smart clothes is, but I think being comfortable is like being smart about what you wear because who wants to feel uncomfortable throughout their day?

✓ I don't know what smart clothes are, but I think being comfortable is part of being smart about what you wear because who wants to feel uncomfortable throughout the day?

'Clothes' is plural, so use plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Also prefer 'part of being smart' for clarity and remove 'their' to match singular generic 'who' or use 'the day'. Improve by matching number and clarifying phrase.

× Yeah, as I said, no big fan of T-shirts.

✓ Yeah, as I said, I'm no big fan of T-shirts.

Sentence lacks the verb 'am'. Add 'I'm' to form a complete clause. Ensure subject and verb are present.

× I have a God knows how.

✓ God knows how many I have.

Original phrase is ungrammatical. Use the idiomatic expression 'God knows how many I have' to indicate an unknown large number. Place 'many' after 'how' and include the subject 'I'.

× I don't spend spend a lot of time chilling clothes.

✓ I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

Repeated 'spend' is an error and 'chilling' is incorrect in this context. Use the verb 'choose' with -ing after 'spend': 'spend time choosing'.

× As I say they like something comfortable, something make me move easier.

✓ As I said, I like something comfortable, something that makes it easier for me to move.

Tense and structure errors: use past 'said' for reported speech; include 'I' as subject; add relative 'that' and change 'make' to 'makes' for third-person singular; reorder 'easier for me to move' for natural phrasing.

× So yeah, I usually just wear jeans and AT shirt or sweatpants or something like that.

✓ So yeah, I usually just wear jeans and a T-shirt or sweatpants or something like that.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before a singular count noun 'T-shirt'. Also 'AT' is likely a typo for 'a T'. Ensure correct article and spacing.

× It depends, I usually I'll change my style that much, but on weekdays I might dress more formally and on weekends I might change a little bit but it's not that much different.

✓ It depends; I usually don't change my style that much, but on weekdays I might dress more formally and on weekends I might change a little bit, though it's not very different.

Original missing negation 'don't' after 'usually' and has redundant 'I usually I'll'. Add 'don't' to reflect intended meaning. Use punctuation to separate clauses and 'very' for natural emphasis.

× I'm really fine with black clothes.

✓ I'm really fine wearing black clothes.

Both forms can work, but 'fine wearing black clothes' is more natural when describing preference. If keeping 'fine with', add 'them': 'fine with black clothes'. Choose consistent preposition usage.

× I don't like to wear very vibrant clothes. I don't know, I don't like to stand out uh and I think darker clothes are easier to style.

✓ I don't like to wear very vibrant clothes. I don't like to stand out, and I think darker clothes are easier to style.

Remove filler hesitation for written clarity and add comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Sentence otherwise correct.

× You can just throw any dark clothes and they will match.

✓ You can just throw on any dark clothes and they will match.

Add the phrasal verb 'throw on' to mean put on quickly. Without 'on' the verb 'throw' is incomplete in this context. Maintain natural collocation.

× But if you are like wearing blue and.

✓ But if you are wearing blue, it might be harder to match.

Original is an incomplete sentence/fragments. Complete the idea by adding a result clause: 'it might be harder to match' or similar. Ensure each sentence has subject and predicate.