Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and reduce fillers (umm, 'cause'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example with a brief reason. Use linking words to connect idea and example.

例: I prefer simple, classic silhouettes because they match many outfits. For example, I often wear a black silk skirt that pairs well with my vintage blouses, so I can create polished looks with little effort.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then support with one or two concise reasons. Avoid repeating similar phrases (polished and put together) and refine grammar (e.g., "in my job").

例: I prefer smart clothes because I like to look polished and professional. In my job I am required to wear business casual, so I usually choose more formal pieces like blazers and tailored trousers.

提案: Remove repetition and fix grammar (singular/plural, verb forms). Start with a clear answer, give a specific reason and one short example of how you wear them.

例: Yes, I like wearing cotton T-shirts because they are breathable in humid weather. For instance, I often pair a white cotton tee with a blazer and jeans for a comfortable yet smart look.

提案: Keep answers natural and concise. Provide a clear time frame and one specific example of the decision process. Avoid vague phrases like "very hesitated"; use "hesitate" and correct tense.

例: Yes, I usually spend about five minutes deciding what to wear each morning. Sometimes I hesitate between a silk dress and a basic outfit when I want to look more formal.

提案: Answer directly and complete your sentence. Avoid unfinished thoughts. Explain briefly why your clothes are versatile and give a clear example of how you adapt them for weekends.

例: No, I don't. My wardrobe is versatile, so I wear similar styles during the week and at the weekend. For example, I switch loafers for flats and add a denim jacket to make a work outfit more casual.

提案: Good content and clarity; improve by smoothing phrasing and using linking words. Avoid awkward expressions like "not too standing out in the streets."

例: I usually choose black, white and blue because they are low-key and easy to match. However, I sometimes wear vibrant colours like orange or red to brighten my outfit for special occasions.

× I like to wear those simple silhouettes 'cause they just go, they just go with everything.

✓ I like to wear those simple silhouettes because they just go with everything.

This sentence has redundant phrases and informal filler 'cause; while not a strict grammar error, simplify for clarity. Use 'because' for formality and remove repeated 'they just go'. Subject-verb agreement is fine (silhouettes -> go), so correction focuses on clarity and register.

× For example, I have umm, silk black skirt.

✓ For example, I have a silk black skirt.

A singular countable noun 'skirt' requires an article 'a'. The error is omission of the indefinite article for a singular noun. Suggestion: use 'a' before singular countable nouns and place adjectives in natural order ('a black silk skirt' or 'a silk black skirt').

× It just goes well with my vintage UMM.

✓ It just goes well with my vintage clothes.

The original 'my vintage UMM' uses a filler 'UMM' which is not a noun; this creates a pronoun/reference problem. Replace filler with the intended noun ('clothes' or 'items') so the pronoun 'it' has a clear referent. Also ensure agreement: 'it' referring to 'skirt' is fine.

× I prefer to wear smart clothes just because I like to look polished and put together and in my doing my work I am required to wear business casual, so most of the cases I'm wearing something more formal instead of casual.

✓ I prefer to wear smart clothes because I like to look polished and put together, and at work I am required to wear business casual, so in most cases I wear something more formal rather than casual.

Problems include awkward phrase 'in my doing my work', incorrect preposition 'most of the cases', and inappropriate progressive tense 'I'm wearing' for habitual action. Use 'at work' for location, 'in most cases' or 'most of the time', and present simple 'I wear' for habitual actions. Also replace 'instead of' with 'rather than' for register.

× I do and I like wearing cotton T-shirt particularly 'cause they're more because they're more breathable in a humid weather and they just goes well with my other outfits.

✓ I do, and I like wearing cotton T-shirts in particular because they are more breathable in humid weather and they just go well with my other outfits.

Multiple errors: 'T-shirt' is countable and plural needed ('T-shirts') for general statement; 'particularly' better as 'in particular'; double 'because they're more' is redundant; use 'they are' (avoid contraction in formal correction) and 'go' not 'goes' (subject 'they' plural). Also 'in humid weather' does not need 'a'.

× Makes me very put together and polished and presentable.

✓ They make me look very put together, polished, and presentable.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb agreement. Add subject 'They' (referring to T-shirts) and verb 'make' for correct subject-verb agreement. Include 'look' to express resulting appearance and use commas to separate adjectives.

× In the morning I would usually spend 5 minutes on choosing what to wear.

✓ In the morning I usually spend 5 minutes choosing what to wear.

Avoid unnecessary 'would' for habitual action; use present simple 'usually spend'. Also remove preposition 'on' before gerund 'choosing' — English uses 'spend time doing something' without 'on'.

× Sometimes I get very hesitated on deciding if I should wear a silk dress or a basic.

✓ Sometimes I get very hesitant when deciding whether I should wear a silk dress or something basic.

'Hesitated' is the past tense verb; the adjective 'hesitant' is required. Use 'when deciding' or 'about deciding' rather than 'on deciding'. Use 'whether' for alternatives and 'something basic' to complete the noun phrase.

× No, I don't. I wear pretty much the same type of clothes on weekdays or on weekends, and my clothes are basically very versatile. So if I change my shoes from a pair of loafers to a belly flats, they will.

✓ No, I don't. I wear pretty much the same types of clothes on weekdays and on weekends, and my clothes are very versatile. So if I change my shoes from a pair of loafers to ballet flats, they still work.

Errors: 'type' should be plural 'types' or keep 'the same type of clothes' with singular/plural consistency; 'or on weekends' -> 'and on weekends'; 'belly flats' is incorrect — likely 'ballet flats'; sentence ending 'they will' is incomplete. Replace with 'they still work' to indicate the clothes remain appropriate.

× My go to colours are black, white and blue because they're more low key not too standing out in the streets.

✓ My go-to colours are black, white, and blue because they are low-key and do not stand out too much in the street.

Use hyphenated 'go-to' as a compound adjective; add commas in list. 'More low key' is awkward — use 'low-key'. 'Not too standing out' is ungrammatical; use 'do not stand out too much'. Use 'in the street' or 'on the streets' (choose one) — 'in the street' fits general sense. Also avoid contractions and filler words.

× That said, I do have some more vibrant colours such as some orange, red or pink.

✓ That said, I do have some more vibrant colours such as orange, red, and pink.

Redundant 'some' before color names is unnecessary. Use commas to separate items and include 'and' before last item. Preposition use is fine; correction focuses on redundancy and parallelism.