Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh) and repetition, and give one or two specific reasons or an example for your preference. Use correct tense and singular/plural forms (e.g., 'This habit is from when I was young').

例: I prefer wearing long-sleeved clothes, such as T-shirts and dresses. I have liked long sleeves since childhood because they make me feel more comfortable and modest; for example, I often choose long-sleeved T-shirts when I go out in the evening.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence and give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating the same idea and correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'they are comfortable' not 'it's').

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they are practical and make me feel at ease. For instance, long-sleeved casual tops keep me warm and let me move freely during the day.

提案: Give a brief direct answer and add a specific supporting detail or example. Use correct pronouns and avoid repeating words (e.g., 'they' for T-shirts).

例: Yes, I like wearing long-sleeved T-shirts because they are comfortable and modest. For example, I often wear a long-sleeved T-shirt to study or meet friends because it keeps me warm and relaxed.

提案: Give a short direct answer then a concise reason with an example. Reduce redundancy and improve sentence flow (e.g., 'I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I already know my style').

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually know what I want. For example, when shopping I head straight for long-sleeved dresses or T-shirts and rarely try many other styles.

提案: Be clearer and more concise. State your main point then give a brief clarification with a linking word. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'I don't change my choosing.'

例: No, I usually wear the same style on weekdays and weekends because I prefer long-sleeved dresses. However, I vary the colors—for instance, I might wear a navy dress during the week and a red one at the weekend.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and give a specific reason for your colour choices. Avoid vague expressions like 'it was everything' and remove fillers. Explain why those colours suit you.

例: I usually wear black or white because they are versatile and match many outfits. Sometimes I choose pink or red when I want a brighter look, for example, a red dress for special occasions.

× I like wearing T-shirts or dresses, uh, with long sleeves.

✓ I like wearing T-shirts or dresses with long sleeves.

Remove the extra comma to fix punctuation; the verb form 'wearing' is correct as present participle after 'like'. Keep the clause continuous without unnecessary pauses.

× This habits it's from, I was young, uh, I didn't like to wear shorts or cut, uh, shirts or dresses.

✓ This habit is from when I was young; I didn't like to wear shorts or short-sleeved shirts or short dresses.

'Habits' should be singular 'habit' to match the singular 'this'. 'It's from' is awkward; use 'is from when I was young' to indicate origin. 'Cut shirts' is unclear; use 'short-sleeved shirts' and 'short dresses' for clarity. Punctuation corrected for readability.

× So I prefer wearing anything, uh, or everything with long sleeve.

✓ So I prefer wearing anything or everything with long sleeves.

Use plural 'long sleeves' to describe garments and remove filler words. 'Wearing' is correct as present participle after 'prefer'.

× I prefer wearing casual clothes because it's comfortable and modest, especially the ones with the long sleeves.

✓ I prefer wearing casual clothes because they are comfortable and modest, especially those with long sleeves.

The subject 'casual clothes' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are'. Replace 'the ones' with 'those' and drop 'the' before 'long sleeves'.

× I feel comfortable and warm and in it.

✓ I feel comfortable and warm in them.

Refers to 'clothes' (plural), so use plural pronoun 'them' and remove unnecessary 'and'.

× Yes, I do like wearing T-shirts, especially with long sleeves because I feel comfortable in it and it's modest and warm.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially with long sleeves, because I feel comfortable in them and they are modest and warm.

Use 'them' and 'they are' to agree with plural 'T-shirts'. 'Do' auxiliary unnecessary for emphasis; simple 'I like' is natural here. Add comma for clarity.

× No, I don't because when I go to the shop I know exactly what I want because I don't change my choices and clothes.

✓ No, I don't, because when I go to the shop I know exactly what I want; I don't change my choices in clothes.

Add commas and semicolon for clarity. Change 'change my choices and clothes' to 'change my choices in clothes' to express the intended meaning; pronoun usage is corrected for clarity.

× I prefer wearing clothes with long sleeves such as dresses or T-shirts, so I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

✓ I prefer wearing clothes with long sleeves, such as dresses or T-shirts, so I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

Add comma after introductory phrase for clarity. Verb form 'wearing' is correct.

× No, I don't because I don't change my choosing in dresses, especially dresses.

✓ No, I don't, because I don't change my choices in dresses; I especially like dresses.

'Changing my choosing' is incorrect; use 'change my choices'. Add commas and restructure to avoid repetition and improve grammar.

× I wear the same thing every day. Not the same thing, but the same ideas but different colors.

✓ I wear the same style every day; not the exact same items, but the same ideas in different colors.

Combine sentences for coherence and replace 'thing' with 'style' for clarity. Avoid repeating 'but'; restructure to be grammatically correct and clearer.

× I often wear black or white because it was everything.

✓ I often wear black or white because they go with everything.

'It was everything' is incorrect. Use plural pronoun 'they' for colors and the idiom 'go with everything' to mean versatile. Correct preposition usage and verb form.

× Uh, and sometimes I wear pink or red.

✓ Sometimes I wear pink or red.

Remove filler 'Uh, and' for fluency. Verb 'wear' is correctly used in present simple to express habitual action.