Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct repetitions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases and fix grammar (e.g., “comfortable and fashionable”).

例: I prefer clothes that are both comfortable and fashionable. For example, I often wear baggy jeans and simple T-shirts because they let me move freely while still looking stylish.

提案: Clarify vocabulary and contrast clearly. Use a linking word to show contrast (e.g., “but” or “however”) and replace unclear phrases like “glow clothes” with correct terms such as “comfortable clothes” or “sporty clothes.”

例: I mostly prefer casual, trendy clothes because I enjoy following current styles. However, when I travel or stay at home, I choose more comfortable, sporty clothes for ease.

提案: Avoid repetition and correct unclear phrases. Give a brief reason and one specific example. Keep it to two or three sentences and correct grammar (e.g., “I prefer T-shirts because they are comfortable”).

例: Yes, I prefer T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to wash. For example, I usually wear a cotton T-shirt on longbus trips because it keeps me relaxed.

提案: Be more fluent and remove filler words (uh, like). Use a clear linking word to show exception (e.g., “except” or “however”) and give a concise reason with one example.

例: No, I usually decide quickly, except for special events. For example, I spend more time choosing an outfit for weddings because I want something more attractive and appropriate.

提案: Organize answer logically and avoid contradictions. Start with a topic sentence that states the difference, then provide two clear examples for weekdays and weekends. Remove repeated phrases and fillers.

例: Yes, I dress differently. On weekdays I wear Kurtis or modest clothes for attending classes, while on weekends I usually choose T-shirts and trendy outfits when I go out with friends.

提案: Be specific and correct vocabulary (e.g., “pastel shades,” “bright colours”). Use linking words to contrast preferences for everyday and special occasions, and avoid fillers and unclear phrases.

例: I like many colours, but it depends on the situation. For everyday trendy clothes I prefer pastel shades, while for weddings and traditional occasions I choose bright colours like red or gold.

× I prefer the clothes that make me feel comfortable and look trendy because I like to feel relaxed and still and still appearing fashionable.

✓ I prefer clothes that make me feel comfortable and look trendy because I like to feel relaxed and still appear fashionable.

The phrase 'still and still appearing fashionable' is awkward and uses incorrect verb form 'appearing' after 'still'. Use the bare infinitive 'appear' after 'still' and remove the repeated 'still' and the article 'the' before 'clothes' for natural phrasing.

× For example, I like to wear baggy jeans, T-shirts and shirts.

✓ For example, I like to wear baggy jeans, T-shirts, and shirts.

This sentence is mostly correct but benefits from consistent plural forms and commas. Adding a comma before 'and' (Oxford comma) clarifies the list items. No change in plurality needed besides punctuation.

× These clothes are both comfortable and fashion.

✓ These clothes are both comfortable and fashionable.

'Fashion' is a noun; the adjective 'fashionable' is needed to describe clothes. Replace the noun with the correct adjective.

× Well, I mostly prefer casual trendy clothes because I enjoy following the current styles.

✓ Well, I mostly prefer casual, trendy clothes because I enjoy following current styles.

Use a comma between coordinate adjectives 'casual' and 'trendy'. 'The' before 'current styles' is unnecessary; omit it for natural English.

× However, I also wear comfortable glow clothes when I go for a long journey or when I'm relaxed at my home.

✓ However, I also wear comfortable, loose clothes when I go on a long journey or when I'm relaxing at home.

'Glow' is incorrect here; likely intended 'loose'. Use comma between adjectives. Use 'go on a long journey' (idiomatic) and 'relaxing at home' instead of 'relaxed at my home'. Omit 'my' before 'home'.

× Yes, I like to wear T-shirts. Like I mentioned before, I like to wear the comfortable clothes and casual clothes.

✓ Yes, I like to wear T-shirts. As I mentioned before, I like to wear comfortable, casual clothes.

Avoid repeating 'like to wear' and 'the'; use 'As I mentioned before' for style. Use comma between adjectives and remove the definite article.

× Whenever I go for a long journey or even in my normal days, I like to be AT shirts because which makes which makes me comfortable and feel relaxed.

✓ Whenever I go on a long journey or on ordinary days, I like to wear T-shirts because they make me comfortable and relaxed.

Use 'go on a long journey' not 'go for'. 'On ordinary days' is more natural than 'in my normal days'. 'Be AT shirts' is incorrect; say 'wear T-shirts'. Remove duplicated phrase 'which makes' and use 'they make me comfortable and relaxed' with correct plural pronoun.

× No, I don't usually spend much time choosing clothes. However, in some occasion, uh like like wedding or any family functions, I take longer because I want to choose something different and more attractive.

✓ No, I don't usually spend much time choosing clothes. However, on some occasions, like weddings or family functions, I take longer because I want to choose something different and more attractive.

Use 'on some occasions' (plural) and 'weddings' and 'family functions' plural. 'In some occasion' is incorrect preposition and number. Keep present tense 'take longer'.

× So I often take too much, uh, time to decide the clothes.

✓ So I often take too much time to decide on the clothes.

Use 'take too much time' without comma. Add 'decide on the clothes' or 'decide what to wear'. 'Decide the clothes' is not idiomatic.

× On weekends, I usually prefer to wear Kurtis and some casual clothes, uh, because I attend classes and some practical classes are there, so I usually prefer, uh, casual clothes.

✓ On weekends, I usually prefer to wear kurtis and other casual clothes because I attend classes and practical sessions, so I prefer casual clothes.

Remove repetition and restructure: 'practical classes are there' is awkward; 'practical sessions' or 'practical classes' suffices. Avoid repeating 'prefer'.

× However, in on weekends, I usually prefer T-shirts and some trendy clothes, uh, whenever I go with my friends and explore cities.

✓ On other weekends, I usually prefer T-shirts and trendy clothes when I go out with friends to explore the city.

Remove redundant 'in on weekends'. Use 'go out with friends' and 'explore the city' (or 'cities') consistently. Simplify wording.

× Well, I like most of the color, but it mostly depend upon the type of the clothes, Uh, like when we be here, some cash flow trendy clothes, I mostly prefer to wear pastel shapes and some different shades.

✓ Well, I like most colors, but it mostly depends on the type of clothes. For casual trendy clothes, I mostly prefer pastel shades and different tones.

Use plural 'colors'. 'Depends on' is correct prepositional phrase and needs third-person singular 'depends'. Remove 'the' before 'clothes'. 'Cash flow' is incorrect; likely 'casual trendy'. 'Pastel shapes' should be 'pastel shades'.

× But on traditional occasion or in wedding, uh, occasion, I love to be a some bright colors it.

✓ But on traditional occasions or at weddings, I love to wear some bright colors.

Use plural 'occasions' and preposition 'at weddings'. 'Love to be a some bright colors it' is ungrammatical; use 'love to wear some bright colors'. Remove extraneous words and fix word order.