Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct singular/plural and prepositions (e.g., “in winter,” “in summer,” “in LA”). Avoid unnecessary words and repetition.

例: I usually choose clothes according to the season. In winter I prefer warm layers like sweatshirts and hoodies paired with long trousers and boots, while in summer in LA I wear tank tops and shorts with sandals.

× It depends on the season.

✓ It depends on the season.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses the present simple to state a general truth.

× During winter season I would love to wear this sweatshirts and hoodies with some short and socks with some sliders.

✓ During the winter season I would love to wear sweatshirts and hoodies with shorts and socks and some sliders.

Errors: incorrect article omission before 'winter season', singular/plural mismatches and unnecessary 'this'. Use 'the winter season' for a specific season, use plural nouns 'sweatshirts' and 'shorts' consistently, and remove 'this'. Suggestion: keep noun forms consistent and include 'the' for a specific season.

× During summer season or LA or I would like to wear a top tank with shorts.

✓ During the summer in LA I would like to wear a tank top with shorts.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'summer season', awkward order 'top tank' should be 'tank top', and unclear phrase 'or LA or'. Use 'the summer in LA' and correct noun order 'tank top'.

× It depends.

✓ It depends.

No change needed; this simple response correctly matches subject and verb.

× During office hours I would like to wear a smart clothes like formal shared band and formal shoes.

✓ During office hours I would like to wear smart clothes like a formal shirt and formal shoes.

Errors: 'a smart clothes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' or use singular noun. 'shared band' seems a mishearing for 'shirt and', so correct to 'a formal shirt'. Ensure articles match noun number.

× On off days I like wearing a comfortable clothes or a fit clothes.

✓ On my days off I like wearing comfortable clothes or a fitted outfit.

Errors: 'On off days' should be 'On my days off'; 'a comfortable clothes' mixes article with plural; use 'comfortable clothes' (no article) or 'a comfortable outfit'; 'fit clothes' better as 'fitted outfit' or 'fitted clothes'.

× That also depends on the weather.

✓ That also depends on the weather.

No change needed; present simple correctly expresses dependence on conditions.

× I am very much very much into black fit T-shirts since I've been working out for a very long time.

✓ I am very into black fitted T-shirts since I've been working out for a very long time.

Errors: redundant 'very much very much' — reduce to 'very'; 'black fit T-shirts' should be 'black fitted T-shirts' or 'well-fitting T-shirts' to describe fit. 'Since I've been working out' correctly uses present perfect continuous context.

× Have good body structure and it helps me to keep that confidence and assemble the shape of my body through the fetish.

✓ They give me a good body shape, and that helps me keep confidence and show my physique; I enjoy that.

Original is fragmented and unclear. 'Have good body structure' lacks a subject; use 'they give me a good body shape'. 'Assemble the shape of my body through the fetish' is awkward and possibly inappropriate; replace with 'show my physique' or 'highlight my body'. Provide clear subject, verb, and natural collocations.

× Yes, I take a couple of minutes to choose a cloth.

✓ Yes, I take a couple of minutes to choose clothes.

'a cloth' means a piece of fabric; to refer to an item of clothing use 'clothes' or 'an outfit' or 'a piece of clothing'. Use plural 'clothes' or 'an outfit'.

× Uh, it depends.

✓ Uh, it depends.

No change needed; appropriate short spoken reply.

× Sometimes I find difficult to choose and sometimes I'll choose instantly and wear it and just go.

✓ Sometimes I find it difficult to choose, and sometimes I choose instantly, put it on, and just go.

Missing 'it' after 'find' — correct phrase is 'find it difficult'. Use consistent simple present for habitual actions: 'I choose' rather than 'I'll choose'. Use 'put it on' instead of 'wear it' to describe dressing at that moment.

× Yes, I've read different kinds of different styles of clothes on week, weekends and weekdays.

✓ Yes, I've tried different kinds and styles of clothes on weekends and weekdays.

'I've read' is incorrect — likely 'tried' or 'worn'. 'Different kinds of different styles' is redundant; simplify to 'different kinds and styles'. 'On week, weekends and weekdays' is wrong order; use 'on weekends and weekdays' or 'during the week and at weekends'.

× On weekdays I wear a formal clothes for my office.

✓ On weekdays I wear formal clothes to the office.

'article error: 'a formal clothes' mixes singular article with plural noun — remove 'a'. Use 'to the office' as the correct preposition for destination.

× After office hours I wear a traffic loss for my gym workout.

✓ After office hours I wear tracksuits for my gym workout.

'traffic loss' is incorrect and likely misheard; correct term 'tracksuit' or 'training clothes'. Use plural 'tracksuits' or 'a tracksuit' depending on meaning. Ensure correct vocabulary.

× Later I'll I'll be wearing a night suit.

✓ Later I'll be wearing a night suit.

Duplicate 'I'll' — remove the repetition. The future progressive 'I'll be wearing' is fine for planned later action.

× I personally choose a black and white color that's that's been my favorite color from very long time and I'm still stuck in that color.

✓ I personally prefer black and white; those have been my favorite colors for a very long time and I'm still attached to them.

Errors: 'choose a black and white color' is awkward — say 'prefer black and white'. 'that's that's' duplicated. 'favorite color' should be plural 'favorite colors' when referring to two colors. Use 'for a very long time' for time expression. 'stuck in that color' is informal and unclear; 'attached to them' or 'I still like them' is better.

× Hopefully I'm gonna continue that and not lose interest in those two pillars.

✓ Hopefully I'll continue liking them and not lose interest in those two colors.

'I'm gonna' is informal; use 'I'll' or 'I am going to'. 'Continue that' is vague — 'continue liking them' clarifies. 'two pillars' is an odd metaphor for colors; use 'two colors'. Ensure future tense consistency.