Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조와 표현을 더 정확하게 다듬고, 불필요한 단어를 줄이세요. 주제 문장(topic sentence)을 명확히 하고, 예시를 연결어로 자연스럽게 이어 주세요. 예: "I prefer comfortable clothes because they allow me to move freely. For example, I often wear jeans or loose T-shirts when I go out or study at home."

例: I prefer comfortable clothes because they allow me to move freely. For example, I often wear jeans or loose T-shirts when I go out or study at home.

提案: 접속사와 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 사용하고 동사·형용사 형태를 교정하세요. 이유를 조금 더 구체적으로 덧붙이면 설득력이 증가합니다. 예: "I prefer casual clothes because they are comfortable and practical, but I wear smart clothes for formal events."

例: I prefer casual clothes because they are comfortable and practical, but I wear smart clothes for formal events or important meetings.

提案: 문법(현재형, 동명사 사용)을 고치고 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요. 반복을 피하고 연결어를 사용하세요. 예: "Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to style; I especially prefer oversized ones."

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to style. I especially prefer oversized T-shirts for a relaxed look.

提案: 문장을 간결하게 만들고 이유와 결과를 명확히 설명하세요. 문법(현재형, 과거·현재 혼동)과 어순을 고치세요. 예: "Yes, I do because I like fashion, so I choose my clothes carefully to look presentable."

例: Yes, I do because I like fashion, so I choose my clothes carefully to look presentable and feel confident.

提案: 의미 전달이 불분명합니다. 부정·긍정 표현을 명확히 하고 이유를 정리하세요. 불필요한 말은 제거하고 문장을 완성하세요. 예: "No, I don't. Since I'm a student and not working, I usually wear the same casual clothes both on weekdays and weekends."

例: No, I don't. Since I'm a student and I don't have to wear formal clothes for work, I usually wear casual clothes both on weekdays and weekends.

提案: 말을 정리하여 핵심을 명확히 표현하세요. 반복과 채우기 음(ums, ohs)을 줄이고 형용사 철자와 어순을 확인하세요. 예: "I prefer black clothes because they look stylish and make me feel more confident."

例: I prefer black clothes because they look stylish and make me feel more confident.

× I prefer more comfortable clothes because I can't move easily down.

✓ I prefer more comfortable clothes because I can't move easily in them.

Subject uses present tense preference; error is preposition and phrase 'move easily down' is incorrect. Use 'in them' to refer to clothes and 'move easily' to indicate freedom of movement. Suggestion: say 'move easily in them' or 'move around easily.'

× For example, I usually wear jeans or loose T-shirts when I go out or study at home.

✓ For example, I usually wear jeans or loose T-shirts when I go out or study at home.

This sentence is correct in present tense and needs no change. Keep simple present to describe habits.

× And I prefer more to wear comfortably and casual clothes because I can move easily on them.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes because I can move easily in them.

Multiple issues: incorrect adverb/adjective use ('comfortably and casual' should be 'comfortable, casual'), unnecessary 'more', wrong preposition 'on' should be 'in'. Suggestion: use adjectives before nouns and 'in them' to refer to clothes.

× But I prefer smart clothes sometimes because I need.

✓ But I sometimes prefer smart clothes because I need to look professional.

Original lacks an object/complement after 'need'. Add purpose clause 'to look professional' or 'for work' to complete meaning. Place adverb 'sometimes' before main verb.

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because I can feel comfortable and convenient.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because I feel comfortable and comfortable wearing them.

'Can feel' is unnecessary; use simple present 'feel' for general statements. 'Convenient' describes objects, not people; use 'comfortable' or 'at ease'. Alternatively: 'I feel comfortable and at ease.'

× For example, I usually wearing T-shirts, especially a big T-shirt.

✓ For example, I usually wear T-shirts, especially big ones.

Use base verb 'wear' after 'usually' (adverb + base verb). 'A big T-shirt' should be plural 'big ones' to match 'T-shirts' or 'a big T-shirt' if singular. Suggest: 'I usually wear T-shirts, especially big ones.'

× Yes I do because I like fashion so I usually choosing clothes carefully because I figured when I pretty wear clothes.

✓ Yes, I do because I like fashion, so I usually choose clothes carefully because I feel good when I wear pretty clothes.

Errors: 'usually choosing' should be 'usually choose' (adverb + base verb). 'I figured' is incorrect—use 'I feel' to express emotion. Word order and articles missing. Suggest clear clause 'I feel good when I wear pretty clothes.'

× In fact, I don't wear different styles because I'm a student.

✓ In fact, I don't wear very different styles because I'm a student.

Sentence understandable but adding 'very' clarifies degree. Present tense 'don't wear' is correct; no major grammar error.

× I'm a not student and work either, so I. Where what I want clothes?

✓ I'm not working yet, and I'm only a student, so I wear whatever clothes I want.

Original fragments and word order wrong: 'a not student and work either' unclear. Use 'I'm not working' or 'I don't work' and combine clauses. 'Where what I want clothes?' should be 'I wear whatever clothes I want.'

× Erm, I prefer black colour clothes because I like black and oh, when I wear black colour clothes I feel more conveni confident.

✓ Erm, I prefer black clothes because I like black, and when I wear black clothes I feel more confident.

'Black colour clothes' is awkward; use 'black clothes.' 'Conveni' is typo and 'confident' is adjective; use 'feel more confident.' Remove filler 'oh' and keep simple structure.