Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the kinds of clothes you like, then add one or two specific supporting details (when and why) using linking words. Avoid fillers like “umm” and fragmented sentences.

例: I like wearing casual and comfortable clothes, especially T-shirts and jeans. For example, in the mornings I usually pick something relaxed because I want to feel comfortable at school, but I might choose smarter clothes for special events.

提案: Give a clear preference first, then explain the reason with a cohesive sentence. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I exercise before or after school. Therefore I need clothes that allow me to move easily, such as sweatshirts and trainers.

提案: Answer directly and describe specifically. Replace vague words ("tissues") with appropriate vocabulary ("materials"). Use one or two supporting details about style or reason.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially those made of cotton because they are comfortable. I often choose T-shirts with anime characters on them because they show my interests.

提案: Provide a clearer explanation of what you mean by "critical" and give a brief example of your routine. Use linking words like "because" to connect reason and result.

例: Yes, I do. Because I'm picky about how I look, I usually spend about 10–15 minutes choosing an outfit each morning to make sure colors and styles match.

提案: Clarify your intent and correct confusing phrasing. State clearly whether you wear different styles, then give a reason using linking words. Avoid repeating words and incorrect grammar.

例: No, I usually wear similar clothes on weekdays and weekends because I prefer comfort every day. The only difference is that I might dress slightly smarter for special weekend events.

提案: Give a clear statement of preference and a concise, grammatical explanation. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "because" and explain the reason logically.

例: I prefer white clothes because they look clean and can make me appear slimmer. Also, white is easy to match with other colors.

× Umm, I actually don't know 'cause I have a lot of types of clothes, then I choose what to wear.

✓ Umm, I actually don't know because I have many types of clothes, so I choose what to wear depending on how I feel.

The original sentence has informal contractions and poor clause connections ('then' misused). 'A lot of types of clothes' is awkward; use 'many types of clothes' or 'a lot of clothes.' Use 'because' instead of ''cause' for formal clarity and connect ideas with 'so' and 'depending on how I feel.' Improve fluency by combining clauses.

× Depends on how I feel.

✓ It depends on how I feel.

This is a sentence fragment missing the subject 'It.' In present tense, include subject 'It' with verb 'depends' to form a complete sentence.

× So it really depends on my feeling.

✓ So it really depends on my feelings.

Use plural 'feelings' or the gerund phrase 'how I feel.' 'My feeling' is unnatural here. Maintain present tense and natural collocation 'depends on my feelings.'

× I would say I prefer to wear comfortable shirt clothes because you know like recent recently I am more likely to do exercise either in the morning before school or after school, so.

✓ I would say I prefer to wear comfortable shirts because recently I am more likely to exercise either in the morning before school or after school.

Multiple issues: 'comfortable shirt clothes' is awkward; use 'comfortable shirts.' 'Recent recently' is duplicated; use 'recently.' Use correct verb form: 'more likely to exercise' (not 'do exercise' is acceptable but 'exercise' is more natural). Remove trailing 'so.'

× Yeah, I was saying yes.

✓ Yes, I do.

The original is redundant and awkward. A brief direct answer 'Yes, I do' fits the question and is grammatically correct.

× And surely there's a wide range of, you know, tissues.

✓ And surely there's a wide range of fabrics.

'Tissues' is the wrong word in this context; likely intended 'fabrics' or 'materials.' Use the correct noun to match clothing context.

× And I prefer to choose to clothe the T-shirts with a lot of anime character on it.

✓ I prefer to choose T-shirts with a lot of anime characters on them.

Word order and verb use are wrong: 'choose to clothe the T-shirts' is incorrect. Use 'choose T-shirts' and pluralize 'characters' and 'them' to match plural 'T-shirts.'

× I would say yes.

✓ Yes, I would say so.

Contextual polish: original is short but acceptable; 'Yes, I would say so' is clearer. This is optional but improves naturalness.

× I'm kind of critical thinking person, so I I tend to spend a lot of time to choose clothes every morning.

✓ I'm kind of a critical-thinking person, so I tend to spend a lot of time choosing clothes every morning.

Missing article 'a' before 'critical-thinking person' and 'critical thinking' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective. Use 'spend time choosing' (verb + -ing) rather than 'spend time to choose.' Remove duplicate 'I.'

× I will send clothes weekend and weekdays 'cause you know there's no point to wear different clothes between weekdays and weekdays weekend.

✓ I wear the same clothes on weekends and weekdays because, you know, there's no point in wearing different clothes on weekdays and weekends.

'Send' is incorrect; probably 'wear.' Correct word order 'on weekends and weekdays.' Use 'because' not ''cause' in formal. Use 'point in wearing' (preposition + gerund). Fix repetition 'weekdays and weekdays weekend.'

× Can you save white color is the best because.

✓ I think white is the best color because...

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Use subject 'I' and verb 'think' or 'say.' 'White color' should be 'white' or 'the color white.' Complete the sentence by adding a reason after 'because.'

× Color mix makes us looks, you know more skinny so.

✓ Color combinations make us look, you know, thinner.

'Color mix' is awkward; use 'color combinations.' 'Makes us looks' is wrong subject-verb agreement and extra 's'; use 'make us look.' 'More skinny' is nonstandard; use 'thinner.' Remove trailing 'so.'