Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Remove repetitions and fix noun forms and articles (e.g., 'dresses', 'and it's cheap').

例: I prefer wearing casual, basic clothes such as T-shirts, dresses and shorts because they are comfortable. For example, I often buy inexpensive T-shirts from local markets since they’re easy to replace and comfortable for everyday wear.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating previous phrases, and give a specific reason with a linking word. Use comparative structure correctly.

例: I prefer casual clothes rather than smart clothes because they are more comfortable and usually cheaper. For instance, I can move freely in a hoodie and jeans, which I need for my daily commute.

提案: Give a direct response and a clear contrast using linking words. Be specific about frequency and reasons, and correct singular/plural and pronoun agreement.

例: Yes, I sometimes wear T-shirts, but I often choose dresses or crop tops. Although T-shirts are comfortable, I prefer dresses for casual outings because they’re fashionable and widely available.

提案: Provide a coherent single-sentence topic and then elaborate. Fix sentence fragments and explain why choosing takes time, with a linking word and a specific example.

例: Yes, I spend quite a bit of time choosing my clothes because I want to pick outfits that match the weather and the occasion. For example, I often try on different tops and shoes in the morning to make sure they suit both comfort and style.

提案: Respond directly and clearly with a topic sentence. Use linking words to explain the factors that influence your choices and give a concrete example. Remove hesitations and repetitions.

例: I usually wear different styles on weekdays and weekends because it depends on my mood and the weather. For instance, I wear smart-casual outfits for work during the week but prefer relaxed shorts and T-shirts at the weekend when I’m meeting friends.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then contrast your preferences using linking words. Use plural and adjective forms correctly (e.g., 'colors that are bright', 'neutral colours') and provide a specific situation for each preference.

例: I like bright colours such as yellow, pink, green and blue because they make me feel cheerful. However, I also wear neutral colours like black and white at the weekend when I want a simpler, more versatile look.

× I like to wear regular clothes or basic clothes like T-shirts, dressed and shorts because it makes me comfortable and it's it.

✓ I like to wear regular or basic clothes like T-shirts, dresses, and shorts because they make me comfortable.

The sentence uses incorrect word form 'dressed' instead of the noun 'dresses' and has awkward repetition 'it's it'. Also subject-pronoun agreement: 'clothes' is plural so use 'they make' not 'it makes'. Suggest replacing 'dressed' with 'dresses', remove the extra phrase 'it's it', and change 'it makes' to 'they make'. Keep parallel structure 'regular or basic clothes'.

× I can buy it anywhere and with for a small price.

✓ I can buy them anywhere and for a low price.

Pronoun and article usage is incorrect. 'Clothes' is plural so use 'them' not 'it'. The preposition phrase 'with for a small price' is ungrammatical; use 'for a low price' or 'at a low price'. Suggest 'I can buy them anywhere and for a low price.'

× I do prefer to wear casual clothes because just like what I've said, it's comfortable to wear and it's affordable too, and I'm really into casual clothes than any other clothes.

✓ I prefer to wear casual clothes because, as I said, they are comfortable and affordable, and I'm more into casual clothes than any other style.

Unnecessary auxiliary 'do' is acceptable for emphasis but not needed with 'prefer'. 'It's' refers to singular; 'clothes' require plural 'they are'. Comparative structure 'really into casual clothes than any other clothes' lacks 'more' and repeats 'clothes'. Suggest 'prefer', change 'it's' to 'they are', use 'more into ... than any other style' for correct comparison and conciseness.

× Sometimes I do like wearing T-shirts, but I often wear dresses and crop tops too because it's already popular and it's easier to find those things.

✓ Sometimes I like wearing T-shirts, but I also often wear dresses and crop tops because they are already popular and easier to find.

Remove redundant auxiliary 'do' for natural speech. 'It's already popular' incorrectly uses singular pronoun; use 'they are' to refer to dresses and crop tops (plural). Also streamline 'it's easier to find those things' to 'easier to find.'

× Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing my clothes and sometimes I do. Had some. Difficulty choosing what to wear in my everyday life.

✓ Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing my clothes. Sometimes I have difficulty deciding what to wear in my daily life.

The original has fragmented sentences 'Had some. Difficulty...' and awkward repetition. Combine related ideas into full sentences: 'Sometimes I have difficulty deciding what to wear' is grammatical. Use 'daily life' or 'everyday life' and 'deciding' to express choice.

× No I I would rather say that I wear different styles. Depends on my mood and also the weather too. I pref prefer to wear.

✓ No. I would rather say that I wear different styles depending on my mood and the weather.

There are repetitions ('I I', 'pref prefer') and sentence fragments ('Depends on...'). Combine into one clear sentence and remove redundant words. 'Depending on my mood and the weather' correctly links conditions. Remove the unfinished 'I prefer to wear.'

× Honestly I like clothes that's bright such as yellow, pink, green or blue.

✓ Honestly, I like clothes that are bright, such as yellow, pink, green, or blue.

Use 'that are' with plural 'clothes' (not 'that's' which is singular). Add commas for clarity. Maintain plural verb agreement: 'clothes that are bright.'

× But I also do like uh black white more on like a neutral color especially in weekends.

✓ But I also like black and white more as neutral colors, especially on weekends.

Multiple issues: remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary 'do'. Use 'black and white' with 'and' to list colors. 'More on like a neutral color' is ungrammatical; use 'as neutral colors'. Use 'on weekends' rather than 'in weekends'.