Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more clear and complete: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid unclear words like "kasha", correct grammar, and finish the thought. Use one or two supporting details linked logically (e.g., reason and example). Keep to under five sentences.

例: I usually wear athleisure because I work from home and value comfort. For example, I often choose leggings and a soft sweatshirt, which allow me to move freely when I take short breaks to exercise. Because I rarely go to an office, comfort is my top priority.

提案: Avoid repetition and unclear vocabulary; give a concise topic sentence and a clear reason using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Add a brief example to illustrate.

例: I prefer comfortable and casual clothes because they let me exercise easily after work. For instance, I often wear a long-sleeved top and leggings so I can stretch or do a quick workout without changing.

提案: Good structure and clear contrast. Improve by correcting small errors ("a T-shirt"), using a linking word for contrast ("however"), and keeping it concise.

例: I don't mind wearing a T-shirt on a hot day; however, I'm sensitive to cold, so I usually choose long-sleeved sweaters or hoodies to stay warm.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and join ideas smoothly. Correct numbers and phrasing ("three to four times a year"), and use linking words ("however", "because") to explain the exception clearly.

例: No, I don't. I typically buy clothes three to four times a year. However, when I visit Japan I shop more because I can find clothes that fit my shorter height more easily.

提案: Be concise and avoid hesitations. Use a clear topic sentence, correct grammar ("the office", "business clothes"), and quantify frequency precisely. Remove filler words and finish sentences confidently.

例: No, I wear casual clothes most of the time because I work from home. The only exception is when I go to the office, which is once or twice a month, and then I wear business attire like a suit.

提案: Good clear answer with supporting detail. Improve by smoothing grammar ("a color test showed I suit autumn tones") and using a linking word to connect idea and result.

例: I prefer earthy colors. A color test showed that autumn tones suit me best, so I usually choose green, yellow, and brown clothes.

× I prefer to wear kasha clothes such as athleisure type of clothing.

✓ I prefer wearing kasha clothes, such as athleisure-style clothing.

Use of 'prefer' with a gerund (prefers doing) is more natural here; 'athleisure type of clothing' is awkward — use 'athleisure-style clothing' to form a correct modifier. Also add a comma for clarity.

× I typically work at home without going to the office at all, so I like to wear something comfortable In addition to the comfortable feeling, I.

✓ I typically work at home and do not go to the office, so I like to wear comfortable clothes. In addition to comfort, I...

Run-on and incomplete sentence: 'In addition to the comfortable feeling, I.' is incomplete. Rephrase 'without going to the office at all' to 'and do not go to the office' for clarity; use 'comfortable clothes' instead of 'something comfortable.' Complete the second clause or indicate continuation.

× I prefer to wear comfortable, comfortable and kacha clothes such as a long sleeved shirt and leggings, mainly because I can work out easily after I finish working at home.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes, such as a long-sleeved shirt and leggings, mainly because I can work out easily after I finish working at home.

Repeat 'comfortable' is redundant; 'kacha' likely intended as 'casual' — replace with correct adjective. Compound adjectives before a noun require hyphens (long-sleeved). Commas improve readability.

× I don't mind wearing AT shirt on a hot day, but I'm sensitive to cold so I tend to wear long sleeved clothes such as sweater and hoodies.

✓ I don't mind wearing a T-shirt on a hot day, but I'm sensitive to the cold, so I tend to wear long-sleeved clothes such as sweaters and hoodies.

Missing article before 'T-shirt' and incorrect capitalization; 'the cold' is idiomatic; 'long-sleeved' needs a hyphen; use plural 'sweaters' to match 'hoodies.'

× No I don't. I typically buy clothes 3 to 4 * a year or every season.

✓ No, I don't. I typically buy clothes three or four times a year, usually once each season.

Use words for numbers under common style guidance and 'times' after 'three or four' to indicate frequency. '3 to 4 * a year' is unclear; clarify as 'three or four times a year' or 'once each season.'

× But it happens only when I go to Japan, there I can find right sized clothes for my body as I'm shorter than average.

✓ But it only happens when I go to Japan, where I can find clothes in the right size for my body because I'm shorter than average.

Use 'where' instead of comma splice; 'clothes in the right size' is the correct prepositional phrase; 'because' is clearer than 'as' here. Avoid comma splice by connecting clauses properly.

× No, I always wear casual and comfortable clothes because I tend to work at home. The only exception is when I go to your office, which happens only once or twice a day at office.

✓ No, I always wear casual and comfortable clothes because I tend to work at home. The only exception is when I go to the office, which happens only once or twice a week.

'Your office' is odd in this context; use 'the office.' 'Once or twice a day at office' is likely incorrect frequency — 'once or twice a week' is more plausible. Also remove redundant 'at office.'

× Of course I need to wear a business clothes such as suit, but other than that? Uh.

✓ Of course I need to wear business clothes, such as a suit, but other than that I don't.

'A business clothes' mixes singular article with plural noun — remove 'a' and use plural 'business clothes' or 'a business suit.' 'Such as suit' needs an article: 'a suit.' The original ends with a fragment; complete the thought.

× I like earth colors. When I take a color testing that fit my style, it turned out to be autumn color.

✓ I like earthy colors. When I took a color test to see what fits my style, it turned out to be autumn colors.

Tense mismatch: use past tense 'took' for a completed test; 'color testing' should be 'color test'; 'fit' should be 'fits' or rephrase; 'earth colors' -> 'earthy colors'; 'autumn color' -> 'autumn colors.'

× So I typically buy green, yellow, or brown colored clothing.

✓ So I typically buy green, yellow, or brown clothing.

'Brown colored clothing' is wordy; colors modify 'clothing' directly. Omitting 'colored' produces a more natural phrase.