Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then add one or two clear supporting details without hesitation. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and redundant words. Use a correct phrase (e.g., “I am a hijab-wearing woman”) and mention types of clothes you prefer (long dresses, tunics) and why (modesty, comfort).

例: I am a hijab-wearing woman, so I usually wear long dresses and tunics with a scarf. I prefer these clothes because they are modest and comfortable for everyday activities.

提案: Start with a clear preference sentence and then give a concise reason and example. Remove fillers and correct grammar (e.g., “as an agronomy student”). Use linking words like “but” or “however” to contrast. Specify what ‘smart’ and ‘casual’ mean for you.

例: I usually wear smart clothes for school and events because I need to look professional as an agronomy student. However, on relaxed days I choose casual outfits like jeans and a loose blouse for comfort.

提案: Answer directly and use present simple for habits. Avoid repeating previous statements; briefly explain where and why you wear T-shirts. Use correct verb forms and clear structure.

例: Because I wear the hijab, I don't usually wear T-shirts outside. I do wear T-shirts at home with pajama pants because they are comfortable for relaxing.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and examples of what makes you picky (matching colors, occasions). Reduce fillers and expand slightly with linking words like “because” or “so”.

例: Yes, I usually spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I like to match colors and patterns carefully. For example, I often try different scarves and dresses to make sure the outfit looks coordinated.

提案: Give a concise contrast with a linking word and specific details about each style. Correct simple grammar (“I wear” not “I put I wear”) and avoid unnecessary words. Mention examples of the long dress or casual weekend items.

例: On weekdays I usually wear a long dress and a scarf when I go out because I need to be presentable. On weekends I stay at home and prefer pajamas or loose loungewear to feel comfortable.

提案: Start with a direct statement of preference, then explain with a brief, specific reason. Use correct capitalization and grammar (e.g., “they remind me of the sky and trees”). You can add a short example of an outfit in those colors.

例: I prefer blue and green because they remind me of the sky and trees. For instance, I often choose a navy dress or an olive-green scarf because those colors feel calm and natural.

× I'm hijabi girl, so the clothes that I prefer to wear are, uh, hijabs with the scarf.

✓ I'm a hijabi girl, so the clothes I prefer to wear are hijabs with a scarf.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before singular noun 'hijabi girl' and unnecessary 'the' before 'clothes' and 'the scarf'. Use 'a' for one girl and 'a scarf' for a non-specific scarf; simplify relative clause to 'the clothes I prefer to wear'.

× So for the events or for school I prefer to uh to wear smart clothes as agronomy student.

✓ For events or school, I prefer to wear smart clothes as an agronomy student.

Omit extra 'to' and add the article 'an' before 'agronomy student'. Use commas for clarity. 'For the events' is better as 'for events' in general statements.

× Usually I prefer also casual clothes for the days where umm, little bit.

✓ Usually I also prefer casual clothes for days when I want to be a little more relaxed.

Awkward phrasing 'for the days where little bit'. Use 'days when' for time clauses and complete the idea 'a little more relaxed'. Move 'also' to natural position after 'usually'.

× As I say, I'm hijabi girl, so I didn't like to wear T-shirt outside.

✓ As I said, I'm a hijabi girl, so I don't like to wear T-shirts outside.

Tense and article issues: 'As I say' should be 'As I said' to refer to earlier comment. 'I'm hijabi girl' needs 'a'. Use plural 'T-shirts' for general preference and present simple 'don't like' for habitual dislike rather than past 'didn't like'.

× Uh, I put, I, uh, wearing them in home with the pants or pajamas.

✓ I wear them at home with pants or pajamas.

Incorrect verb forms: 'I put ... wearing' is ungrammatical. Use simple present 'I wear' for habitual action. Use preposition 'at home' not 'in home', and 'pants' without 'the' for general reference.

× Yeah, usually I spend a lot of time for choosing clothes.

✓ Yeah, usually I spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

Do not use 'for' after 'spend time' when followed by a verb; use the gerund directly: 'spend time choosing'.

× Umm, too picky.

✓ I'm too picky.

Sentence fragment missing subject and verb. Add 'I'm' to form a complete sentence and match spoken meaning.

× I love choosing uh, and matching clothes.

✓ I love choosing and matching clothes.

Extra comma and filler 'uh' interrupt structure. Remove the filler and ensure parallel verb forms 'choosing and matching'.

× So in the weekdays usually I put I wear long dress with a scarf when I go outside.

✓ So on weekdays I usually wear a long dress with a scarf when I go outside.

Use 'on weekdays' not 'in the weekdays'. Remove 'I put' which is unnecessary. Include article 'a' before 'long dress' and position 'usually' in natural place.

× But when weekends I'm in home so I prefer to wear pajamas to feel more comfortable at home.

✓ But on weekends I'm at home, so I prefer to wear pajamas to feel more comfortable.

Use 'on weekends' and 'at home' instead of 'in home'. Remove redundant 'at home' at end. Add comma before 'so' for clarity.

× I prefer two colors, blue and green, because they Remember Me with a natural sky and the trees.

✓ I prefer two colors, blue and green, because they remind me of the sky and the trees.

Capitalization error 'Remember Me' should be 'remind me'. Use 'remind me of' to express association. 'A natural sky' is unnatural; use 'the sky' and 'the trees' for general images.