Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation and repetition, make one clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: I prefer sporty clothes because they are very comfortable. For example, when I travel for long journeys I wear tracksuits and sneakers because they let me move easily and prevent stiffness.

提案: Remove repetition and correct minor word choice errors. Begin with a clear opinion, then give a specific example and briefly explain why. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart outfits because they help me relax and move easily. For example, I usually wear a tracksuit and trainers when I travel long distances.

提案: Improve grammar (plural 'T-shirts', 'keep me cool and relaxed') and combine ideas more smoothly with linking words. Offer one concise reason and one example.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and casual. For instance, in summer I wear them when I walk around my neighborhood because the breathable fabric keeps me cool and relaxed.

提案: Avoid long, repetitive sentences and reduce hesitations. State your main point first, then give one clear supporting detail. Fix grammar: 'I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes' and 'they make me feel comfortable'.

例: I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I prefer basic, comfortable items. For example, I usually pick simple shirts and jeans in the morning so I can get ready quickly and feel relaxed.

提案: Be concise and correct grammar (e.g., 'I don't change my clothes much on weekdays' and 'I wear comfortable, sporty clothes at weekends'). Use one linking phrase to contrast weekdays and weekends and give a brief example.

例: I don't change my clothes much on weekdays because I have to wear a company uniform. On weekends, however, I prefer comfortable, sporty clothes like tracksuits and trainers for relaxing or exercising.

提案: Avoid filler words and correct grammar (plural/singular, 'they are my favourite colours', 'suit my skin tone', 'give me confidence'). State preference, give two brief reasons and one example of when you wear those colours.

例: I mostly wear black and white because they are my favourite colours and they suit my skin tone. For example, I often choose a black T-shirt or a white shirt for work or casual outings because they make me feel confident.

× I like to wear sporty clothes because, uh, it is comfortable for me and for my body.

✓ I like to wear sporty clothes because they are comfortable for me and for my body.

The subject 'sporty clothes' is plural, so the pronoun and verb should be plural ('they are') rather than singular ('it is'). Use matching number for pronouns and verbs to ensure subject-pronoun agreement.

× Uh, and when I, when I'm traveling lot, when I'm traveling in a long journey, uh, it makes me comfortable with it.

✓ When I travel a lot or on a long journey, they make me comfortable.

The original has redundant and ungrammatical phrasing ('traveling lot', 'it makes me comfortable with it'). Simplify the structure, use the base verb 'travel' for general statements, add the quantifier 'a' in 'a lot', and refer back to 'sporty clothes' with 'they' to maintain clarity.

× I prefer comfortable clothes because it helps me relax and move easily when I'm traveling.

✓ I prefer comfortable clothes because they help me relax and move easily when I'm traveling.

'Clothes' is plural, so use plural verb 'help' and pronoun 'they' instead of singular 'it' and 'helps'. This fixes number agreement with the plural subject.

× For example, I like to wear I like to wear track suits or train trainees when I'm traveling.

✓ For example, I like to wear tracksuits or training clothes when I'm traveling.

The sentence repeats a phrase and uses incorrect noun 'train trainees'. Replace repetition with a single clause and correct terms: 'tracksuits' (one word or two) and 'training clothes' for clarity.

× Yes, I like to wear T-shirt because it's very comfortable and casual.

✓ Yes, I like to wear T-shirts because they're very comfortable and casual.

Use the plural 'T-shirts' to refer generally and match with plural verb/pronoun 'they're'. Also add the article when referring to a specific shirt ('a T-shirt'), but for general preference plural is preferred.

× When I'm traveling or just walking around my neighborhood in summer, I wear them most because the breathable fabric keeps me cool and relax.

✓ When I'm traveling or just walking around my neighborhood in summer, I wear them most because the breathable fabric keeps me cool and relaxed.

Use past participle/adjective 'relaxed' instead of base verb 'relax' to describe the state caused by the fabric. 'Keeps me cool and relaxed' is the correct parallel adjective structure.

× I don't, uh, spend a lot of time when I'm using my clothes because I like to wear, uh, normal and, uh, basic clothes because, uh, it gives me feel comfortable and I like to wear clothes which are comfortable for me and which keeps me relaxed.

✓ I don't spend a lot of time choosing my clothes because I prefer normal, basic clothes; they make me feel comfortable and relaxed.

'Using my clothes' is incorrect; the verb 'choose' fits context. Simplify repetition and fix subject-verb agreement: 'clothes' plural requires 'make' or 'they make', and use 'feel comfortable' not 'gives me feel comfortable'. Use 'keep me relaxed' -> 'make me feel relaxed'.

× I don't change my clothes frequently, uh, in the weekdays because I have to go to work and, uh, I, I have to wear uniforms, uh, which is given by my company.

✓ I don't change my clothes frequently on weekdays because I have to go to work and wear the uniform given by my company.

Use 'on weekdays' not 'in the weekdays'. 'Uniform' is usually singular in this context and the clause should be 'given by my company' without 'which is' to be concise. Also remove redundant phrasing.

× Uh, and in talking about weekends, some, uh, I like to work comfortable and sporty clothes.

✓ On weekends, I like to wear comfortable, sporty clothes.

Use 'on weekends' for time expression and 'wear' instead of 'work'. Reorder adjectives with correct comma and adjective order: 'comfortable, sporty clothes'.

× So mostly I like to wear black and white color clothes because it's my favorite color and, uh, it suits on my skin tone, uh, and it's, uh, when I'm, uh, wearing black and white clothes, it keeps me confidence.

✓ Mostly I like to wear black and white clothes because those are my favorite colors, they suit my skin tone, and wearing black and white makes me feel confident.

'Black and white color clothes' is unnatural; use 'black and white clothes'. Match plurality: 'colors' plural. Use 'suit my skin tone' (no 'on'). Replace 'keeps me confidence' with 'makes me feel confident' to use correct verb and adjective form.