Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (“uh”), correct collocations (comfortable for walking), and limit to max 3–4 short sentences. Add one specific detail as a reason or example.

例: I prefer casual clothes, especially T-shirts and jeans. They are comfortable for walking and everyday activities. For example, I often wear a cotton T-shirt and slim jeans when I go to the park.

提案: Use correct grammar and vocabulary: say “It depends on the situation.” Replace incorrect words (federal meetings? SMART goals? coat and paint?) with natural phrases (formal meetings, suit and tie). Keep answer clear and add a short reason.

例: It depends on the situation. For formal meetings or important events I usually wear a suit and tie because it looks professional. For social occasions I prefer casual clothes because they are more comfortable.

提案: Avoid repetition and use precise phrasing: one topic sentence plus a specific supporting detail. Use correct form: “short-sleeved” instead of “half sleeves” and “in summer” instead of “in the summer times.”

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to put on. In summer I prefer short-sleeved cotton T-shirts because they keep me cool.

提案: Correct grammar and be more concise: use present simple and remove repetitions. Explain briefly how you plan outfits and give one specific method (e.g., choose outfits the night before).

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually plan my outfit the night before. That helps me get ready quickly in the morning.

提案: Use clearer vocabulary and correct mistakes: say “weekday” and “weekend,” “T-shirt” not “AT shirt,” and avoid awkward phrases (“matching outfits” not “matching weight”). Structure: state the difference then give a short reason and one example.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear a plain T-shirt and jeans because they are comfortable for classes. On weekends I dress more stylishly—for example, I might wear a patterned shirt and slim jeans when I go out with friends.

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. State your preference clearly and give a specific reason or example (shade and type of item). Use natural phrasing: “My favorite colour is blue; I have many blue shirts and jackets.”

例: My favorite colour is blue, so I have a lot of blue clothes in my wardrobe. For instance, I own several navy shirts and a light-blue jacket that I wear often.

× Usually I like to wear, uh, casual clothes like T-shirts and jeans, which I'm really comfortable to do the walks.

✓ Usually I like to wear casual clothes like T-shirts and jeans, which are really comfortable for walking.

The clause 'which I'm really comfortable to do the walks' uses an incorrect adjective/adverb structure and an awkward verb phrase. Replace with 'which are really comfortable for walking' to use correct adjective agreement and the gerund noun 'walking' after the preposition 'for'. Also remove unnecessary filler commas.'

× Well it depend upon the situation.

✓ Well, it depends upon the situation.

The subject 'it' is third person singular and requires the verb 'depends' (adds -s). Also add a comma after 'Well' for natural spoken punctuation.'

× For the federal meetings or some some important situation I would like to go for the SMART goals like coat and paint, but for the other occasions I go for the casual ones.

✓ For formal meetings or other important situations I would like to wear smart clothes like a coat and pants, but on other occasions I wear casual ones.

Several word choice errors: 'federal meetings' and 'SMART goals' are incorrect; 'formal meetings' and 'smart clothes' fit context. 'Some some' is repetition. 'Situation' should be plural 'situations'. 'Coat and paint' likely meant 'coat and pants'. Use 'wear' not 'go for' for clearer verb choice and 'on other occasions' is the correct prepositional phrase.'

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable, and they are, and they are easy to wear.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to wear.

Redundant repetition 'and they are, and they are' should be removed. Keep the gerund 'wearing' which is correct; streamline the sentence to avoid redundancy.'

× In the summer times I like to wear T-shirts with half sleeves.

✓ In the summer I like to wear T-shirts with short sleeves.

Use 'summer' not 'summer times' and 'short sleeves' is the common collocation rather than 'half sleeves'.'

× I don't think I spend most of my time in choosing clothes because I already planned what what the outfits am I gonna choose for the day beforehand.

✓ I don't think I spend most of my time choosing clothes because I already plan which outfits I am going to wear for the day beforehand.

Remove unnecessary 'in' after 'spend time' (correct: 'spend time choosing'). Use present tense 'plan' to match habitual action. Correct word order: 'which outfits I am going to wear' instead of 'what the outfits am I gonna choose'. Avoid repetition 'what what'.'

× So I don't think I spent much time.

✓ So I don't think I spend much time.

Tense inconsistency: the previous clause uses present 'I don't think' so maintain present tense 'spend' rather than past 'spent' to indicate habitual action.'

× For the weekdays, I especially go for the casual words like AT shirt and jeans which I can comfortably work and do and attend the university classes.

✓ On weekdays I usually wear casual clothes like a T-shirt and jeans, which allow me to work comfortably and attend university classes.

Use 'on weekdays' not 'for the weekdays'. 'Especially go for the casual words' is incorrect—use 'usually wear casual clothes'. 'AT shirt' unclear; 'T-shirt' is correct. Rephrase 'which I can comfortably work and do and attend the university classes' to 'which allow me to work comfortably and attend university classes' for clarity and grammaticality.'

× For the weekends while hanging out with my friends, I personally choose a more stylish one or the sometimes matching weight with my friends.

✓ On weekends, when hanging out with my friends, I prefer a more stylish outfit or sometimes match my clothes with my friends.

Use 'on weekends' and 'prefer a more stylish outfit' is clearer than 'choose a more stylish one'. 'Sometimes matching weight' is nonsensical; likely 'match my clothes' is intended. Reorder to natural spoken structure.'

× My favorite color is blue, so my wardrobe is full of blue clothes clothes so I think I like.

✓ My favorite color is blue, so my wardrobe is full of blue clothes.

Remove duplicate 'clothes' and the trailing 'so I think I like' which is unnecessary and ungrammatical. Keep a simple, complete sentence.'

× I prefer the clothes in blue cloth color.

✓ I prefer clothes in shades of blue.

Phrase 'in blue cloth color' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'in shades of blue' or 'blue clothes' for natural expression.'