Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and complete your answer. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples for different seasons. Reduce hesitations and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to connect ideas (For example, “In winter…; in summer…”).

例: I like to dress according to the season. For example, in winter I usually wear a warm jacket, tights and a scarf to stay cozy, while in summer I prefer light cotton shirts and shorts to stay cool.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons and one example. Eliminate filler words and complete your second clause. Use linking words like “however” or “otherwise.”

例: I usually prefer smart clothes for work but casual clothes for my free time. For instance, at the office I wear a blazer and tailored trousers to look professional; however, on weekends I choose jeans and a T‑shirt for comfort.

提案: Keep the answer short and specific. State one main reason, then add a brief example of how you wear T‑shirts. Remove repeated words and hesitation. Use a linking phrase like “for example” to show clarity.

例: Yes, I like wearing T‑shirts because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, I often pair a plain T‑shirt with jeans for a casual look or tuck it into a skirt for a slightly dressier outfit.

提案: Provide a clear, concise answer with precise details. Start with a direct statement, then give exact routine and mention exceptions briefly. Avoid fillers and finish the final thought about special events.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because my wardrobe is small and I like to keep things simple. Usually I pick my outfit the night before, which takes about ten minutes, unless I have a special event when I plan more carefully.

提案: This answer is clear; to improve, add a brief reason and a concrete example of an outfit for each time. Use linking words (“on weekdays… whereas on weekends…”) to show contrast and maintain coherence.

例: Yes, I wear different styles. On weekdays I wear business casual, such as a blouse with tailored trousers to look professional, whereas on weekends I wear T‑shirts and jeans so I can relax and move freely.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then explain why with specific feelings or situations. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “I prefer light-coloured clothes, especially…”). Keep it to two sentences and avoid fillers.

例: I prefer light‑coloured clothes, especially light green, light blue and light pink, because they match my mood. For example, wearing a pink dress or a green shirt makes me feel more upbeat and confident.

× If it's in winter, I just want to wear the clothes which can keep me warm like a umm you know the jackets and tights with a scarf keep keep me warm and cozy.

✓ If it's winter, I just want to wear clothes that can keep me warm, like jackets, tights and a scarf that keep me warm and cozy.

Use 'if it's winter' instead of 'if it's in winter' (preposition unnecessary). Replace 'the clothes which' with 'clothes that' for natural restrictive clause. Use gerund/relative clause 'that keep me warm' to describe the items. Remove duplicated 'keep'. Use commas for clarity.

× And if it's.

✓ And if it's not too cold, I might wear lighter clothes.

Original is an incomplete sentence fragment with no verb or object. Provide a full sentence that completes the thought and fits the context.

× If it is in a workplace I would like to wear smart clothes which can you know, use the outfit to show my professional look and atmosphere or sight.

✓ If I am at the workplace, I like to wear smart clothes that show a professional appearance.

Use present simple 'I am' or 'I work' to describe habitual actions. Remove filler 'you know' and awkward phrase 'use the outfit to show my professional look and atmosphere or sight.' Replace with concise 'show a professional appearance.' Use 'that' for restrictive clause.

× But in daily out of the work I prefer.

✓ But in my daily life outside of work, I prefer casual clothes.

Original is fragmentary and word order is incorrect ('daily out of the work'). Use 'in my daily life outside of work' and complete the sentence with the object 'casual clothes.'

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are the easiest clothes and can match well with the shirt, uh, with the jeans and skirts, uh.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are the easiest clothing to match with jeans or skirts.

Use 'clothing' or 'clothes' consistently and avoid 'the shirt' which is unclear. Use 'jeans or skirts' rather than 'the jeans and skirts.' Remove filler words and make verb-object agreement clearer ('match with').

× They are also comfortable and and uh, versatile so I don't need to spend much time to decide what to wear.

✓ They are also comfortable and versatile, so I don't need to spend much time deciding what to wear.

Remove duplicate 'and' and filler. Use gerund 'deciding' after 'spend time' (correct collocation: spend time doing something), and add comma before 'so.'

× To be honest, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes, uh, because I don't have many items in my wardrobe and I prefer to keep things simple.

✓ To be honest, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I don't have many items in my wardrobe and I prefer to keep things simple.

Mostly correct; only remove filler 'uh.' No article needed. Sentence is grammatical.

× And I usually pick my outfits the night before and it usually takes me 10 minutes, umm, and as there are some like special events.

✓ I usually pick my outfits the night before, and it usually takes me about ten minutes unless there are special events.

Replace 'and as there are some like special events' (awkward) with 'unless there are special events.' Use 'about ten minutes' for natural phrasing. Use comma and remove filler.

× On weekdays, I usually wear smart and business casual outfits to look professional at work. Well, on weekends I wear casual clothes like T-shirts and jeans so I can move around easily and can relax.

✓ On weekdays, I usually wear smart or business-casual outfits to look professional at work. On weekends, I wear casual clothes like T-shirts and jeans so I can move around easily and relax.

Use 'or' between 'smart' and 'business-casual' for clarity. Remove repeated 'can' before 'relax' (unnecessary). Add comma after 'weekends.'

× I prefer light colored clothes is uh, especially light green, light blue or lights pink because they suit my energy and mood.

✓ I prefer light-colored clothes, especially light green, light blue or light pink, because they suit my energy and mood.

Hyphenate 'light-colored' as a compound adjective. Change 'lights pink' to 'light pink.' Remove 'is' which is erroneous. Add commas for readability.

× Uh, for example, wearing a pink dress or a green shirt, uh, that would make me feel more upbeat and confident.

✓ For example, wearing a pink dress or a green shirt makes me feel more upbeat and confident.

Use present simple 'makes' to state a general effect. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary comma before 'that.'