Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be slightly more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid minor grammar slips (use plural 'them' or 'casual clothes' consistently), and add one specific example to enrich content. Use linking words only if adding detail.

例: I prefer casual clothes because they make me feel relaxed and comfortable. For example, I usually wear jeans and a soft sweater when I go out with friends because they’re easy to move in and low-maintenance.

提案: Avoid hesitations and repetitions. Use a clear present-tense statement (I prefer...) and complete your supporting detail with a reason or example. Remove filler words and finish the sentence. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they help me relax. For example, at the weekend I usually wear jeans and a hoodie since they’re warm and comfortable for walking around town.

提案: Be more fluent and correct small grammar mistakes (use 'they're' or 'they are'). Avoid vocalized hesitation. Provide one brief reason or example to support your answer and use a linking phrase like 'because' or 'since'.

例: Yes, I do. T-shirts are very practical and comfortable, since they’re lightweight and easy to move in when I exercise or run errands.

提案: This answer is unclear and too short. Respond directly with a full sentence, then add a short explanation or frequency detail. Use linking words if you give more than one sentence.

例: Not really. I usually pick my clothes quickly — about five to ten minutes — unless I have a special event, in which case I spend more time choosing an outfit.

提案: Make the structure clearer: give a direct topic sentence, then support with specific contrasts. Correct small grammar issues and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'whereas' to make contrasts clearer.

例: Yes, I do. On weekdays I dress more neatly because I go to school and meet people, whereas at the weekend I wear much more casual clothes like jeans and hoodies to relax.

提案: This is a strong answer. To improve further, add a brief personal example of how you use those colours or mention a favourite item in a neutral colour to make it more specific. Keep it concise and natural.

例: I prefer neutral colours like gray, black, and white because they’re versatile and easy to mix. For instance, I often wear a black jacket with different shirts because it goes with almost everything and looks neat.

× I like casual clothes because I feel relaxed and comfortable when wearing it.

✓ I like casual clothes because I feel relaxed and comfortable when I wear them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect for the plural noun 'clothes'; use 'them'. Also include the subject 'I' before 'wear' to form a clear clause: 'when I wear them'.

× I will say the comfortable and casual clothes because I I feel relaxed and convenient when wearing them.

✓ I would say comfortable, casual clothes because I feel relaxed and comfortable when I wear them.

Use 'would say' as a polite response rather than 'will say'. 'Convenient' is incorrect to describe a person feeling; 'comfortable' is appropriate. Also remove the extra 'I'. Keep subject 'I' before 'wear' and use plural pronoun 'them' for 'clothes'.

× Uh, I often wear jeans and a a hoodie at the weekend because.

✓ I often wear jeans and a hoodie at the weekend.

The fragment ends with 'because' but provides no clause; drop 'because' to complete the sentence. Remove the duplicated article 'a a'.

× I will say yes because it's, uh, MMM. Because they practical and easy to move in.

✓ I would say yes because T-shirts are practical and easy to move in.

Replace 'it's' with 'T-shirts are' to match plural subject. 'They practical' lacks the verb 'are'. Use 'would say' for polite response and remove filler sounds.

× Yay.

✓ Yes, I do.

'Yay' is informal and does not answer the question clearly. Use 'Yes, I do' to provide a grammatically complete response to 'Do you spend a lot of time choosing clothes?'.

× Umm absolutely yes, because on weekdays I have to go to school and meet friends and meet other people. So I make I always make sure that I look good but weekends normal.

✓ Absolutely yes. On weekdays I have to go to school and meet people, so I always make sure that I look good, but weekends are more casual.

Remove filler words and duplicate 'make'. Combine clauses clearly: use 'so' to show result. 'Weekends normal' is ungrammatical; use 'weekends are more casual' to complete the comparison and include the verb 'are'.

× I prefer neutral colours such as Gray, black and white because they are versatile and easy to mix with other items.

✓ I prefer neutral colours such as gray, black, and white because they are versatile and easy to mix with other items.

Capitalization: 'gray' should be lowercase unless starting a sentence. Add a comma before 'and' in a list for clarity. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× I find them practical for work and everyday wear, and they always look clean and timeless.

✓ I find them practical for work and everyday wear, and they always look clean and timeless.

No correction needed; pronoun 'them' correctly refers to 'neutral colours' or 'clothes'. This is retained for completeness.