Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more natural and concise: state your main idea first, then give one clear reason with a specific example. Correct grammar (use 'depends on', 'crowded places', 'longer clothes' or 'more covered clothes') and avoid repetition.

例: It depends on where I’m going. For crowded places I usually wear more covered, modest clothes because they make me feel comfortable and protected. For example, when I take the subway I prefer long sleeves and loose trousers rather than revealing outfits.

提案: Be direct in your topic sentence and use clear contrast words (however, but). Fix grammar (use 'prefer comfortable clothes to smart clothes', 'make me feel'). Give a specific situation to support your preference.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes to smart or revealing outfits. For instance, when I’m meeting friends or going shopping I choose soft fabrics and loose fits because they help me move freely and feel less anxious in crowds.

提案: Clarify whether T-shirts are formal—they usually are casual. Use two to three sentences: a clear opinion and one reason with an example. Correct grammar (use 'comfortable clothing', 'feel more confident and safer').

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to style. For example, I often pair a plain T-shirt with jeans when I want a simple outfit that makes me feel relaxed and confident.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer, then give a specific example. Avoid vague phrases and fix grammar (use 'when I’m going to a gala', 'it makes me feel more confident'). Keep within three sentences.

例: Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes, especially for special events. For example, before a gala I’ll try on several outfits to find one that’s both stylish and comfortable because that makes me feel more confident.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear contrast between weekday and weekend choices. Use linking words (usually, however) and correct phrasing ('in my case' not 'in my science'). Provide one concrete example.

例: Yes, I usually dress more casually on weekends and more neatly on weekdays. For example, I wear a blouse and trousers for school but prefer jeans and a hoodie when I relax at home or meet friends.

提案: Be concise: state the colours you prefer and one or two clear reasons. Fix grammar ('neutral and dark colours', 'emphasize my skin tone', 'make me feel confident'). Avoid repetition and vague praise words.

例: I prefer neutral and dark colours, like navy, black and beige, because they suit my skin tone and are easy to mix and match. Wearing these colours makes me feel more confident and polished.

× It actually depends to the places where I am up to go.

✓ It actually depends on the places I am going to.

Use 'depend on', not 'depend to'. Also 'where I am up to go' is ungrammatical; use 'I am going to' to indicate destination. Keep sentence simple and direct.

× For the places with crowded people, I tend to wear clothes with clothes ended because it gives me the feeling of being safe and comfortable because it has so much people surrounds me.

✓ For crowded places, I tend to wear full-coverage clothes because they make me feel safe and comfortable when there are many people around me.

Simplify phrase: 'places with crowded people' -> 'crowded places'. 'Clothes with clothes ended' is incorrect; use 'full-coverage clothes'. Verb agreement: 'it has so much people surrounds me' is wrong; use 'there are many people around me'. Ensure plural agreement and clear subject-verb structure.

× I like to wear different kinds of clothes. However, I tend to prefer to wear comfortable coats than the smart clothes or the revealing clothes because comfortable clothes makes me so much safer when I'm around of people.

✓ I like to wear different kinds of clothes. However, I prefer comfortable clothes to smart or revealing clothes because comfortable clothes make me feel much safer when I'm around people.

'Prefer A to B' is the correct structure, not 'prefer to wear A than B'. 'Coats' may be wrong choice if general; use 'clothes'. Subject-verb agreement: 'comfortable clothes makes' should be 'comfortable clothes make'. Remove 'around of people' -> 'around people'. Use 'much safer' for comparative.

× Of course, I do like wearing T-shirts especially. It is a formal and very comfortable cloth to wear on.

✓ Of course, I especially like wearing T-shirts. They are very comfortable and suitable for casual wear.

Word order: 'do like wearing T-shirts especially' -> 'especially like wearing T-shirts'. 'It is a formal' is incorrect because T-shirts are informal; replace with accurate adjective. 'Cloth' should be 'clothes' or 'garment'. 'To wear on' is unnecessary.

× It makes my body feel more confident and feel more safer than the other clothes to wear.

✓ They make me feel more confident and safer than other clothes.

Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to T-shirts. 'Feel more safer' is redundant; use 'safer'. 'My body feel more confident' is awkward; say 'make me feel more confident'.

× As a teenage girl who lives in this generation, of course I do spend a lot of time choosing my clothes, especially when I'm about to have a gala with the places that I'm up to.

✓ As a teenage girl of this generation, I do spend a lot of time choosing my clothes, especially when I'm about to attend a gala or go to an event.

Use 'of this generation' rather than 'who lives in this generation'. 'Have a gala with the places that I'm up to' is ungrammatical; use 'attend a gala or go to an event'.

× And it makes me so much confident when I wear a cloth that I chose is more comfortable and relaxing at the same time.

✓ It makes me much more confident when I wear a garment I chose that is both comfortable and relaxing.

Avoid starting sentence with 'And'. 'So much confident' should be 'much more confident'. 'Wear a cloth that I chose is more comfortable' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'a garment I chose that is both comfortable and relaxing'.

× Yes, of course people tend to wear different styles of clothes in everydays, but in my case or in my science, I tend to wear different styles of clothes depending on my mood and depending on what event I am going to.

✓ Yes, of course people tend to wear different styles of clothes every day, but in my case I choose styles depending on my mood and the event I am going to.

Use 'every day' (two words) not 'everydays'. Remove unclear phrases 'in my science'. Simplify repetition 'depending on' to 'depending on my mood and the event'.

× I love the neutral and dark color clothes because it emphasizes my looks and my skins and it makes me so much more confident and safe because it gives me a wonderful look and it gives me such a nice decent looking.

✓ I love neutral and dark-coloured clothes because they flatter my appearance and skin, and they make me feel more confident and secure because they give me a neat, attractive look.

Use plural agreement: 'they' not 'it'. 'Color' should be 'coloured' or 'colored' consistently; use hyphen if needed. 'My skins' -> 'my skin'. 'So much more confident and safe' -> 'more confident and secure'. Avoid redundant phrases like 'gives me such a nice decent looking' and replace with 'neat, attractive look'.