Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid informal fillers and incorrect phrases (e.g. "blistering holiday"). Use one linking word to contrast two situations and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: It depends on the weather. In hot weather I usually wear T-shirts because they are comfortable and keep me cool, but in cold weather I prefer sweaters because they keep me warm.

提案: Good content and reasons—reduce informal filler (“You know?”) and improve phrasing ("I tend to prefer"). Use one linking word to connect reason and consequence, and keep sentences varied but concise.

例: I tend to prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I do sport almost every day, so I need to move freely. As a result, I rarely worry about dressing smartly.

提案: Answer is enthusiastic but has grammar and vocabulary errors and some unclear phrases. Start with a direct statement, then give a clear reason with correct tense and wording. Avoid unrelated comments about friends and fix errors ("Is it in summer?" "boring hot" "I will AT shirt").

例: Yes, I do. In summer the temperature in my city can reach 40°C, so I wear T-shirts almost every day because they keep me cool, and I have done that since I was a child.

提案: Clear idea but contains informal phrase and a confusing idiom (“type is money”). Remove fillers, correct the idiom, and provide a concise reason with an example. Use one linking word to add the extra reason.

例: Not really. I'm a creature of habit and wear the same brands, which saves time. Also, I prefer to save money for studying and social activities, so I don't spend long choosing clothes.

提案: Good structure and clear contrast. Reduce informal language (“Yeah,” “You know,” “chill mode”) and slightly vary vocabulary to sound more natural. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear simple clothes like T-shirts and trousers so I can be comfortable while studying, but at weekends I dress up more when I go out with friends to relax and socialise.

提案: Strong answer: direct, specific and varied. Improve slightly by removing filler (“Well”) and using one linking phrase to show contrast between usual choices and occasional changes.

例: I usually wear black and grey because they match easily, but I sometimes choose dark blue or white. Occasionally I try brighter colours to look more lively and energetic.

× Well, it really depends on the weather, right? If it's a blistering holiday, I prefer wearing T-shirts because they are really comfy and help me stay cool.

✓ Well, it really depends on the weather, right? If it's a blistering hot day, I prefer to wear T-shirts because they are really comfy and help me stay cool.

'Blistering holiday' is incorrect word choice and collocation; the speaker likely means 'blistering hot day'. Also, in present tense general statements, 'prefer to wear' is more natural than 'prefer wearing'. Use the noun 'day' with 'blistering hot' to describe weather.

× However, if it's freezing cold, I tend to wear things like sweaters because they keep me warm.

✓ However, if it's freezing cold, I tend to wear sweaters because they keep me warm.

'Wear things like sweaters' is wordy and unnatural in this context. Use simple present habitual form 'I tend to wear sweaters' to match the present tense and make the sentence more natural.

× I need more towards wearing comfortable clothes because I'm an outdoorsy type and I do sports pretty much every day.

✓ I lean more towards wearing comfortable clothes because I'm an outdoorsy type and I do sports pretty much every day.

Incorrect phrase 'I need more towards' should be 'I lean more towards' to express preference in present tense. 'Lean towards' is the correct verb phrase for preferences.

× You know? If the clothes I'm wearing are uncomfortable, I can't focus or move around freely.

✓ If the clothes I'm wearing are uncomfortable, I can't focus or move around freely.

The standalone 'You know?' is informal and disrupts sentence flow. Removing it keeps the sentence grammatically correct and clear. The conditional structure is fine.

× On top of that, I'm not a fashion conscious person so I don't pay much attention to looking smart.

✓ On top of that, I'm not a fashion-conscious person, so I don't pay much attention to looking smart.

Compound adjective 'fashion-conscious' needs a hyphen when placed before a noun. Also add a comma before 'so' to join two independent clauses correctly.

× Definitely yes, most of my friends like wearing them and I'm no exception.

✓ Definitely yes; most of my friends like wearing them and I'm no exception.

Add appropriate punctuation; sentence structure is acceptable but a semicolon or period improves clarity. Tense and verb forms are correct.

× Is it in summer? The weather In my city it gets boring hot and the temperature can even reach up to 40° so I will AT shirt almost every day and I've been doing this ever since I was a child.

✓ Is it in summer? The weather in my city gets unbearably hot and the temperature can even reach 40°C, so I wear T-shirts almost every day and I've been doing this ever since I was a child.

Multiple issues: capitalization ('In'->'in'), word choice ('boring hot' -> 'unbearably hot'), remove 'it' after 'weather' to avoid redundancy, 'reach up to 40°' should specify '40°C' and omit 'up to'. 'I will AT shirt' is garbled; correct to present habitual 'I wear T-shirts'. The present perfect 'I've been doing this ever since...' is correct to describe a continuing habit.

× Not really. I'm a creature of habit so I tend to wear the same kinds of clothes from the same brands, which saves me a lot of time.

✓ Not really. I'm a creature of habit, so I tend to wear the same kinds of clothes from the same brands, which saves me a lot of time.

Add a comma before 'so' to join clauses; otherwise the sentence is correct. No article change needed.

× On top of that, you know, type is money, so I'd rather spend it on more important things such as studying, spending time with my friends and family, or just relaxing.

✓ On top of that, you know, time is money, so I'd rather spend it on more important things such as studying, spending time with my friends and family, or just relaxing.

Word choice error: 'type is money' should be 'time is money'. Rest of sentence is fine.

× Yeah, I do. You know, on weekdays I tend to wear something simple like T-shirts and trousers because I want to feel comfortable and focus on my studies.

✓ Yeah, I do. On weekdays I tend to wear something simple like T-shirts and trousers because I want to feel comfortable and focus on my studies.

Removing 'You know' improves formality and clarity; the present tense 'tend to wear' matches habitual action and is correct.

× But on weekends, I like to dress up a little, especially when I go out with my friends.

✓ On weekends, I like to dress up a little, especially when I go out with my friends.

Beginning with 'But' is informal; removing it gives a smoother sentence. Tense and verbs are correct.

× Well, I really like wearing black and grey because they are easy to match almost anything.

✓ Well, I really like wearing black and grey because they are easy to match with almost anything.

Missing preposition 'with' after 'match'. Use 'match with' or simply 'go with' to indicate compatibility.

× Sometimes I also wear dark blue or white for a change.

✓ Sometimes I also wear dark blue or white for a change.

This sentence is correct; present tense habitual use is appropriate.

× Every now and then I like to try brighter colors because they make me look more lively and energetic.

✓ Every now and then I like to try brighter colors because they make me look livelier and more energetic.

Comparative form: 'more lively' is acceptable but 'livelier' is more concise. Using 'livelier and more energetic' is a parallel, natural phrasing.