Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence stating the kind of clothes you like, avoid repetition and incorrect words, and give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g. "clothes," not "laws") and sentence endings are important. Keep answers within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer lightweight, comfortable clothes. For example, I usually wear loose cotton shirts and shorts because I live in the hot Philippines, so breathable fabrics help me stay cool and avoid sweating.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition of previous content. Use a clear contrast if mentioning exceptions (e.g., when going out). Use linking words (however, but) to connect ideas and give one specific example of a smart outfit if relevant.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes, especially loose cotton shirts, because of the hot weather. However, when I go out to a nicer place, I sometimes choose smart-casual outfits such as a polo shirt and chinos.

提案: Give a direct yes/no and a brief explanation. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect questions inside your answer. Use correct adjectives (e.g. "breathable" instead of unclear words) and provide a specific detail such as colour or fabric.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially blue cotton ones. They are breathable and comfortable, which is ideal in hot weather.

提案: Be more precise and concise: say how much time you spend and why, and give one specific example of choices you make. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid fillers like "like" and repeated synonyms.

例: Yes, I often spend 15–30 minutes choosing an outfit when I go out with friends because I like to look fashionable. For example, I might pick trendy jeans and a stylish shirt to match my personal style.

提案: Give a clear main sentence and then contrast weekday vs weekend with a linking word (but). Be specific about typical weekday and weekend outfits and limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Not really; my basic style stays the same. During weekdays I usually wear loose cotton shirts at home or to run errands, but on weekends I choose trendier outfits if I go out with friends.

提案: Good: direct answer with reason. To improve, add one brief example and a linking word (for example, because), and avoid vague claims like "makes my skin glow" without clarification. Keep it concise.

例: I usually wear white or pastel colours because they look fresh and suit my skin tone. For example, I often choose a pastel blue shirt or a white T-shirt for a clean, comfortable look.

× As of now, the kind of laws that I like to wear are those clothes which are comfortable and weird 'cause as you know, I am living in a country that is super hot, which is the Philippines, so very close that are comfortable. It helps me not to sweat and.

✓ As of now, the kind of clothes that I like to wear are ones that are comfortable and lightweight because I am living in a country that is very hot, the Philippines, so I choose clothes that keep me from sweating.

The student used incorrect words and adjective forms ('laws', 'weird', 'very close') and awkward phrasing. Replace 'laws' with 'clothes', 'weird' with 'lightweight' or 'loose' to convey intended meaning, and rephrase 'so very close that are comfortable' to 'so I choose clothes that keep me from sweating.' Keep present continuous 'I am living' consistent. Suggestion: use clear adjectives that match meaning and restructure sentence for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13

× As I've said in the previous question, I prefer to wear comfortable clothes as of now like clothes which are buildable and those loose cotton shirts which help me more comfortable since I am living in a hot country which is the Philippines but when I am going out.

✓ As I said in the previous question, I prefer to wear comfortable clothes for now, such as breathable items and loose cotton shirts that make me more comfortable since I live in a hot country, the Philippines, especially when I go out.

Problems: 'buildable' is incorrect word choice (likely 'breathable' or 'lightweight'), 'help me more comfortable' is incorrect adjective/adverb use — use 'make me more comfortable' or 'help me feel more comfortable', and tense/phrasing simplified ('As I said', 'I live', 'when I go out'). Suggestion: choose correct descriptive adjectives and use verbs like 'make' with adjective 'comfortable'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× More like I like to wear blue cotton shirts, does it help me to bleed more? And it is comfortable when it's weird.

✓ I prefer to wear blue cotton shirts because they help me stay cool and comfortable.

The original contains multiple errors: 'More like' is informal and unclear; 'does it help me to bleed more?' is nonsensical and likely a wrong word ('breathe' or 'cool' intended); 'it is comfortable when it's weird' uses 'weird' incorrectly. Correct by using clear cause ('because they help me stay cool and comfortable') and appropriate verbs. Suggestion: use precise vocabulary (breathe/breathable, cool, comfortable) and concise sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yes, I do spend like a lot of time with using clothes, especially when I am going out with my friends because usually I like my clothes to be fashionable, trendy, stylish, because that is my move, that is my personality.

✓ Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes, especially when I go out with my friends, because I usually like my outfits to be fashionable, trendy, and stylish; that reflects my personality.

Errors: awkward phrasing 'spend like a lot of time with using clothes' — use 'spend a lot of time choosing clothes'. Repetition and filler 'that is my move' is colloquial; replace with 'that reflects my personality.' Improve flow and punctuation. Suggestion: remove fillers, use appropriate verbs ('choose') and clearer linking phrases. Grammar problem type ID:26

× No, I don't. I usually wear some loose cotton shirts when I am at my home and when I am going out I am wearing those trendy outfits that will make me stylish and fashionable.

✓ No, I don't. I usually wear loose cotton shirts at home, and when I go out I wear trendy outfits that make me look stylish and fashionable.

Overuse of progressive form 'I am wearing' and awkward 'when I am at my home' — simple present ('I wear') is appropriate for habitual actions. Use 'at home' instead of 'at my home' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use simple present for regular habits and avoid unnecessary continuous tenses. Grammar problem type ID:8

× I usually wear white or pastel colored clothes because I notice that it makes my skin glow more and it makes me comfortable and fashionable.

✓ I usually wear white or pastel-colored clothes because I have noticed that they make my skin look brighter and make me feel comfortable and fashionable.

Problems: 'pastel colored' needs a hyphen 'pastel-colored' (compound adjective), subject-verb agreement with plural 'clothes' requires 'they make' rather than 'it makes', and 'skin glow more' is better as 'skin look brighter'. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use hyphen for compound adjectives when needed; prefer 'feel comfortable' to 'make me comfortable' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13