Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and add 1–2 specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid one-word contrasts; explain when or why you prefer each style to make the answer more informative and natural.

例: I like both casual and formal clothes. For example, I choose casual outfits like jeans and a loose top at the weekend because they are comfortable, while I wear formal clothes such as a blazer and dress trousers for work to look professional.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then use linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "however") to provide specific reasons and examples for each situation. This will make your explanation clearer and more coherent.

例: I like both; however, it depends on where I am going. For instance, I wear smart clothes to meetings because they create a professional impression, but I choose comfortable clothes for shopping or relaxing at home because they are easier to move in.

提案: Begin with a clear, concise answer, then explain briefly and specifically. Avoid filler sounds and grammatical errors (e.g., "can't wear T-shirts" and "that don't show"). Use one cohesive sentence for clarity.

例: No, I don't usually wear T-shirts because, as someone who wears a hijab, I prefer tops that don't show my arms or body; instead I choose long-sleeved blouses or loose dresses that offer full coverage.

提案: Provide a direct answer and then give a short, specific reason using correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases with precise actions (e.g., "coordinate colors" or "match hijab styles").

例: Yes, I do. I often spend extra time coordinating outfits and matching my hijab style and colors to create a polished look.

提案: Correct grammar and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words ("because", "while", "so") and give one specific example for each period (weekday vs weekend).

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear formal clothes such as tailored shirts and trousers for work, while at weekends I prefer casual, comfortable outfits like loose pants and a cosy top.

提案: Give a clear opening statement then specify 2–3 favourite colours with correct vocabulary and a brief reason. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect words ("grey Ant" is unclear).

例: I like all colours, but I especially prefer darker shades such as brown, forest green and grey because they are versatile and hide stains well.

× I like both, but it depends on the place that I'm going to.

✓ I like both, but it depends on the place I am going to.

Unnecessary use of relative pronoun 'that' after 'place' is awkward. Omitting 'that' produces a more natural relative clause: 'the place I am going to.' Keep tense present continuous 'am going' to match ongoing or planned action.

× No, I can't wear T-shirt because I'm wearing hijab, so I need something to wear that's, uh, doesn't show my arms or my body.

✓ No, I can't wear a T-shirt because I wear a hijab, so I need something to wear that doesn't show my arms or my body.

Article: 'a T-shirt' requires the indefinite article. 'Hijab' usually takes an article 'a' or 'the' depending on context; here 'a hijab' or 'wear a hijab' is natural; present simple 'I wear a hijab' is better for habitual fact than 'I'm wearing hijab'. Also remove comma before 'doesn't' and use 'that doesn't' (not 'that's, uh, doesn't'). Contraction and filler removed for clarity.

× Yes, I need time to choose or styling my clothes with my hijab style so it's taking a lot of time.

✓ Yes, I need time to choose or style my clothes with my hijab, so it takes a lot of time.

After 'to' use base form 'style' not gerund 'styling.' Also 'so it takes a lot of time' is clearer than 'it's taking a lot of time' for habitual action. Simplify 'hijab style' to 'my hijab' or 'my hijab style' depending on meaning.

× Yes, in weekdays I usually wear a formal formal clothes, but it weekends I wear something casual and comfortable.

✓ Yes, on weekdays I usually wear formal clothes, but on weekends I wear something casual and comfortable.

Use preposition 'on' with 'weekdays' and 'weekends.' Remove duplicated word 'formal' and drop the article 'a' because 'formal clothes' is plural. Use parallel structure 'on weekdays... on weekends.'

× I like all colors but my favorite is dark color like brown, green such as a grey Ant.

✓ I like all colors, but my favorites are dark colors like brown and green, such as grey and navy.

Agreement: 'favorite' with 'colors' should match plurality. 'Dark color' becomes 'dark colors' and list items need conjunctions and correct nouns. 'Such as a grey Ant' is unclear and incorrect; replace with appropriate color examples like 'grey and navy.' Commas added for clarity.