Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct vocabulary, give one clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid mixed or incorrect terms (e.g. “cockpit dresses”) and redundant phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I usually wear casual clothes, such as T-shirts and trousers, because they are comfortable. However, I also like smart fitted outfits like blazers and gowns for formal events because they make me look professional and confident.

提案: Good direct answer and reasons. Improve by adding a brief linking phrase and a clearer expression for the second reason. Avoid vague wording like “a criteria for it.”

例: I prefer smart clothes because they boost my confidence and give a polished appearance. Besides, since I'm interested in fashion design, dressing smartly helps me practice styling and learn what works well.

提案: Answer is natural and specific. Improve grammar (plural/singular), add a linking word and one concrete example of an occasion to make it more vivid.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. For example, when I lived with my brother I received a lot of compliments, so I wore them more often. Also, I find them comfortable for casual outings like meeting friends or running errands.

提案: Answer the question fully and avoid trailing off. Give one clear reason and a brief specific example of what you consider when choosing clothes (colour, fit, material). Use linking words for clarity.

例: Yes, I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes, especially for work, because I want to look professional. For example, I check the fit and fabric of suits and choose neutral colours that match my shirts.

提案: Correct obvious vocabulary mistakes (e.g. “read” → “wear”, “carpet wears” → “corporate wear”, “hood” → “hoodie”). Keep answer concise and add a linking phrase to contrast weekdays and weekends.

例: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekdays I dress professionally, wearing corporate outfits like suits and dress pants; in contrast, at the weekend I prefer casual clothes such as jeans, chinos and hoodies.

提案: Be careful with repetitions and spelling (“Pop” → “purple”?). Provide one concise topic sentence and one specific memory as supporting detail, finishing the sentence. Use linking words to connect the reason.

例: I love purple because it always stood out to me as a child. For instance, when I was three my mother bought me a sparkly purple dress, and since then I have enjoyed wearing purple clothes.

× I prefer to wear casual dresses such as T-shirts and trousers because I feel comfortable with them and I also like to wear cockpit dresses because they make me look very smart and professional dresses like fitted gowns.

✓ I prefer to wear casual clothes such as T-shirts and trousers because I feel comfortable in them, and I also like to wear smart outfits because they make me look professional, such as fitted gowns.

The original mixes nouns and adjectives awkwardly and uses 'cockpit dresses' incorrectly (likely meant 'smart' or 'corporate'). 'Casual dresses' is unnatural when referring to general items like T-shirts and trousers; 'casual clothes' or 'casual outfits' is better. Use 'comfortable in them' not 'with them'. Combine clauses with commas and conjunctions and replace 'professional dresses like fitted gowns' with 'professional, such as fitted gowns' for clarity.

× I prefer to wear smart clothes because they boost my confidence and help me look good. I am also interested in fashion designing, so wearing smart clothes is a criteria for it.

✓ I prefer to wear smart clothes because they boost my confidence and help me look good. I am also interested in fashion design, so wearing smart clothes is a criterion for that.

'A criteria' is incorrect because 'criteria' is plural; the singular is 'criterion'. Also 'fashion designing' is better phrased as 'fashion design' in this context. Use 'that' instead of 'it' to refer back to the idea of fashion design.

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirt.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts.

When speaking generally about a type of item, use the plural form 'T-shirts' or the singular with an article 'a T-shirt'. The original used singular without an article, which is ungrammatical.

× I started wearing T-shirts more often when I lived with my brother because I got lot of compliments.

✓ I started wearing T-shirts more often when I lived with my brother because I got a lot of compliments.

Missing article 'a' before 'lot'. Also 'got a lot of compliments' is the correct phrasing. Tense 'started... when I lived' is fine.

× Secondly, I find them comfortable for every occasion.

✓ Secondly, I find them comfortable for many occasions.

'Every occasion' is an overgeneralization and sounds odd for T-shirts; 'many occasions' is more natural. Alternatively, keep 'comfortable for any occasion' if intended.

× I am very choosy when it comes to wearing corporate dresses and that is because I love to look good. I.

✓ I am very choosy when it comes to wearing corporate clothes, and that is because I love to look good.

Sentence ended with stray 'I.' Remove the fragment and replace 'corporate dresses' with 'corporate clothes' for naturalness. Combine clauses with a comma and 'and'.

× Yes, I read different styles of clothes on weekdays and on weekends.

✓ Yes, I wear different styles of clothes on weekdays and on weekends.

'Read' is incorrect verb here; context requires 'wear'. Use 'wear different styles' to indicate clothing choice.

× On weekdays I love to dress professionally so I wear carpet wears such as suits and pants.

✓ On weekdays I love to dress professionally, so I wear corporate wear such as suits and pants.

'Carpet wears' is a typo or mischoice; likely meant 'corporate wear' or 'corporate clothes'. Use 'corporate wear' for uncountable clothing category and add a comma before 'so'.

× Then in the weekend I wear casual wears like jeans, trousers and hood.

✓ Then on the weekend I wear casual clothes like jeans, trousers and hoodies.

Use 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend' depending on dialect; 'casual wears' is incorrect—use 'casual clothes'. 'Hood' is wrong; correct noun is 'hoodie' or 'hooded sweatshirt'.

× I love purple. Any clothes that have purple, I will definitely love it.

✓ I love purple. Any clothes that are purple, I will definitely love them.

Pronoun agreement issue: 'Any clothes' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'them' not 'it'. Also 'that have purple' is awkward; 'that are purple' is clearer.

× I started liking Pop when I was three years old because my mom got me a beautiful dress that is purple.

✓ I started liking purple when I was three years old because my mom got me a beautiful purple dress.

Likely intended 'purple' not 'Pop'. Combine 'purple dress' rather than 'dress that is purple' for concision. Tense 'started liking... when I was' is correct.

× It has a lot of glitters on it and.

✓ It had a lot of glitter on it.

Sentence fragment ending with 'and' is incomplete. Use past tense 'had' to match 'my mom got me' and 'glitter' is uncountable (not 'glitters'). Remove trailing 'and' or complete the clause.