Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid irrelevant references (e.g. Rihanna) unless they help, and give one or two specific supporting details about style and color. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

例: I prefer simple clothes that reflect my traditional culture. For example, I often choose plain white shirts and loose trousers because they are comfortable and respectful of my cultural style.

提案: Open with a clear preference sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Avoid repetition and incorrect word forms (“comfortability”). Use a linking word like because or so to make the logic clear.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they allow me to move freely. For instance, I usually wear cotton T-shirts and jeans when I go out because they are breathable and easy to wear.

提案: Give a fuller, coherent answer: state your preference, explain why with specific reasons (comfort, breathability), and give a short example of when you wear them. Avoid filler words like “uh”.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially in summer, because they are lightweight and breathable. For example, I wear a T-shirt when I go to the park or meet friends because it keeps me cool.

提案: Be specific about how much time and why. Use clear language and a logical structure: state how much time you spend, give one or two reasons, and give an example. Replace vague words like “numerous” with measurable descriptions (a long time, about 20 minutes).

例: Yes, I usually spend a long time choosing clothes because I want to make sure they fit well and match my style. For example, I often spend 20–30 minutes in a shop trying on a few different sizes and colors.

提案: Answer directly, then briefly explain why with clearer wording. Avoid irrelevant background (family background) unless it explains style choices. Use linking words like because or so.

例: No, I usually wear the same casual style on both weekdays and weekends because I prefer comfort. For example, I normally wear a T-shirt and casual trousers whether I am at work or at home.

提案: Be concise and use correct grammar: state which colors you like, give a clear reason (appearance, mood), and an example of when you wear them. Avoid inaccurate expressions (clothes reflecting light at night).

例: I like wearing black T-shirts and yellow jeans because black looks neat and yellow is bright and cheerful. For example, I wear black for formal events and yellow when I meet friends during the day.

× Usually, I like to wear the clothes that are simple and that are related to my traditional culture as I related to Rihanna that is famous for its cultural activities.

✓ Usually, I like to wear simple clothes related to my traditional culture, like the style Rihanna promotes because she is famous for her cultural activities.

Problems: unclear pronoun use ('as I related to Rihanna') and awkward clause order. Correction replaces unclear pronoun phrasing with 'like the style Rihanna promotes' and clarifies reason with 'because she is famous for her cultural activities'. Suggestion: keep subject and referent clear and place reason clauses after the main clause.

× I like to wear white clothes.

✓ I like to wear white clothes.

No grammatical error needing change. Sentence is correct: 'white' correctly modifies 'clothes'.

× Generally, I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes instead of smart clothes at.

✓ Generally, I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes instead of smart clothes.

Error: extraneous preposition 'at' and redundant wording. Correction removes 'at' and simplifies adjective order. Suggestion: avoid adding unnecessary prepositions at the end of sentences.

× Smart clothes do not provide flexibility and comfortability, and the comfortable and casual clothes provide flexibility.

✓ Smart clothes are less flexible and comfortable, while casual clothes provide more comfort and flexibility.

Problems: 'comfortability' is nonstandard; repetition and awkward contrast. Correction uses comparative language ('less', 'more') and standard nouns 'comfort' and 'flexibility'. Suggestion: use common nouns and comparatives for contrast.

× Good wearing at extra.

✓ They are not comfortable to wear for long periods.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Provide a clear, complete sentence that fits the context: explain that smart clothes are not comfortable for extended wear. Suggestion: ensure sentences have subject and verb and express a complete idea.

× Definitely yes. I like to wear T-shirts as uh.

✓ Definitely. I like to wear T-shirts.

Problems: filler 'uh' and unnecessary 'yes' after affirmation. Correction makes response concise and natural. Suggestion: avoid fillers in formal speech and keep short answers clear.

× In the summer, T-shirts provide flexibility and good weather conditions such as uh.

✓ In the summer, T-shirts are comfortable and suitable for hot weather.

Problems: 'provide good weather conditions' is incorrect; filler 'uh'. Correction uses appropriate verbs and adjectives: 'are comfortable' and 'suitable for hot weather'. Suggestion: describe clothing properties, not weather.

× Well, I spend numerous time in choosing clothes as I cannot think anything at the time and I take a lot of time to think anything to choose.

✓ Well, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I cannot decide quickly and I need time to think about my choices.

Errors: 'numerous time' is incorrect quantifier and repetition. 'think anything' is ungrammatical. Correction uses 'a lot of time' and clarifies reason with 'cannot decide quickly'. Suggestion: use standard quantifiers ('a lot of', 'many') and clear verbs for thinking/deciding.

× So I take numerous time to choose clothes in the shopping mall.

✓ So I take a lot of time choosing clothes at the shopping mall.

Issues: 'numerous time' incorrect and preposition choice 'in the shopping mall' is acceptable but 'at the shopping mall' is more natural for shopping activity. Correction fixes quantifier and preposition. Suggestion: use 'a lot of time' and prefer 'at' for locations where activities occur.

× No, I do not wear different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends.

✓ No, I do not wear different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends.

Sentence is grammatically correct and matches meaning; no change needed.

× As I have told you earlier, I belong to a middle family background and I wear only traditional clothes such as normal T-shirts and casual pants.

✓ As I told you earlier, I come from a middle-class family background, and I usually wear traditional clothes like plain T-shirts and casual pants.

Problems: 'belong to a middle family background' is nonstandard; 'normal T-shirts' is awkward. Correction uses 'come from a middle-class family background' and 'plain T-shirts'. Suggestion: use 'come from' for background and 'middle-class' as standard adjective.

× I like to wear black color of T-shirt and yellow color of jeans as yellow and black both are shining and reflects the light in the day and also in the light night.

✓ I like to wear black T-shirts and yellow jeans because both colors are bright and reflect light during the day and at night.

Errors: 'black color of T-shirt' and 'yellow color of jeans' are wordy; 'shining and reflects' subject-verb disagreement and 'light night' incorrect. Correction simplifies noun phrases, fixes subject-verb agreement ('both colors are bright and reflect'), and corrects 'at night'. Suggestion: use concise color phrases ('black T-shirt'), ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'at night' for nighttime.